Comment from tfawcus

Excellent

Love the rhythm of this, just perfect for the titivating sense of fun in your invitation! Seduction at its best! The humour is absolutely delicious and the wistful "Would that be alright?" at the end is the icing on the cake. I hate to say this as one of the competitors, but I think you may have a winner here!

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 Comment Written 22-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014

LOL Tony :) Thank you so much for your wonderful feedback! Glad you enjoyed this one - I think Shaun (my husband) would have to pinch himself if I came downstairs after putting the kids to bed and DIDN"T flop onto the sofa with a massive sigh, let alone be dressed to impress! All his birthdays would arrive at the same time!
Kindest regards as always :) Debra

Comment from gypsycaravan

Excellent

Oh,would my hubby love you. Instead, he is married to a tire old woman. Ha.
Clever little poem. Hope you both get lucky tonight.

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 Comment Written 22-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014

LOL! Fat chance of that gypsycaravan! I'm logged on here and he is playing on our son's new xbox game haha! Maybe tomorrow ;)
Thank you for your great feedback - and I'm sure your husband is more than happy with you :) Kindest regards as always, Debra