The Heart of Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "Unrivaled Sunrise (Tanka)"'Tis not the Bard, but pretty good poetry anyway
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Comment from FrannyG
This is lovely Carolyn. You've left out an apostrophe in 'souls'. I'm sure you know where it goes depending on whether it's one soul or more. Lovely writing.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2013
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This is lovely Carolyn. You've left out an apostrophe in 'souls'. I'm sure you know where it goes depending on whether it's one soul or more. Lovely writing.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2013
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Thank you Franny for this great review and edit. I am glad you liked it. :-) Carolyn
Comment from Gungalo
Unrivaled sunrise
Lightly touch hearts' joy within
Awaken senses
Harmonize gossamer path
Perpetuate souls journey
Wonderful Tanka Carolyn and it speaks with joy to all. So many senses are awakened with this write.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2013
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Unrivaled sunrise
Lightly touch hearts' joy within
Awaken senses
Harmonize gossamer path
Perpetuate souls journey
Wonderful Tanka Carolyn and it speaks with joy to all. So many senses are awakened with this write.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2013
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Thank you Pam for this sweet review, I am glad it brought you joy. Love, Carolyn
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Smiling.
Comment from DALLAS01
I enjoyed your Tanka but was wondering If there is a subject verb conflict? Unrivaled sunrise sounds singular so shouldn't the verbs end in (s)? I could be wrong. Might want to check.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2013
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I enjoyed your Tanka but was wondering If there is a subject verb conflict? Unrivaled sunrise sounds singular so shouldn't the verbs end in (s)? I could be wrong. Might want to check.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2013
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Thanks for the through review, I will check out those verbs, I am glad you enjoyed the Tanka. :-) Carolyn
Comment from Zue65
Yes, the rising sun especially just after dawn when everything is still quiet and peaceful and the birds are still asleep, the sun is more magical for we can absorbed its full glory without disturbance. Your poem emphasized that. An excellent job. God bless poet.
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Yes, the rising sun especially just after dawn when everything is still quiet and peaceful and the birds are still asleep, the sun is more magical for we can absorbed its full glory without disturbance. Your poem emphasized that. An excellent job. God bless poet.
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Comment Written 03-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2013
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Many thanks to you for such a lovely and insightful review. I am happy you liked it. :-) Carolyn
Comment from krys123
A very complete tanka went to metaphor, imagery and context that is written to perfection and a syllabic format fits the requirements for this type of poem. The emanating beauty of the sunrises foretold beautifully with words like harmonizing or gossamer and finally unrivaled all of which paints a picture of a delicate sunrise. Thank you so much for sharing this Carolyn. You have a good one and God bless.
AK
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A very complete tanka went to metaphor, imagery and context that is written to perfection and a syllabic format fits the requirements for this type of poem. The emanating beauty of the sunrises foretold beautifully with words like harmonizing or gossamer and finally unrivaled all of which paints a picture of a delicate sunrise. Thank you so much for sharing this Carolyn. You have a good one and God bless.
AK
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Comment Written 03-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2013
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And bless you back, AK, thanks for this great review. I am delighted you thought it was correctly done and that you liked it. :-) Carolyn
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You are so welcome Carolyn it was a very well written tanka