Comment from Spitfire

Excellent

An excellent description of the sand storms that occur in desert lands. Good use of alliteration with dust devil, desert; rhyme and reason.

 Comment Written 05-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 07-Jan-2014

Thanks Shari, so happy you liked Desert Sands, :-) Carolyn

Comment from irititall_bana

Excellent

Precise and to the point, yet imagery is nicely done.
You see action in the first two lines and the loneliness and vastness in line 4. Your poem is one of the reasons I enjoy reading poetry. Thank you. :=)

 Comment Written 05-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2014

And this wonderful review is one of the reasons I keep writing. thank you so much, :-) Carolyn

Comment from kiwisteveh

Good

Syntrifical? did you mean centrifugal?

Your quatrain poem is just that, a single quatrain and beyond some evocative language in the last line, doesn't seem to go anywhere.... Are you amazed, puzzled, angry? is the dust-devil good or bad or just a wonder of nature?

I am dying to get more out of your poem.

Steve

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 Comment Written 05-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2014

Thanks Steve, I changed the spelling of Centrifugal. It is as you say, just that, a single quatrain. The dust devil is a wonder of nature. In fact I shot a pic of one but don't have it on my laptop to share. They are a mystery, I appreciate your review. Please don't die. :-) Carolyn

Comment from bichonfrisegirl

Excellent

An excellent nature poem, Carolyn. Good alliteration with Dust Devil. Perfect choice of artwork to complement your contest entry.

Best wishes in the Quatrain contest!

Hugs,
Connie

 Comment Written 05-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2014

Thanks Connie for this great review and best wishes. I appreciate your encouragement. :-) Carolyn

Comment from Roo4U

Excellent

I really like the last line as the imagery is clear when reading "Dust Devil". I thought that was quite clever. Thank you for sharing! I enjoyed the stark photo as well! KS

 Comment Written 05-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2014

KS, Thanks for this great review you have given. :-) Carolyn

Comment from Frankeddy

Excellent

Nice poem , word structure looks and sounds good.
Lovely accompanying picture.
All presented in a bright and clear setting.

Well done. Frankeddy

 Comment Written 05-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2014

Thanks for this wonderful review, Frankeddy. :-) Carolyn

Comment from Gungalo

Excellent

Desert sands blow round and round
Syntrifical force of air to ground
No rhyme or reason to be found
Dust Devil, phantom of the land

Such a great write Carolyn. Plenty of winds and sands to be blown around.

 Comment Written 05-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2014

Thanks Pam, glad you enjoyed this one. :-) Carolyn

reply by Gungalo on 05-Jan-2014

Smiles.

Comment from Mystic Angel 7777

Excellent

Your trip to Arizona was powerfully inspirational for you and having been there I can understand why. This is simply lovely and peaceful. You have fulfilled the contest requirements admirably making this a worthy contender. Thank you so much for sharing this with me.

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 Comment Written 05-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2014

And thank you for this encouraging review and best wishes. :-) Carolyn