The Darkest Door
War is Hell...64 total reviews
Comment from ronnie k
Thanks for sharing, I escaped are missed Nam, this awesome write, supported by pictures was a sad, true view at what we that did not go have such thank those that did, foolish as it was the acts placed on the brother that made it home are equally, God bless one and All.
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Thanks for sharing, I escaped are missed Nam, this awesome write, supported by pictures was a sad, true view at what we that did not go have such thank those that did, foolish as it was the acts placed on the brother that made it home are equally, God bless one and All.
Comment Written 14-May-2014
Comment from Ridley Williams
Hey Dean,
This gets six stars because of its honest delivery of a time a lot of us lived through. My draft number came up 9! First time I ever made top 10 in anything and it had to be that...I wasn't taken because of a back injury I had in high school. I was labeled 1H, which meant , as long as it wasn't a declared war, they were only taking 1A drafties. I just knew they would change that any day and prepared myself mentally. It never happened, but I had friends that went...they came back changed men, and I felt horrible for them.
Your verse stirs up the horrors of that time in such a way it almost hurt to read the subject matter. Still, that's the purpose of our art...draw out emotion.
Well done with this look back at a painful time in our history, best wishes, Bill
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Hey Dean,
This gets six stars because of its honest delivery of a time a lot of us lived through. My draft number came up 9! First time I ever made top 10 in anything and it had to be that...I wasn't taken because of a back injury I had in high school. I was labeled 1H, which meant , as long as it wasn't a declared war, they were only taking 1A drafties. I just knew they would change that any day and prepared myself mentally. It never happened, but I had friends that went...they came back changed men, and I felt horrible for them.
Your verse stirs up the horrors of that time in such a way it almost hurt to read the subject matter. Still, that's the purpose of our art...draw out emotion.
Well done with this look back at a painful time in our history, best wishes, Bill
Comment Written 14-May-2014
Comment from BunnyS
I read this and all sorts of thought were bouncing around in my head. Yet I sat here staring at my keyboard not knowing what to write. This is the most vivid and well written piece I have ever read about the ravages of war. I didn't know whether to cry or be sick so I chose both.
Sometimes, when a poem is well written, the message loses its impact; and other times the story is so well presented that the imperfect flow of the poem doesn't seem all that important. You have combined the two and come up with a powerful piece of work.
I don't remember the Vietnam War because I was young when it ended, but I have friends and family that were devastated by it. I also have two children that have served in Afghanistan and Iraq, and the stories they have told mirrored the horror in your poem.
I wish I could put into words the feeling that this poem conveys...the horror and sadness that engulfs the readers soul and takes them to hell with the Marine. God bless you, my friend, you are truly gifted. This is a remarkable piece of work.
reply by the author on 14-May-2014
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I read this and all sorts of thought were bouncing around in my head. Yet I sat here staring at my keyboard not knowing what to write. This is the most vivid and well written piece I have ever read about the ravages of war. I didn't know whether to cry or be sick so I chose both.
Sometimes, when a poem is well written, the message loses its impact; and other times the story is so well presented that the imperfect flow of the poem doesn't seem all that important. You have combined the two and come up with a powerful piece of work.
I don't remember the Vietnam War because I was young when it ended, but I have friends and family that were devastated by it. I also have two children that have served in Afghanistan and Iraq, and the stories they have told mirrored the horror in your poem.
I wish I could put into words the feeling that this poem conveys...the horror and sadness that engulfs the readers soul and takes them to hell with the Marine. God bless you, my friend, you are truly gifted. This is a remarkable piece of work.
Comment Written 14-May-2014
reply by the author on 14-May-2014
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Thank you very much, Bunny. I think you said it beautifully, my friend, and I do appreciate what you said very, very much.
Comment from 9999pool
A terrifying experience and recollection lurked behind the closed door of his mind - the slaughtering of the innocents in the name of peace and freedom.
War is wicked and so is man.
Soldiers who have to kill to win the war usually suffered post traumatic syndrome when they return home. Such is the story told very well here.
