The Heart of Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 22 "Come Morning"'Tis not the Bard, but pretty good poetry anyway
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Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Carolyn,
I so enjoyed reading this beauty this morning. A wonderful array of imagery and a deeper message I also resonated with.
An excellent submission for this contest. I wish you lots of luck.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2013
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Dear Carolyn,
I so enjoyed reading this beauty this morning. A wonderful array of imagery and a deeper message I also resonated with.
An excellent submission for this contest. I wish you lots of luck.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
Comment Written 03-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2013
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Dear Maureen, I am happy you enjoyed this one. Actually I thought of you as I was writing it. Thank you for the good wishes. Have a healthy and happy day, my love, Carolyn
Comment from JMUwrites
Beautiful write here notesandmore...very creative depiction that employs colorful imagery to help convey its message! Not to mention, the accompanying photo works ideally! There might be a couple of capitalization and punctuation issues but certainly not enough to detract at all from its endearing qualities!
Thanks for sharing this, and all the best to you going forward!
Warmly...
JMU
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2013
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Beautiful write here notesandmore...very creative depiction that employs colorful imagery to help convey its message! Not to mention, the accompanying photo works ideally! There might be a couple of capitalization and punctuation issues but certainly not enough to detract at all from its endearing qualities!
Thanks for sharing this, and all the best to you going forward!
Warmly...
JMU
Comment Written 03-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2013
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I thank you so much for the great review of this one and the attention given to it. I will look at the punctuation. Glad you liked it, :-) Carolyn
Comment from AprilShower
This poem has a wonderful positive message, Carolyn. I enjoyed reading it. The picture and the poem go well together. I have no suggestions. It's perfect the way it is.
Well done, my friend. You have my best wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2013
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This poem has a wonderful positive message, Carolyn. I enjoyed reading it. The picture and the poem go well together. I have no suggestions. It's perfect the way it is.
Well done, my friend. You have my best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2013
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Thank you April, your review means a lot to me. I would enjoy a win. :-) Carolyn
Comment from barleygirl
This is a beautiful poem, filled with energy & enthusiasm, wanting to radiate in all directions to touch everyone who reads it. Excellent comparison/imagery:
"soft wispy fog dissipates
like sleepy-time sweetness from
the eyes of an awakening child" . . .
In general, I like & agree with the last stanza. I'm a morning person, known to all as a positive person, but the last half of the final stanza is just a little too "over-the-top" for me, almost to the point of having a grating quality. But still, as far as the message you want to convey, you've nailed it clearly & enthusiastically. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2013
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This is a beautiful poem, filled with energy & enthusiasm, wanting to radiate in all directions to touch everyone who reads it. Excellent comparison/imagery:
"soft wispy fog dissipates
like sleepy-time sweetness from
the eyes of an awakening child" . . .
In general, I like & agree with the last stanza. I'm a morning person, known to all as a positive person, but the last half of the final stanza is just a little too "over-the-top" for me, almost to the point of having a grating quality. But still, as far as the message you want to convey, you've nailed it clearly & enthusiastically. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2013
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Thanks for the comments and I am glad you liked it. I have to study that last stanza. :-) I appreciate your well wishes. Carolyn
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What you've written is fine for people like yourself & me, too . . . I just posted "Everything is Beautiful" a song by Ray Stevens, on my Facebook wall this morning --people who are already pretty motivated to have a bouncy morning attitude would love your final exuberance . . . but at least half the population (the "NOT" morning people) could feel this is a little preachy, maybe.
Comment from Silverstar,Myanmar
However the night will be so long,the morning will come exactly.In our life,how we face many difficult,the successful days will be coming in one day.This poetry gives us many thoughts that are the good hope for future.I like your thoughts and your work.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2013
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However the night will be so long,the morning will come exactly.In our life,how we face many difficult,the successful days will be coming in one day.This poetry gives us many thoughts that are the good hope for future.I like your thoughts and your work.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2013
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What a wonderful review and rating you have given me. I am so happy you enjoyed this one. Have a great day, Carolyn
Comment from 9999pool
Absolutely stunning positive write about the morning to greet us and the passing of the mysterious night.
This is my last sixers and lucky I got one to give you this time, smiles.
Why a six star write? Read the poem and see how the lines unfold. The smooth transition of thoughts are there.
From night and then the morning comes. What did we see and did we find anything? Was it just another morning that needs no mention?
We must have been sleeping and thought morning is just another day to laze around. If this be our last morning surely we could have seen so much more - maybe even regretted we did not see enough and feel the pulse of the new morning come feeling?
This is a feel good poem and makes our brains go into a sleep walk and then awaken us with the drumming bare truth that every coming of the morning is special and unless we find it special everyday, our lives are not getting anywhere nearer to being happier, contented and in peaceful contemplation.
Excellent write and had a good chance of winning this contest based on its liquid fluidity and smooth flow with the words weaved using common layman terms and vocabulary. This is a fine example of how great poetry can be great by being simple, direct and tell a heartfelt story in a amzing ly graceful way that all of us can relate too without ambiguity or puzzling in any way.
Cheerio, loved this write. Well done! Bravo!!
