Skate
a short contest entry31 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
your poem is beautifully illustrated and presented and is in excellent Clarity Pyramid form
great focus on all that backbreaking work that goes on for months and months behind the scenes in order to achieve a few minutes of "effortless" beauty :-) I actually use practicing for a skating routine as my example when teaching form poetry class on site.
A poem like a sonnet or rondeau that takes a minute or two to read can take many hours to compose and work out and revise :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2012
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your poem is beautifully illustrated and presented and is in excellent Clarity Pyramid form
great focus on all that backbreaking work that goes on for months and months behind the scenes in order to achieve a few minutes of "effortless" beauty :-) I actually use practicing for a skating routine as my example when teaching form poetry class on site.
A poem like a sonnet or rondeau that takes a minute or two to read can take many hours to compose and work out and revise :-) Brooke
Comment Written 11-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2012
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Brooke - thanks for taking the time to read and review my poem, Skate. What you said is so true - though the idea came quickly for this, I must have changed the wording (and in a couple of cases, individual words) a dozen times before getting what I was aiming for. I had not thought of poetry being like skating before - maybe now I won't get discouraged, but instead will know the piece just needs a bit more "practice".
have a great week!
Comment from ennahanid
The picture you used to headline your Clarity Pyramid writing prompt entry could not be more perfect. Skate - I never could even work roller skates, so the ice would never even be a try...come to think of it I failed Ballet even, if that is possible. I am in awe of skaters and I wish you luck in the contest - Dinah
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2012
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The picture you used to headline your Clarity Pyramid writing prompt entry could not be more perfect. Skate - I never could even work roller skates, so the ice would never even be a try...come to think of it I failed Ballet even, if that is possible. I am in awe of skaters and I wish you luck in the contest - Dinah
Comment Written 11-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2012
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Dinah - thanks for taking the time to read and comment on my poem, Skate.
have a great week!
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
I used to skate and play hockey. This brought back wonderful memories. To be an Olympian is a life, not just a hobby. Well done. If you are interested, Dorothy Hamil has a book about her life. I can't remember the name of it, but it is excellent~DEbbie
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2012
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I used to skate and play hockey. This brought back wonderful memories. To be an Olympian is a life, not just a hobby. Well done. If you are interested, Dorothy Hamil has a book about her life. I can't remember the name of it, but it is excellent~DEbbie
Comment Written 11-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2012
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Debbie - thanks for taking the time to read and comment on my poem, Skate. Nice that a fellow-skater can identify with and appreciate my work!
have a great week!
Comment from terry drake
Your pyramid poem is well constructed and reflects the theme of your poem delightfully. I read your poem with interest toward the gold and found my legs aching.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2012
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Your pyramid poem is well constructed and reflects the theme of your poem delightfully. I read your poem with interest toward the gold and found my legs aching.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2012
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Terry - thanks for taking the time to read and review my poem, Skate.
have a great week!
Comment from xxjsfuncxxxity
Great short poem, Reads almost like a sort of haiku-plus. I can only imagine how much sweat and tears are shed to achieve true excellence. I know it's the same with writing!
cheers
js
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2012
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Great short poem, Reads almost like a sort of haiku-plus. I can only imagine how much sweat and tears are shed to achieve true excellence. I know it's the same with writing!
cheers
js
Comment Written 11-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2012
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Thanks for taking the time to read and comment on my poem, Skate.
have a great week!
Comment from Linda Wilson
This is a great poem. Form is new to me and is very nice as it allows the words to flow in a rhythm that is not to forced. Mostly of course I loved the message of ALL it takes to go for Gold!
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2012
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This is a great poem. Form is new to me and is very nice as it allows the words to flow in a rhythm that is not to forced. Mostly of course I loved the message of ALL it takes to go for Gold!
Comment Written 11-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2012
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Thanks for taking the time to read and review my poem, Skate.
have a great week!
Comment from joann r romei
i sure do and ive never been on the ice, one does not make it to the olympics easily, thats why i feel so bad when they lose or fall,
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2012
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i sure do and ive never been on the ice, one does not make it to the olympics easily, thats why i feel so bad when they lose or fall,
Comment Written 11-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2012
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Thanks for taking the time to read and comment on my poem, Skate.
have a great week!
Comment from Barlock
I am certainly not familiar with what is involved in earning an olympic gold medal, but I can imagine - a lot of work, sweat, blood, anger, frustration, determination and so on.
Loved your poem.
Cheers,
JB
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2012
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I am certainly not familiar with what is involved in earning an olympic gold medal, but I can imagine - a lot of work, sweat, blood, anger, frustration, determination and so on.
Loved your poem.
Cheers,
JB
Comment Written 11-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2012
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Thanks for taking the time to read and comment on my poem, Skate.
have a great week!
Comment from wiljacro
HI! Your tale of the behind the scenes preperation for these, so competitive, events in general and the Olympics in particular, will certainly help the spectators realise, once again, just how much taking part requires, in mind and bodily stress.Thanks for nudgeing our memorys'. wiljacro.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2012
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HI! Your tale of the behind the scenes preperation for these, so competitive, events in general and the Olympics in particular, will certainly help the spectators realise, once again, just how much taking part requires, in mind and bodily stress.Thanks for nudgeing our memorys'. wiljacro.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2012
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Thanks for taking the time to read and comment on my poem, Skate.
Have a great day!
Comment from judiverse
An excellent job of meeting the requirements with your seven lines and follow the format perfectly. When it comes to ice skating, I love to watch (my husband did spend a lot of time ice skating for a while). You capture the hours of hard work and the physical pain the elite athletes go through in order to go for the gold. Beautifully done, and best of luck with this entry. judiverse
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An excellent job of meeting the requirements with your seven lines and follow the format perfectly. When it comes to ice skating, I love to watch (my husband did spend a lot of time ice skating for a while). You capture the hours of hard work and the physical pain the elite athletes go through in order to go for the gold. Beautifully done, and best of luck with this entry. judiverse
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Comment Written 11-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2012
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Thanks for taking the time to read and review on my poem, Skate.
Have a great day!
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You're so welcome. judiverse