The Eye of Death's Enticement
a 200 word story24 total reviews
Comment from wiljacro
HI! Fleedleflump. WOW!! Definitely not the tale to tell as a bedtime story to your youngest daughter. It,certainly made the hair rise on the back of my neck, and that doesn't happen often, I can assure you. I loved the twist at the end, a great finale, to a great story. wiljacro.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2012
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HI! Fleedleflump. WOW!! Definitely not the tale to tell as a bedtime story to your youngest daughter. It,certainly made the hair rise on the back of my neck, and that doesn't happen often, I can assure you. I loved the twist at the end, a great finale, to a great story. wiljacro.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2012
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Thank you! In some ways, I think brevity helps when going for the shock factor, and I do like to leave some details to the readers' imaginations. So glad you liked it.
Mike
Comment from peggles
This is a gruesome gory write
(he sawed into his midriff with the palette knife)
that must have smarted
Then ending with the apple turned into her heart
I was griped by this horrendous creation of your imagination
It was good and I wish you luck in the contest
But you need help!!
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2012
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This is a gruesome gory write
(he sawed into his midriff with the palette knife)
that must have smarted
Then ending with the apple turned into her heart
I was griped by this horrendous creation of your imagination
It was good and I wish you luck in the contest
But you need help!!
Comment Written 05-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2012
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lol, thank you :-). I sometimes think writing is a form of 'help', certainly as an outlet. Glad you liked my little slice of nastiness!
Comment from TammyGail
Well play away Mike and do come play again much sooner I do miss reading you. This was great almost enough to wet the lips, then one wants a bit more than some more but will settle for what has been bequeathed in the end. With such an ending how could I oppose. Lol great read I loved it :) Hey you got that novel published I see, rock on to you sweetie you so deserve it that was a damn good book. Thanks for the read
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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2012
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Well play away Mike and do come play again much sooner I do miss reading you. This was great almost enough to wet the lips, then one wants a bit more than some more but will settle for what has been bequeathed in the end. With such an ending how could I oppose. Lol great read I loved it :) Hey you got that novel published I see, rock on to you sweetie you so deserve it that was a damn good book. Thanks for the read
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Comment Written 05-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2012
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Thank you, Tammy. Sadly not published, but I have been working up cover art. Does it suit the story, do you think?
I've got a couple of horror storiea on the go and a new book waiting to be started, but this little snippet was lurking in my head so I thought I'd put it out there.
Hope you had a great christmas!
Mike
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Same to you mike.. And yeah the cover looks amazing and very fitting for the story I do hope it gets in in books soon.
Comment from Judian James
"I hope you ENJOYED the read" Are you fookin' kidding me??
Happy New Year to you too, Mike!! You KNOW I hate this genre but how could I NOT read your first post I've come across since coming back from the holidays. Man, this was so gorey-gruesome GOOD. "he sawed into his midriff with the palette knife" That would take a bit of nasty, painful doing, to say the least. I don't know what brought this on, but I pray Naomi's all right! LOL (we have a show here in the States called "Dexter" You would LOVE it!!) I'm not completely sure I "got" the toilet bit, but visually, I got it all to my core. EXCELLENT. Happy New Year!!!
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"I hope you ENJOYED the read" Are you fookin' kidding me??
Happy New Year to you too, Mike!! You KNOW I hate this genre but how could I NOT read your first post I've come across since coming back from the holidays. Man, this was so gorey-gruesome GOOD. "he sawed into his midriff with the palette knife" That would take a bit of nasty, painful doing, to say the least. I don't know what brought this on, but I pray Naomi's all right! LOL (we have a show here in the States called "Dexter" You would LOVE it!!) I'm not completely sure I "got" the toilet bit, but visually, I got it all to my core. EXCELLENT. Happy New Year!!!
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Comment Written 05-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2012
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lol, thank you Jude :-). Yeah, it's a bit grim, isn't it? Happy New Year to you too, my friend. Fear not, we are both fine!
Mike
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Have you heard of "Dexter" in the UK?
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Oh yeah, meant to reply to that bit! Love Dexter, although the first season was the best as it dared to be funnier. Still, it's excellent TV. I don't watch much, bit that's on the list :-).
Mike
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We rent it on DVD and watch a whole season in one weekend!! I knew you'd love it if you knew about it!! I can't believe I'm so hooked, but then again, I'm NOT reading it. I can't read stuff like that.