The Heart of Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "Bongo boy"'Tis not the Bard, but pretty good poetry anyway
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Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is so heartbreaking and poignant, notesandmore, an excellent job writing this beautiful blank verse about the child that was stolen, but his music brought his mother back to him. heartbreaking imagery presented. should be strangers' coins. good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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this is so heartbreaking and poignant, notesandmore, an excellent job writing this beautiful blank verse about the child that was stolen, but his music brought his mother back to him. heartbreaking imagery presented. should be strangers' coins. good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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Thanks for the six stars! That is awesome of you. This poem tugged at my heart the whole time I was 'thinking' it up. I fixed the edit and appreciate you for catching it. Have a good day, Carolyn
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Very poignant and well written.
A pertinent subject choice in our modern times as more and more children just "disappear" never to be found.
This young child was lucky to have a happy ending but many are not.
I will certainly be holding my children close.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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Very poignant and well written.
A pertinent subject choice in our modern times as more and more children just "disappear" never to be found.
This young child was lucky to have a happy ending but many are not.
I will certainly be holding my children close.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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You are so right, all stories do not end happily. Thank you for this wonderful review and rating. Hug those 'kiddo's ' a lot.
:-) Carolyn
Comment from Rondeno
It should be "clothes", rather than "cloths", and "heart broken" rather than "heart broke". You change from past to present tense in your second stanza, and there doesn't seem to be a reason for it.
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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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It should be "clothes", rather than "cloths", and "heart broken" rather than "heart broke". You change from past to present tense in your second stanza, and there doesn't seem to be a reason for it.
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Comment Written 22-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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I appreciate your edits, and used two of them. I changed to clothes, and to heart chilled. It is always good to know you have read so carefully. Have a wonderful day, :-) Carolyn
Comment from Sylvia Page
This deserves a six, but alas mine are long gone. Children's safety should be number one priority at all times. Never should they be left unattended but sometimes sadly circumstances don't allow it.
Sylvia
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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This deserves a six, but alas mine are long gone. Children's safety should be number one priority at all times. Never should they be left unattended but sometimes sadly circumstances don't allow it.
Sylvia
Comment Written 22-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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Hi Sylvia, I will take the virtual six in the spirit it was given. Thank you so much for understanding this poem. Carolyn
Comment from The Death
This is a sad heart touching poem. This is a very serious issue and many children get affected by it, throughout the world. They need to be protected. Your words flow well. Artwork complements your write. Good luck
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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This is a sad heart touching poem. This is a very serious issue and many children get affected by it, throughout the world. They need to be protected. Your words flow well. Artwork complements your write. Good luck
Comment Written 22-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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Thanks for the great review and comments, you are so right, it is a serious issue. Have a great day, Carolyn
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is a hard-hitting poem that the author has created with this piece of writing. This is a sad fact of life and this evil must be stopped.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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This is a hard-hitting poem that the author has created with this piece of writing. This is a sad fact of life and this evil must be stopped.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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Thanks Tomes, you are so right. One found child at a time! It is an evil thing to prey on little children. Carolyn
Comment from allborn66
This is a very powerful poem. You communicated your theme well. The tone is appropriate to the subject matter. The word choice is strong.
Barbara
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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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This is a very powerful poem. You communicated your theme well. The tone is appropriate to the subject matter. The word choice is strong.
Barbara
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Comment Written 22-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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Thank you Barbara, I am glad the message was powerful to you, I appreciate your comments. Carolyn