Along the Jericho Road
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "Inyang Moon "Murder Mystery
42 total reviews
Comment from c_lucas
I think the temperture is a bit overplayed. I have yet to feel it, usually when an energy is near, I get a feeling up my spine. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2012
  |
I think the temperture is a bit overplayed. I have yet to feel it, usually when an energy is near, I get a feeling up my spine. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2012
-
Thank you, charlie. I appreciate your review and opinion on the subject of temperature -- have felt both. Regards, Bev
-
You're welcome, Bev. Charlie
-
Hey, charlie. You were right - way over the top - went back and looked. Thanks for the subtle hint.
-
Hollwood has sent so much falsoe information about possessions and evil spirits, it has virtually been accepted as the truth. Enjoying your story. Charlie
-
You are so right, charlie. Thanks, again. Bev
-
You're welcome, Bev. Charlie
-
:0)
Comment from Maureen's Pen
OMG - spooky scary stuff, and why am I reading it at night, I don't know.
Exceptional chapter my friend, it scared the living daylights out of me. I was on the edge of my seat thinking do I keep reading or stop. You know me and scary stuff....but I couldn't stop reading and your cliff hanger was fabulous....spooky but fabulous.
Excellent imagery and scene play, my heart pounding tells me so:D
Overall an exceptional write. It won't let me give you a sixer this time around. Virtual one with a hug:D
Thanks for scaring me, I mean sharing with me.
Maureen
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2012
|
OMG - spooky scary stuff, and why am I reading it at night, I don't know.
Exceptional chapter my friend, it scared the living daylights out of me. I was on the edge of my seat thinking do I keep reading or stop. You know me and scary stuff....but I couldn't stop reading and your cliff hanger was fabulous....spooky but fabulous.
Excellent imagery and scene play, my heart pounding tells me so:D
Overall an exceptional write. It won't let me give you a sixer this time around. Virtual one with a hug:D
Thanks for scaring me, I mean sharing with me.
Maureen
Comment Written 16-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2012
-
Hi, Maureen. Thank you so much for your generous and lovely review. I sure appreciate that you chose to read the story even though it scared you. Though I don't like the idea of scaring someone so sweet! I very much appreciate the virtual six, too. You're so kind! Hugs, Bev
Comment from Showboat
Great one, Bev, had me on the edge of my seat.
Loved the dog, as you can imagine, and the interaction with the priest.
Only thing I saw, you and I. s/b you and me. Tht's all I saw.
Really loved this one, m'dear.
Hugs,
Gayle
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2012
|
Great one, Bev, had me on the edge of my seat.
Loved the dog, as you can imagine, and the interaction with the priest.
Only thing I saw, you and I. s/b you and me. Tht's all I saw.
Really loved this one, m'dear.
Hugs,
Gayle
Comment Written 15-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2012
-
Hiya, Gayle. Thanks for your generous review and catching the SPAG, buddy. Always appreciated! Hugs, Bev
Comment from RazberryBullet
suggestions:...From his seat near the fire, /it's>its/ warmth dulled the edges of Brian's anxiety. (it's=it is-its=have,own)
...There's no one in here but you and /I>me/.
Whoa!!! What a hook!
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2012
|
suggestions:...From his seat near the fire, /it's>its/ warmth dulled the edges of Brian's anxiety. (it's=it is-its=have,own)
...There's no one in here but you and /I>me/.
Whoa!!! What a hook!
Comment Written 15-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2012
-
Thanks for catching the grammar error, Raz. Always good to hear from you. Bev
Comment from misscookie
MMMM
This is a very intereting chapter still filled with susopence and dramma.
you got me wondering who was siting in that chair?
As always I can't wait to read the next chapter.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2012
|
MMMM
This is a very intereting chapter still filled with susopence and dramma.
you got me wondering who was siting in that chair?
As always I can't wait to read the next chapter.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2012
-
Hi, Cookie! Thank you for your support and generosity. I'm so happy you're enjoying this story! Hugs, Bev
-
It was my pleasure, have a nice day.