Excellent write and congrats on the win.
Cheerio, best, Ritchie. :))
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A terrifying experience and recollection lurked behind the closed door of his mind - the slaughtering of the innocents in the name of peace and freedom.
War is wicked and so is man.
Soldiers who have to kill to win the war usually suffered post traumatic syndrome when they return home. Such is the story told very well here.
Excellent write and congrats on the win.
Cheerio, best, Ritchie. :))
Comment Written 14-May-2014
Comment from ravenblack
The door as ptsd memories- you really get in there, the darkest door that for many who return from the atrocities of war, remains ajar. Beautiful execution on this piece. When I was a kid, my dad's best friend who had just returned from 'man and lived down the street, that door caused him to pack up one night and vanish from friends and family for more than ten years. And he never returned. Powerful piece but I am out of sixes.
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The door as ptsd memories- you really get in there, the darkest door that for many who return from the atrocities of war, remains ajar. Beautiful execution on this piece. When I was a kid, my dad's best friend who had just returned from 'man and lived down the street, that door caused him to pack up one night and vanish from friends and family for more than ten years. And he never returned. Powerful piece but I am out of sixes.
Comment Written 14-May-2014
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi Dean,
Conrats! Wow, riveting piece - easy to see why you won the contest!
Within a small window of time, the small country school I went to at the time, lost three guys to the Viet Nam war. I knew two of the three. War, such a devastating experience on all quarters.
Wonderful piece of work, my friend.
Cheers
Keep Smilin'... Jax
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Hi Dean,
Conrats! Wow, riveting piece - easy to see why you won the contest!
Within a small window of time, the small country school I went to at the time, lost three guys to the Viet Nam war. I knew two of the three. War, such a devastating experience on all quarters.
Wonderful piece of work, my friend.
Cheers
Keep Smilin'... Jax
Comment Written 14-May-2014
Comment from Dawn Munro
Ah, Dean, I am so pleased to see that this won the contest - you don't need any critique from me, my friend - this is fabulous, in every respect, and I'll honor it simply by saying I am so proud to have the opportunity to read something so fine, and to call the author a 'friend'. Congrats, Dean - so well-deserved!
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Ah, Dean, I am so pleased to see that this won the contest - you don't need any critique from me, my friend - this is fabulous, in every respect, and I'll honor it simply by saying I am so proud to have the opportunity to read something so fine, and to call the author a 'friend'. Congrats, Dean - so well-deserved!
Comment Written 14-May-2014
Comment from sibhus
Great poem, that has a very powerful message to it. I can see why you won the contest, it was well deserved. I read you notes and thought they were really interesting. There may just be a lot of overlapping causes of suicide in middle-age men, and being a Nam Vet may just be one of them. So-called experts have named the recent economic conditions as the culprit, but it may just be more than that. Good stuff there, Dean.
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Great poem, that has a very powerful message to it. I can see why you won the contest, it was well deserved. I read you notes and thought they were really interesting. There may just be a lot of overlapping causes of suicide in middle-age men, and being a Nam Vet may just be one of them. So-called experts have named the recent economic conditions as the culprit, but it may just be more than that. Good stuff there, Dean.
Comment Written 14-May-2014
Comment from amada
Congratulations in winning the contest. You bare your heart in this horrific tale, not a tale I tell myself, it's not fiction. My mind can't accept this horror. This is a great reminder to stop hate and war.
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Congratulations in winning the contest. You bare your heart in this horrific tale, not a tale I tell myself, it's not fiction. My mind can't accept this horror. This is a great reminder to stop hate and war.
Comment Written 14-May-2014
Comment from chasennov
The Darkest Door.' I could not agree more with you that Vietnam was a living hell for most US forces. I do not think any war in history was worthwhile, and Vietnam was certainly not. Well done.
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The Darkest Door.' I could not agree more with you that Vietnam was a living hell for most US forces. I do not think any war in history was worthwhile, and Vietnam was certainly not. Well done.
Comment Written 14-May-2014