The Chronos Bug
Some demons aren't Hell spawn. They're man-made....55 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
Kayla Grooms shrieks - Grooms' - possessive
effectively attention-grabbing opening
globules of flesh falling from a little kid - you have me wincing
excellent back story of the scientists responsible for the tragic events
vivid descriptive detail that has me squirming with its creepy gore
Brooke
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Kayla Grooms shrieks - Grooms' - possessive
effectively attention-grabbing opening
globules of flesh falling from a little kid - you have me wincing
excellent back story of the scientists responsible for the tragic events
vivid descriptive detail that has me squirming with its creepy gore
Brooke
Comment Written 05-May-2014
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Dean Kuch,
A suitably doomsday scenario with all the elements - secret government research lab doing nasty things with nasty bugs for 'the military' and a suitably messy start to the bug's anti-human career.
One geographic criticism - Madagascar is a large island some distance off the east coast of Africa, not a country on the continent itself.
Patrick
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Hi Dean Kuch,
A suitably doomsday scenario with all the elements - secret government research lab doing nasty things with nasty bugs for 'the military' and a suitably messy start to the bug's anti-human career.
One geographic criticism - Madagascar is a large island some distance off the east coast of Africa, not a country on the continent itself.
Patrick
Comment Written 05-May-2014
Comment from Sanku
I am dumbfounded ,don't know from where you got thisidea but please tell me that it has no base in reality .the pictures were horrible .years back I have sen a film called Cassandra Crossing which was dealing with bio warfare.where does fiction begin or where does the fact end Very smooth reading good and strong language used.I will keep in touch.
reply by the author on 05-May-2014
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I am dumbfounded ,don't know from where you got thisidea but please tell me that it has no base in reality .the pictures were horrible .years back I have sen a film called Cassandra Crossing which was dealing with bio warfare.where does fiction begin or where does the fact end Very smooth reading good and strong language used.I will keep in touch.
Comment Written 05-May-2014
reply by the author on 05-May-2014
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Thanks, Sanku, and it is nice to know that you will be following along with the story. The fact remains, however, that there are laboratories all over the world which specialize in creating biological weapons. It is untelling what dreaded, despicable devices they are cooking up!
Thanks for your feedback, and great review, my friend!
Comment from emrpoems
I do not indulge in horrors and thriller but your writing is so interesting that I find myself drawn to it
This certainly is not pure fiction or is it?
Will however be looking out for the next chapter
reply by the author on 05-May-2014
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I do not indulge in horrors and thriller but your writing is so interesting that I find myself drawn to it
This certainly is not pure fiction or is it?
Will however be looking out for the next chapter
Comment Written 05-May-2014
reply by the author on 05-May-2014
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Thanks, emrpoems, and that means a lot to me. I try, and have always tried, to not get too graphic or bloody when writing such stories. Horror isn't about blood and guts to me, that borders on torture porn, or slasher movies, such as HOSTILE and Freddy Krueger. I've never been a big fan of those types of things, although I will admit, I have watched them a time or two. Horror is more of a feeling, than a showing. I will always write intensely, but try never to get too gory. I'm honored to know that you will be following along.
Comment from GWHARGIS
Well, this sure woke me up with a bang. I liked the premise of the government and their biological warfare. I know it does go on, but I try not to think about it. Great way you left the cliff hanger. I will be among the first to say I am on board for the next ten chapters. Good job.
reply by the author on 05-May-2014
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Well, this sure woke me up with a bang. I liked the premise of the government and their biological warfare. I know it does go on, but I try not to think about it. Great way you left the cliff hanger. I will be among the first to say I am on board for the next ten chapters. Good job.
Comment Written 05-May-2014
reply by the author on 05-May-2014
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Great, GW, I can't have enough followers of this story, and I'm honored to know that you will be one of them. And, as always, I sincerely appreciate your support, my friend!
Thank you!!!
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is yet another interesting piece of writing from the author in this post. This seems so plausible that it rings true for me. The governments all over the world could be working in projects such as this as I read this. Well done again.
reply by the author on 05-May-2014
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This is yet another interesting piece of writing from the author in this post. This seems so plausible that it rings true for me. The governments all over the world could be working in projects such as this as I read this. Well done again.