Hugs and luv, Ritchie. :))
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2013
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Absolutely stunning positive write about the morning to greet us and the passing of the mysterious night.
This is my last sixers and lucky I got one to give you this time, smiles.
Why a six star write? Read the poem and see how the lines unfold. The smooth transition of thoughts are there.
From night and then the morning comes. What did we see and did we find anything? Was it just another morning that needs no mention?
We must have been sleeping and thought morning is just another day to laze around. If this be our last morning surely we could have seen so much more - maybe even regretted we did not see enough and feel the pulse of the new morning come feeling?
This is a feel good poem and makes our brains go into a sleep walk and then awaken us with the drumming bare truth that every coming of the morning is special and unless we find it special everyday, our lives are not getting anywhere nearer to being happier, contented and in peaceful contemplation.
Excellent write and had a good chance of winning this contest based on its liquid fluidity and smooth flow with the words weaved using common layman terms and vocabulary. This is a fine example of how great poetry can be great by being simple, direct and tell a heartfelt story in a amzing ly graceful way that all of us can relate too without ambiguity or puzzling in any way.
Cheerio, loved this write. Well done! Bravo!!
Hugs and luv, Ritchie. :))
Comment Written 03-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2013
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Ritchie, I am overwhelmed with the wonderful comments and encouragement you have given me for 'Come Morning'. You get the meaning of each piece I write and articulate that back to me so well. I write a simple poem as I feel everyone ought to be able to benefit and enjoy what I write without having to look up the definition of the words. :-) You are my hero, Love, Carolyn
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Hi Carolyn dear,
Welcome. You can write the simplest of things about life and yet breathe so much meaning and life into your works.
The ability to touch someone's heart with our writings is a gift and you are a rare gem in this. Smiles.
Contrary to popular belief, good simple poems are the most difficult to write.
I have a friend who asked me to write a poem called "Salt" and i did a simple personification on it and since salt is a very cheap and common ingredient, it is essential for life.
Great write once again and should win the contest with our fingers crossed.
Cheerio, Ritchie. Hugs. :))
P.S. If you are familiar to Fanstorian 'Sararb' - she does write in a very simple form and won many contests. I put you on similar wavelength to her great works.
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is a beautiful poem that the author has created with this piece of writing. The writer tells the reader about the coming of a new dawn and the banishing of the night. This was written about many times from ancient times.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2013
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This is a beautiful poem that the author has created with this piece of writing. The writer tells the reader about the coming of a new dawn and the banishing of the night. This was written about many times from ancient times.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2013
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Thank you Tomes for this great review and rating, :-) Carolyn
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My pleasure.
Comment from Irish Rain
this is so very lovely, from the remarkable wording of your free verse, to the beautiful presentation...surely a winner! blessings to you tonight!
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2013
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this is so very lovely, from the remarkable wording of your free verse, to the beautiful presentation...surely a winner! blessings to you tonight!
Comment Written 03-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2013
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I like your positive commendation :-) It would be nice to win, you have, however, already made me feel like one. Blessings back to you, Carolyn
Comment from krys123
Thank you Carolyn for sharing this poem with myself, fans and other readers/writers. I like this poem because it was excellently done in all manner and speaking. Your poem disposed to exercise flaunt tutorial authority in a way to overwrite any protestation. You created a masterpiece which was masterfully done. You had a beat rhyme to it satisfied the rhythm and tempo which made it very easy for me to read your poem. If you must know I'd be rhyme is something that is done so well rhythmically that it feels like it does rhyme. You have a good one and God bless.
AK
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2013
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Thank you Carolyn for sharing this poem with myself, fans and other readers/writers. I like this poem because it was excellently done in all manner and speaking. Your poem disposed to exercise flaunt tutorial authority in a way to overwrite any protestation. You created a masterpiece which was masterfully done. You had a beat rhyme to it satisfied the rhythm and tempo which made it very easy for me to read your poem. If you must know I'd be rhyme is something that is done so well rhythmically that it feels like it does rhyme. You have a good one and God bless.
AK
Comment Written 03-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2013
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Hey AK, that's a lot of rhyming and rhyme for a poem that's not suppose to rhyme. I loved your review and am overwhelmed by the six star award. Thank you from the bottom of my heart. Carolyn
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You are so welcome Carolyn your poem was very good.
Comment from Gungalo
The night and the blackness of it
has finally passed into the beyond
into that mysterious place
called the other side of the world
where twilight, moon and stars (-do) dwell
Wonderful write here Carolyn and a beautiful scene you placed on the other side of the world. It's just an awesome thought, isn't it?
embrace yourself and who you are
prepare yourself well, night is over
today, this new day, is your day to shine
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2013
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The night and the blackness of it
has finally passed into the beyond
into that mysterious place
called the other side of the world
where twilight, moon and stars (-do) dwell
Wonderful write here Carolyn and a beautiful scene you placed on the other side of the world. It's just an awesome thought, isn't it?
embrace yourself and who you are
prepare yourself well, night is over
today, this new day, is your day to shine
Comment Written 03-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2013
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Thanks for the wonderful review and edit. I love my 'do', but just because of 'you' I will remove it. LOL, Love, Carolyn
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LOL it really figures girlie. Hehehehe.