Christmas Visitors come to Hedgerow
Phyllis's Penguins stay with Timmy and Tommy Mouse38 total reviews
Comment from B. Diehl
Awesome children's prose poetry right here. Shel Silverstein would be pleased. :P I love the picture; it fits in perfectly with the story/poem. Well done.
Merry Christmas!
-B<3<3
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Awesome children's prose poetry right here. Shel Silverstein would be pleased. :P I love the picture; it fits in perfectly with the story/poem. Well done.
Merry Christmas!
-B<3<3
Comment Written 24-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Thank you so much! I wish you a very Merry Christmas and a brilliant 2014! xsx sandra
Comment from Smoothiecool
great picture for this poem
your words allow the reader to see and feel the images of Penny and Petey adventure to Timmy and Tommy's hose and the fun in singing their Christmas version of twelve days of Christmas and the fun in it all
flows well easy read
cheers Sc
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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great picture for this poem
your words allow the reader to see and feel the images of Penny and Petey adventure to Timmy and Tommy's hose and the fun in singing their Christmas version of twelve days of Christmas and the fun in it all
flows well easy read
cheers Sc
Comment Written 24-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Thank you so very much, Sc, Have a wonderful Christmas and I wish for you a brilliant 2014! xsx Sandra
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welcome stay safe and well in the festive season
cheers SC
Comment from rouskin
Very funny to read
Penny and Petey rolled up on the floor
Laughing like crazy, but crying... "NO MORE!
That was so bad, I think ours was the best,
Can't sing it to Phyllis ... she's got a weak chest!"
Timmy and Tommy both sat down and laughed,
"Not only that, she'll say WE'RE also daft!"
Excellent artwork to complement this poem
Merry Christmas and Happy Holidays
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Very funny to read
Penny and Petey rolled up on the floor
Laughing like crazy, but crying... "NO MORE!
That was so bad, I think ours was the best,
Can't sing it to Phyllis ... she's got a weak chest!"
Timmy and Tommy both sat down and laughed,
"Not only that, she'll say WE'RE also daft!"
Excellent artwork to complement this poem
Merry Christmas and Happy Holidays
Comment Written 24-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Thank you so very much, rouskin! Merry Christmas, and I wish for you a brilliant 2014! xsx sandra
Comment from Aussie
I did have a big chuckle at your rather cheesy poem for the children - now I'm hungry! The childish illustration was just 'write' for your poem! You sure put your thinking cap on to sort this lot out; great rhyming and all the different cheeses. A couple didn't rhyme, who can get a word to rhyme with feisty and babyels? So, part of your poem rhymes but not the cheesy part. Most enjoyable Mrs Hedgerow!
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2013
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I did have a big chuckle at your rather cheesy poem for the children - now I'm hungry! The childish illustration was just 'write' for your poem! You sure put your thinking cap on to sort this lot out; great rhyming and all the different cheeses. A couple didn't rhyme, who can get a word to rhyme with feisty and babyels? So, part of your poem rhymes but not the cheesy part. Most enjoyable Mrs Hedgerow!
Comment Written 24-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2013
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Thank you so much, Kay, the cheesy parts were very hard, so I had to compromise and do the best I could. Was fun though!! Thank you, dear, for the lovely review, and for all those stars!! Merry Christmas, Kay and a brilliant 2014 xsx Sandra
Comment from IndianaIrish
What a delightful poem for Christmas Eve, Sandra. I enjoyed your story poem and it made me grin like a little kid. Have a wonderful Christmas.
Smiles,
Karyn : )
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2013
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What a delightful poem for Christmas Eve, Sandra. I enjoyed your story poem and it made me grin like a little kid. Have a wonderful Christmas.
Smiles,
Karyn : )
Comment Written 24-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2013
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Aw, thank you, Karyn! I am so pleased you enjoyed reading it.
Merry Christmas, my friend and I wish you a brilliant 2014 xsx Sandra
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
LOL! (grabbing my chest) Stoppit.. I can't breathe! LOL! Timmy and Tommy, you caught me by surprise! I love your song and am glad to know where Penny and Petey ran off to. They scribbled a poem about 'two cool mice and a lady who's nice' then took train fare from my purse and all the fish from the fridge, so I kinda thought that's where they might be. Keep them as long as you can stand Petey's snoring. And please wish Sandra and all your Hedgerow friends a verrry merrry Christmas from me!