Comment Written 05-May-2014
reply by the author on 05-May-2014
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Thanks very much, Tomes. And, you are right, none of us knows the terrors lurking behind the air tight sealed doors in labs all over the globe. I doubt very much that we'd want to.
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It is scary all right.
Comment from Spitfire
Okay, you pulled me in in spite of the creepy last picture. I want to know more about the recipient! Did he volunteer in exchange for the death penalty? My only critique, Dean, is (my opinion) too many adjectives, often doubled i.e.
excruciating, agonizing death -- sounds redundant. Let your nouns and verbs do the work.
reply by the author on 05-May-2014
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Okay, you pulled me in in spite of the creepy last picture. I want to know more about the recipient! Did he volunteer in exchange for the death penalty? My only critique, Dean, is (my opinion) too many adjectives, often doubled i.e.
excruciating, agonizing death -- sounds redundant. Let your nouns and verbs do the work.
Comment Written 04-May-2014
reply by the author on 05-May-2014
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You got it, Spit, and I'll see if I can revise it a bit, get rid of some of the adjectives. I really appreciate your feedback, it is the kind I need.
Comment from evilynne
This is truly terrifying. I haven't read any parts of this, but I probably will, although I am usually not too much into real horror or sci-fi. Yours is certainly well written. Even though I wanted to stop reading it, I couldn't!
reply by the author on 04-May-2014
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This is truly terrifying. I haven't read any parts of this, but I probably will, although I am usually not too much into real horror or sci-fi. Yours is certainly well written. Even though I wanted to stop reading it, I couldn't!
Comment Written 04-May-2014
reply by the author on 04-May-2014
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Ah-h-h-h, and therein lies the trick, does it not, evilynne. Evoking what I like to call the traffic crash syndrome? Have you ever driven by an exceptionally horrendous car crash, and just felt compelled to look? Even though you were afraid of what you might see, you still looked anyway, did you not? That is precisely what I try and do with my stories. You may not want to look...but you have to, and do anyway.
Thanks for the awesome feedback, my friend.
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And look I did! You are most welcome.
Comment from Ric Myworld
I can't remember the show or when, but recently, I saw something on television about the Candiru, which makes your story all the more interesting. Thanks for another of your stories that draws me in from the first sentence and never lets go. Great job. :-)
reply by the author on 04-May-2014
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I can't remember the show or when, but recently, I saw something on television about the Candiru, which makes your story all the more interesting. Thanks for another of your stories that draws me in from the first sentence and never lets go. Great job. :-)
Comment Written 04-May-2014
reply by the author on 04-May-2014
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You're very welcome, Ric. And please, allow me to thank YOU, my friend, for your tireless support of my horrific efforts. I appreciate it more than you know! As for that show, I've never had the pleasure. I'll have to try and look it up! Thanks for the tip...
Comment from Donya Quijote
ok, you've got my attention. I love a good horror story and this one has got me sitting here with my legs crossed and I'm not cursed with a penis. I've heard about this fish. Nasty critter, but I did not know it could get a man in his pride and joy. I think the only thing worse might be a weaponized version of the brain eating amoeba. That's scary. Now, I've given you an idea, haven't I?
I'll be on the look out for more chapters...
reply by the author on 04-May-2014
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ok, you've got my attention. I love a good horror story and this one has got me sitting here with my legs crossed and I'm not cursed with a penis. I've heard about this fish. Nasty critter, but I did not know it could get a man in his pride and joy. I think the only thing worse might be a weaponized version of the brain eating amoeba. That's scary. Now, I've given you an idea, haven't I?
I'll be on the look out for more chapters...
Comment Written 04-May-2014
reply by the author on 04-May-2014
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Ha ha, cursed with a penis? Well, I suppose that all depends on whose perspective you're looking at the situation from, Donya. As a man, I can honestly tell you that I much prefer having one than not, lol.
And yes, many readers have given my fabulous ideas, and yours is no exception. I'm very glad that you aren't adverse to a good terror tale. I really appreciate hearing from you, and horror is about all I write.
Thanks so much again!