Henhouse Hera
The Green-Eyed Monstress32 total reviews
Comment from DonandVicki
A nicely composed free style free verse, I would classify this write as possibly a flash fiction or flash prose. Nonetheless is was a pleasure to read. Good job as always. Don
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A nicely composed free style free verse, I would classify this write as possibly a flash fiction or flash prose. Nonetheless is was a pleasure to read. Good job as always. Don
Comment Written 31-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2014
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Actually, Don, it's a perfectly metered poem, with rhyme in designated spots, so I'm not sure it qualifies as a free verse, but I appreciate the review.
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I stand corrected. Don
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No worries, my friend.
Comment from Just2Write
Poo. No sixes left - here's some - hope they suffice *** ***.
David, your Rogue is really a cad with a severe masochistic streak. He has no mercy for the hens and chickens in the coop. (Loved your illustration, by the way) I just know the type of loose women the Rogue is chastising and chasing are in no way related to the average, gentlewoman.
I think a day of the week for airing of his exploits is a good idea - I still think that it would be great for you to post to a multi-author book on a Friday, and let the hens have at it. That way, the fans of these skirmishes can see what you have to say, and what the collective hen's replies are without having to hunt for them.
Oh yeah - I almost forgot to review the poem. Exceptional work, m'dear. I enjoyed the romp.
Rose.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2014
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Poo. No sixes left - here's some - hope they suffice *** ***.
David, your Rogue is really a cad with a severe masochistic streak. He has no mercy for the hens and chickens in the coop. (Loved your illustration, by the way) I just know the type of loose women the Rogue is chastising and chasing are in no way related to the average, gentlewoman.
I think a day of the week for airing of his exploits is a good idea - I still think that it would be great for you to post to a multi-author book on a Friday, and let the hens have at it. That way, the fans of these skirmishes can see what you have to say, and what the collective hen's replies are without having to hunt for them.
Oh yeah - I almost forgot to review the poem. Exceptional work, m'dear. I enjoyed the romp.
Rose.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2014
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Thank you, Rose, and I gratefully accept the kind gesture of custom sixes. Much appreciated.
A multi-author book really is a good idea, so maybe I'll do that for next week. Thank you again for that.
Comment from Righteous Riter
Good use of the aabb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good descriptive word use that paints a clear picture in my mind. Good alliteration. Good rhythm and flow. Good eye catching photo that holds my attention from start to finish.
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Good use of the aabb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good descriptive word use that paints a clear picture in my mind. Good alliteration. Good rhythm and flow. Good eye catching photo that holds my attention from start to finish.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2014
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Thank you very much, RR.
Comment from Tatarka2
I'm in awe. You have stayed within the iambic pentameter, and yet written a piece that is hilarious and a rollicking good read. What is enjambment, again? This is really outstanding, in my opinion.
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I'm in awe. You have stayed within the iambic pentameter, and yet written a piece that is hilarious and a rollicking good read. What is enjambment, again? This is really outstanding, in my opinion.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2014
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Thank you so much, my friend, for the sixer, and for your great comments! Enjambment is the carrying over of a thought or sentence from one line to the next, or to another stanza.
Comment from Domino 2
another top write from your alter ego, David.
The meter dances along perfectly with top rhymes and great fun naughty content.
I think AABB rhyme structure usually suits humour best.
Excellent internal rhymes in alternate lines.
If you ever get tired of handling all these conquests, please send a few over for me, as I'm always willing to help. :-)
Best wishes, Ted
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2014
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another top write from your alter ego, David.
The meter dances along perfectly with top rhymes and great fun naughty content.
I think AABB rhyme structure usually suits humour best.
Excellent internal rhymes in alternate lines.
If you ever get tired of handling all these conquests, please send a few over for me, as I'm always willing to help. :-)
Best wishes, Ted
Comment Written 31-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2014
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Ted, you're quite capable of taking any and all comers, my friend, and I appreciate your kind offer, as well as the kind review, my brother. Much appreciated!
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LOL x (platonic kiss)
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Manly hug. ;-)
Comment from DionysusDeVille
A very clever poem and the message I kind of got from it was one about women falling for a Casanova that just uses them for his own selfish amusement
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A very clever poem and the message I kind of got from it was one about women falling for a Casanova that just uses them for his own selfish amusement
Comment Written 31-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2014
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That's about the size of it, Dionysus. It's also about the jealousy between women who are used by the same rogue. It's just another chapter in the Rogue Series between several of the ladies here and my alter ego. Thank you!
Comment from trevorletang
A really well structured poem where your aabb style of rhyme in each verse works well and does not distract the reader from the actual theme of the poem. Well done on another great write
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A really well structured poem where your aabb style of rhyme in each verse works well and does not distract the reader from the actual theme of the poem. Well done on another great write
Comment Written 31-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2014
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Thanks very much, trevor! I appreciate your great review!
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Well what can I say - the Rogue is on the go again. He never gives up! I was puzzled by the title of your poem. A Heras is a type of moth and I thought you had slipped up until I read on and then your author notes. Last stanza - third line - Thens? Then. Stanza one - Line 2 - 'Presented'? Does not sound right. 'Receiving', 'Hearing'? Well written and a clever read. Regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2014
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Well what can I say - the Rogue is on the go again. He never gives up! I was puzzled by the title of your poem. A Heras is a type of moth and I thought you had slipped up until I read on and then your author notes. Last stanza - third line - Thens? Then. Stanza one - Line 2 - 'Presented'? Does not sound right. 'Receiving', 'Hearing'? Well written and a clever read. Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 31-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2014
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Thanks for your sharp eye, Dorothy. My edits after posting almost always lead to a typo, and that's what happened with "thens". I liked "presented", but you got me thinking, and I changed it to "perusing". Thanks for the push on that, my friend, and for the great review.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
So the rogue will be on a schedule.. interesting. Good start for marriage training. Every Friday he'd better be HERE or else.
Can't wait to see the feathers fly! :)
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So the rogue will be on a schedule.. interesting. Good start for marriage training. Every Friday he'd better be HERE or else.
Can't wait to see the feathers fly! :)
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Comment Written 31-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2014
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Hi Phyllis. I figured we could limit it to a free-for-all Fry the Rogue Friday, and not overkill it...so I'll be here with balls on...I mean bells. ;-)
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Thank you, by the way.
Comment from Acquired Taste
Oh Rogue - what is.. Thens leaves you all enamored. Something with which I am unfamiliar?
I particularly like Fry-the-Rogue Friday. Allows for other general duties that take up the week: house, work, child rearing - silly things that keep us from the computer.
Hammered pretty much sets the tone for upcoming ripostes. I look forward to all offerings from the "Hens of the Fray." Relax now - next Friday will soon be upon us.
AT=/
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Oh Rogue - what is.. Thens leaves you all enamored. Something with which I am unfamiliar?
I particularly like Fry-the-Rogue Friday. Allows for other general duties that take up the week: house, work, child rearing - silly things that keep us from the computer.
Hammered pretty much sets the tone for upcoming ripostes. I look forward to all offerings from the "Hens of the Fray." Relax now - next Friday will soon be upon us.
AT=/
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Comment Written 31-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2014
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Thanks, my friend. Yep, I had a typo from a late change. Careless, that one. I figured I'd give them something to chew on while they work. Looking forward to your next offering.
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Was unsure, but thought I'd check - looks great now!
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Good eye, AT. Thanks.