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2013
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LOL! (grabbing my chest) Stoppit.. I can't breathe! LOL! Timmy and Tommy, you caught me by surprise! I love your song and am glad to know where Penny and Petey ran off to. They scribbled a poem about 'two cool mice and a lady who's nice' then took train fare from my purse and all the fish from the fridge, so I kinda thought that's where they might be. Keep them as long as you can stand Petey's snoring. And please wish Sandra and all your Hedgerow friends a verrry merrry Christmas from me!
Comment Written 24-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2013
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I am sooooo pleased you liked it, sorry you have a weak chest, I was a bit concerned when Penny told us, hope you aren't in shock! LOL, thank you Phyllis, and thank you for the wonderful 6 stars! I will send Penny and Petey home after Christmas, hope you have a brilliant one! Happy Christmas my dear friend and hope you have a wonderful 2014 xsx Sandra
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Had to read this again, and this time I found some things you'll want to fix.
REMOVE commas below:
On Penny the Penguin's face, was a large grin
And then Penny told them, they came down by train.
Although she told us, we both were quite daft!"
BOYS is plural, not possessive:
As she said to the boy's, "Well, can we come in?!" << just BOYS, with no apostrophe
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Thank you Phyllis, got to get this one perfect! I have corrected the errors. Must admit, I was in such a hurry to put this out, I didn't edit it as good as I should. Have a wonderful day! Love Sandra xxx
Comment from Dawn Munro
LOL. OMG, Sandra, really, two lumps of blue? HAHAHAHAHAHA - eewwww.
1) "On the (twelfth) day of Christmas...twelve bits of cheddar..." *smile*
2) "As she said to the (boys)..." << no apostrophe
How adorable! Very creative, my friend. :) I enjoyed it very much.
MERRY CHRISTMAS!
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2013
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LOL. OMG, Sandra, really, two lumps of blue? HAHAHAHAHAHA - eewwww.
1) "On the (twelfth) day of Christmas...twelve bits of cheddar..." *smile*
2) "As she said to the (boys)..." << no apostrophe
How adorable! Very creative, my friend. :) I enjoyed it very much.
MERRY CHRISTMAS!
Comment Written 24-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2013
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Thank you so much, Dawn, it was just a bit of fun, but I did enjoy doing it. I have been in and put those words right, I should have checked it again. Also, thank you, BIG time for the 6 stars! MERRY CHISTMAS TO YOU TOO, AND HOPE 2014 IS A BRILLIANT ONE FOR YOU!! XSX Sandra
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
So nice to hear from the Hedgerow gang again, it seems a long time. Very cute and a clever idea to do 12 days of Christmas for the mice. Loved it. Wishing you a blessed Christmas. Rox
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2013
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So nice to hear from the Hedgerow gang again, it seems a long time. Very cute and a clever idea to do 12 days of Christmas for the mice. Loved it. Wishing you a blessed Christmas. Rox
Comment Written 24-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2013
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It has been a long time, I am working on some more at the moment. Thank you so much, Rox for your wonderful review. I wish you a very happy Christmas and a brilliant 2014 xsx Sandra
Comment from Dustman6180
I am so very glad that Phylis' penguins came to visit your mice. The mice's twelve days of cheese was every bit as fun as the penguin's twelve days of fish. Lots of fun! Thanks.
Dusty
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2013
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I am so very glad that Phylis' penguins came to visit your mice. The mice's twelve days of cheese was every bit as fun as the penguin's twelve days of fish. Lots of fun! Thanks.
Dusty
Comment Written 24-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2013
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Thank you so much, Dusty, for your lovely review. Mummy Mouse had to invite them to stay, because Timmy and Tommy went to visit them last year! LOL. Merry Christmas, Dusty and I wish you a brilliant 2014 xsx Sandra
Comment from nancy_e_davis
While lovely dreams of cheese puffs danced in their heads.
Of course Timmy and Tommy prefer cheese! How cute! The Penguin's visiting Hedgerow and the new song. You named some cheeses I never heard of my dear friend! LOL Very well done and Merry Christmas.xsx Nancy
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2013
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While lovely dreams of cheese puffs danced in their heads.
Of course Timmy and Tommy prefer cheese! How cute! The Penguin's visiting Hedgerow and the new song. You named some cheeses I never heard of my dear friend! LOL Very well done and Merry Christmas.xsx Nancy
Comment Written 24-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2013
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Thank you so much, Nancy, LOL, I read Phyllis's Christmas Penguin poem, and had to invite them down to Hedgerow! Her Twelve night of Christmas, was really good, she had more fish to work with!! Some of the cheeses are totally British, so I don't suppose many will know them, but I didn't know many that you have in America. Thank you so very much for the 6 stars, Nancy, that was really lovely of you! xsx Sandra