Comment from Dawn Munro
Ooo, this is getting really spooky! Sorry, some things really bring out the kid in me, and this sure does! I LOVE a good, scary story! Your characters are so real, and the storyline so good, I'm going to be sleeping with the lights on some nights as I follow this I'll bet! (Even your priest's dog is authentic!) More, more. (May I have an advance on the next chapter please? LOL)
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2012
|
Ooo, this is getting really spooky! Sorry, some things really bring out the kid in me, and this sure does! I LOVE a good, scary story! Your characters are so real, and the storyline so good, I'm going to be sleeping with the lights on some nights as I follow this I'll bet! (Even your priest's dog is authentic!) More, more. (May I have an advance on the next chapter please? LOL)
Comment Written 15-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2012
-
Hiya, Dawn. Thank you for this wonderful review. Glad you're enjoying the story, my friend. My grandmother raised me on ghost stories, so I love them too! Really appreciate the support! Hugs, Bev
-
Oh my pleasure, and that runs in my family too! We even have our own ghost stories!
-
Ooh, you do? We lived in a very haunted house, which led to my current interest as a paranormal investigator. I'm sure my granny would be proud. Xxx Bev
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
Oh, spooky! This is getting good. Can't wait for more. Very well written. You're way beyond me so have no advise, just well done and please post more soon.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2012
 |
Oh, spooky! This is getting good. Can't wait for more. Very well written. You're way beyond me so have no advise, just well done and please post more soon.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2012
-
Hi, Roxanna. Thank you so much for your really generous review. Glad you chose to read my chapter tonight! Your support and interest is so appreciated. Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from Wes Guptill
This is but another great segment in this work. I know that you had stated apprehension, previously, that the infusion of a supernatural element in this story would not be well-received, but I hope by now you have dispelled that erroneous notion. To the contrary, the Adversary, or what may be an agent of the Adversary, fits very well with the tone of the story and the cast of characters. To say that it has a high CREEP factor is the proverbial understatement of the day, perhaps the month. I particularly liked the way that this shrouded figure is now inserting his presence where he pleases, with no regard for the consequences. It is an ever-so-subtle way of adding menace and evil to his already foreboding characterization. Your characters are all splendid and finely drawn, but it is this monster that brings the hackles to a full stance. I will definitely be back for more of the Malevoleent One.
Fine writing here, my friend.
Salud!
Wes
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2012
|
This is but another great segment in this work. I know that you had stated apprehension, previously, that the infusion of a supernatural element in this story would not be well-received, but I hope by now you have dispelled that erroneous notion. To the contrary, the Adversary, or what may be an agent of the Adversary, fits very well with the tone of the story and the cast of characters. To say that it has a high CREEP factor is the proverbial understatement of the day, perhaps the month. I particularly liked the way that this shrouded figure is now inserting his presence where he pleases, with no regard for the consequences. It is an ever-so-subtle way of adding menace and evil to his already foreboding characterization. Your characters are all splendid and finely drawn, but it is this monster that brings the hackles to a full stance. I will definitely be back for more of the Malevoleent One.
Fine writing here, my friend.
Salud!
Wes
Comment Written 15-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2012
-
Wes, thank you so very much for your outstandingly generous review. I really appreciate how much time you took to let me know the elements that you feel are working right in this chapter. And thank you for confirming my instincts on the supernatural aspect. Glad you're coming along for the ride. Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from fictionwriter
Great descriptive chapter. I loved the interaction between the dog and the priest, and you've done an excellent job of mixing emotions and a bit of hair-raising chill. Great work
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2012
|
Great descriptive chapter. I loved the interaction between the dog and the priest, and you've done an excellent job of mixing emotions and a bit of hair-raising chill. Great work
Comment Written 15-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2012
-
I am really honored by your generous review, my friend. Thank you for choosing to read! Your support is most heart-warming. Kindest regards, Bev
Comment from judiverse
This is really spooky, and at the end of this chapter it seems that the sheriff is beginning to feel some of the supernatural. He sees and hears a person in the room, but Father Brian says no one is there. You build up to the entrance of Sheriff, as if something weird is about to happen. The dog's behavior adds to the suspense. It seems to sense when there's something strange happening. The smell of sage is a neat touch. You well describe Father Brian's feelings leading up to the Sheriff's visit. Great work. judi
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2012
|
This is really spooky, and at the end of this chapter it seems that the sheriff is beginning to feel some of the supernatural. He sees and hears a person in the room, but Father Brian says no one is there. You build up to the entrance of Sheriff, as if something weird is about to happen. The dog's behavior adds to the suspense. It seems to sense when there's something strange happening. The smell of sage is a neat touch. You well describe Father Brian's feelings leading up to the Sheriff's visit. Great work. judi
Comment Written 15-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2012
-
Hi, judi. Thank you so very much, my friend. I really appreciate your generous review and your support. Thanks, too, for following along! Bev
-
YOu're so welcome. judi