Comment from Evelyn Fort Stewart

Excellent

Oh I love the ending for sure. The poem is lovely and paints many pictures in the readers mind but I do love the ending. God loves you and I do too.

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 15-Jun-2013

Evelyn, I am glad you enjoyed this one. I hope you are doing well.:-) Carolyn

Comment from donette1914

Excellent

what a stunning poem and you painted a beautiful evening with all those stars and the moon and the tranquil beauty well done it was a pleasure

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 15-Jun-2013

I appreciate all you have said. Thanks, Carolyn

Comment from alexgeorge

Excellent

Beautiful poem. You describe an evening out enjoying the night with its sounds and fragrances...and then you reveal what's missing, your other half.

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 Comment Written 15-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 15-Jun-2013

Yes, that gets it. Thanks so much. Carolyn

Comment from Gungalo

Excellent

I turn to take in the tranquil beauty of the sight
But something is absent from this 'almost' perfect night

And then
I am Aware
It
Is
You

Such a beautiful write girl and what an ending. It is free style by the way not free verse. Free verse has no rhymes whatsoever.


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 Comment Written 15-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 15-Jun-2013

Thanks for the heads up from the 'mistress of form' Will fix, I am glad you liked it. :-) Carolyn

reply by Gungalo on 15-Jun-2013

Smile