Comment from seaglass

Excellent

Wonderful, wonderful rhyme here and from the mind and feelings of a child. This is a great horror poem as it reminds us of the inner child who had to overcome that fear of the boogy-man...or did we?

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014

Thank you for the fantastic review, seaglass. It's not actually from the point of view of a child. It's written from the view of the kidnapper. I really appreciate the gracious stars. I'm glad you liked the piece.

reply by seaglass on 27-Jul-2014

Ahhh. now I get it. Right...the modern problem of intruders taking children. Sorry I misunderstood.

I must have been in a fanciful mood, remembering my own fears of the boogy man as child. My Dad had to remove my closet doors so that I would sleep in my room.

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

stunning presentation of your poem
excellent abcb rhyming
vivid and horrific descriptive detail
good alliteration in phrases like tarnished tub and so still in silent
this definitely is horror, as required :-) Brooke

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014

Thank you so much for the fantastic review, Brooke. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars. I'm glad you liked this twisted piece.

Comment from Trybuck

Excellent

You go ahead and stalk your prey
You evil boogety boogy man
It won't be long for you get yours
On that truth I take my stand

Well done with your entry, Buck

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014

Thank you for the great review, Buck.

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

Ooooooooo very good...and I know where the boogey man lives ....at my grandfathers house....There was an outhouse boogey man....got me ...scared the poop right out of me I had to wait 30 seconds to hear it drop..
There was an under the bed boogey man too where the chamber pot was...yikes.....I believe...thanks for your poem
God bless

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014

Thank you for the fantastic review, Jenny. I really appreciate the gracious stars. I'm glad you liked this twisted piece.

Comment from Acquired Taste

Exceptional

This is terrific. First the presentation of the pale colored type on the black background and that very scary eye, perfectly sets the tone for this piece.

This flows very nicely - it does off my tongue - and the rhyming is excellent. Love your last line!

I wonder if my neighbor will check my closet and under my bed tonight?

Best of luck in this contest. AT=/

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014

Thank you for the fantastic review and the huge sixer, AT. I dearly appreciate the gracious rating. I'm humbled. I'm glad you liked this twisted piece. Thank you again.

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi,

This is q really good poem! The eyeball, and then the black background adds to the creepy, give you the willies feeling!

Great job.

Good luck in the contest.

Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014

Thank you for the fantastic review, Jax. I really appreciate the generous stars and good luck wishes. I'm glad you liked the piece.

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

Yeah there is! This is a perfect example of the horror poem that is called for here. The subtle sarcasm adds to the boogeyman's sinister appeal in your verse.

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014

Thank you for the excellent review, Bill. I really appreciate the generous stars. I'm glad you liked this twisted piece.

Comment from Drew Delaney

Excellent

This is spooky and full of horror. I like it but don't like it at the same time. Best wishes in the contest. It is well written, but the subject matter is only good for this contest. Yikes, I'm out of here.

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014

Thank you for the great review, Drew. I really appreciate the generous stars. Yeah, the content is only good for this contest, lol.

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

Nice work! This was eerie and creepy, Poet 'X'. An excellent way to play on that childhood phobia that so many had about the proverbial monster beneath the bed, or the boogeyman in the closet. He comes in all different manifestations, but every single one of them are just as terrifying as another.

Great rhyme, meter, flow, tempo, and presentation as well.

I wish you all the very best of luck in the contest, although I doubt very seriously you'll need it. Now, if you'll excuse me, I have to go turn on my nite-lite, heh-heh...

Great work!

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014

Thank you for the fantastic review, Dean. Yeah, I have to throw a good horror one in there once in a while. I just wish there would have been more takers in the contest. Oh well, what can you do? I'm glad you liked this twisted thing, friend. Thank you again.

Oh yeah, when it's a blind contest, even if you know who it is, you really shouldn't use their name so as to keep it blind. I know it's not that hard to figure out though. Whenever someone sponsors a blind contest I'm in, I just click on their name to see what they entered. But for the site's sake I'm just saying...

Thanks again, D. Have a good one.

reply by Dean Kuch on 27-Jul-2014

You got it, and I will edit the name out if I can.

Comment from Set in Stone

Excellent

You certainly wouldn't want to read this one to a child at bed-time! It IS truly scary.That bouncy rhythm seems to add to the sinister nature of the speaker - it's as if he's talking in a casual manner about something horrible. I especially like "the freezer's full of heads". What a ghastly image, but a very strong one in this case. This is wonderfully horrific!

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014

Thank you for the fantastic review, SiS. I really appreciate the generous stars. I'm glad you liked this twisted piece.