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Comment from donaldww
Priscilla is not only spoiled, she's on a tight budget, only paying 2 cents to review her poem. Her parents sound like they were as much the problem than she. Nevertheless, kids will love her poem as they laugh. I read it to my son and he laughed, after asking who was in the picture.
Perhaps she could promise a chocolate for each vote. That way, a sure winner!
Good luck with the contest,
DW
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2012
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Priscilla is not only spoiled, she's on a tight budget, only paying 2 cents to review her poem. Her parents sound like they were as much the problem than she. Nevertheless, kids will love her poem as they laugh. I read it to my son and he laughed, after asking who was in the picture.
Perhaps she could promise a chocolate for each vote. That way, a sure winner!
Good luck with the contest,
DW
Comment Written 21-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2012
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Hey i figure you got your 2 cents worth. Thanks for the read and review. I did have fun with this. Children's poetry is where I started and where the bulk of my work is, so it is fun to have someone else think up the plots for me. I had plum run out of steam in that regard! Thanks for the stars too.
Comment from adewpearl
Good use of abcb rhyming
good consonance of P sounds in parents/priscilla pigsley/spoiled/pampered
I like that you used the quatern form, which works well here, but you are not allowed to have author's notes, so you should eliminate the line about quaterns.
Excellent illustrative examples of how her parents spoiled her - my daughter, a nanny, sees these behaviors in parents all the time. Brooke
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2012
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Good use of abcb rhyming
good consonance of P sounds in parents/priscilla pigsley/spoiled/pampered
I like that you used the quatern form, which works well here, but you are not allowed to have author's notes, so you should eliminate the line about quaterns.
Excellent illustrative examples of how her parents spoiled her - my daughter, a nanny, sees these behaviors in parents all the time. Brooke
Comment Written 21-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2012
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Thank you for the read and review. I did have fun with this. I may have mentioned that children's poetry is where I started and where the bulk of my work is, so it is fun to have someone else think up the plots for me. I had plum run out of steam in that regard! I think so many parents spend so little time with their children that they think they can make it up with gifts and indulgence. A pity they can't really see what they are doing. Thanks for reminding me about the author's notes.
Comment from RYME4U
This is so good. The picture is absolutely perfect. The rhymes are good and the rhythm is nice and even. You have done very well with this contest entry
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2012
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This is so good. The picture is absolutely perfect. The rhymes are good and the rhythm is nice and even. You have done very well with this contest entry
Comment Written 21-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2012
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Thank you for the read and review. I did have fun with this. Children's poetry is where I started and where the bulk of my work is, so it is fun to have someone else think up the plots for me. I had plum run out of steam in that regard! Thanks for the stars too.
Comment from ahamranji
Your creative talent shows through here as you write on a given topic with such ease. The rhyme and flow is so nice. Loved this.
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reply by the author on 21-Sep-2012
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Your creative talent shows through here as you write on a given topic with such ease. The rhyme and flow is so nice. Loved this.
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Comment Written 21-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2012
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my words. I love writing for children and this was a fun challenge to meet. I appreciate the stars too.
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Oh yes my friend I liked this poem about the spoilt Priscilla it reads very well through the poem and is enhanced well by the picture good luck in this fun contest regards Jill
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reply by the author on 21-Sep-2012
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Oh yes my friend I liked this poem about the spoilt Priscilla it reads very well through the poem and is enhanced well by the picture good luck in this fun contest regards Jill
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Comment Written 21-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much Jill, I love children's poetry and it is what I write most of. This prompt was a fun new challenge. And here I thought I had every topic covered already :)