To Cherish Thorns
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "With Head Held High"Free Verse Poetry
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Comment from Leineco
They say that pride goeth before the fall. They say that revenge never lessens the pain. They say if you love something, let it go. . .
They say this too shall pass.
I say - nothing is ever as simple as a platitude.
(if it were, we wouldn't have these nagging doubts and complications)
Here on the coast - we say:
Life's a beach,
and then you die.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2014
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They say that pride goeth before the fall. They say that revenge never lessens the pain. They say if you love something, let it go. . .
They say this too shall pass.
I say - nothing is ever as simple as a platitude.
(if it were, we wouldn't have these nagging doubts and complications)
Here on the coast - we say:
Life's a beach,
and then you die.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2014
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It is a beach indeed. Not so sure about the dying. I'm working on disproving that. Wish me luck!! mikey
Comment from krys123
Mikey, I sure really like this poem you are composed and written for all of us. Your form utilized and formulated a well structured piece of poetry we you are explaining the exceptional qualities of yourself but in turn it seems these qualities overlooked by the woman that you chairs to have.
I almost consider this poem Like a letter written to the opposing man who gained a woman that you so held dear for yourself. Again your written format, scheme and structure of your poem is your signature as a writer. Truly one of the very interesting poems I've read from your style. Thank you for sharing and posting this Mikey for everyone to read and may you have a good one whatever you do and wherever you go.
Alex
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2014
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Mikey, I sure really like this poem you are composed and written for all of us. Your form utilized and formulated a well structured piece of poetry we you are explaining the exceptional qualities of yourself but in turn it seems these qualities overlooked by the woman that you chairs to have.
I almost consider this poem Like a letter written to the opposing man who gained a woman that you so held dear for yourself. Again your written format, scheme and structure of your poem is your signature as a writer. Truly one of the very interesting poems I've read from your style. Thank you for sharing and posting this Mikey for everyone to read and may you have a good one whatever you do and wherever you go.
Alex
Comment Written 16-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2014
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Great encouraging words. So very appreciated. Some great insights you have here that I enjoyed reading. Right on the money. I've been reading your postings lately and they are wonderful. I'm trying to get caught up so I can get some reviews in. I got way behind in march and it's been like quicksand! Thank you so much. Many blessings to you and yours, mikey
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You are so sincerely welcome Mikey.
Alex
Comment from ProjectBluebook
Gives you that mysterious feeling. Purple words on a black background is a good effect. The way you bend the words like a word-bender. I like dubious dignity. arbesque, spindled and sprawled. I focus on the intangibles. Anyone can conquor SPAG if they study hard enough. Them ,.?!_=+ "" never troubled me that much. The heart of a poet is not just perfect words from manmade rules but poetry, coming from the heart. You got what most seek and some become jealous, they may be word wizards but they have not the gift they want. they will sander your name to bring you down. This looks like art. It was also a pleasure to read. Count your doubloons Sir Mikey.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2014
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Gives you that mysterious feeling. Purple words on a black background is a good effect. The way you bend the words like a word-bender. I like dubious dignity. arbesque, spindled and sprawled. I focus on the intangibles. Anyone can conquor SPAG if they study hard enough. Them ,.?!_=+ "" never troubled me that much. The heart of a poet is not just perfect words from manmade rules but poetry, coming from the heart. You got what most seek and some become jealous, they may be word wizards but they have not the gift they want. they will sander your name to bring you down. This looks like art. It was also a pleasure to read. Count your doubloons Sir Mikey.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2014
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I never thought I'd get my brain around commas and all that, but I actually just kept correcting and correcting and now I only get a couple pointed out a piece anymore, sometimes none. I went through a phase where I didn't put commas anywhere and then I had one where I put them everywhere. Hahaha. I just keep writing. Glad you liked this one. Back to my normal style. mikey
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Thanks for the tips. I will review tonight, I saw your messages and posts.
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi Michael,
This is really impactful. Like it a lot! In fact I read it twice after the surprise ending. Great job!
~~ TYPOS??? ~
Shall I rise to [great](greet)
the [grand](grand)new day
Cheers,
Keep Smilin'.... Jax
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reply by the author on 16-Jun-2014
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Hi Michael,
This is really impactful. Like it a lot! In fact I read it twice after the surprise ending. Great job!
~~ TYPOS??? ~
Shall I rise to [great](greet)
the [grand](grand)new day
Cheers,
Keep Smilin'.... Jax
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Comment Written 16-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2014
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Thank you kindly, glad you liked it. Good catch, yes I did mean greet. But, I did intend Grand! Mikey
Comment from reconciled
"carelessly tossed anvils weigh me down...."well dones"...ect....Hey Mike...-smile- great write as usual. Girl implies innocents ...some surprises are blessings in disguise....and some chosen sin become shadow. love Michael
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2014
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"carelessly tossed anvils weigh me down...."well dones"...ect....Hey Mike...-smile- great write as usual. Girl implies innocents ...some surprises are blessings in disguise....and some chosen sin become shadow. love Michael
Comment Written 16-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2014
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So pleased you enjoyed. Feels good to write in the style that is natural for me. And by the way... WhhhhOOOOOOOOOOOOHhhhhhhOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO LOVE YOUUUU mikey!
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lol.....alright....haha
Comment from seaglass
My take on this: This is poem depicting someone who has lost in love but refuses to lose pride. I agree. I've always contended that if someone did not want me, why grovel as love is only true love when it's balanced.
The first line m ay need attention...
"Shall I rise to (great) the grand new day?" Did you mean to say (greet)?
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reply by the author on 16-Jun-2014
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My take on this: This is poem depicting someone who has lost in love but refuses to lose pride. I agree. I've always contended that if someone did not want me, why grovel as love is only true love when it's balanced.
The first line m ay need attention...
"Shall I rise to (great) the grand new day?" Did you mean to say (greet)?
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Comment Written 16-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2014
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Oh yes, greet... I fixed that, good eye. You put it well. I've never groveled. But, then Rosie Perez won't return my calls....