Steve's Poems for Kids
Viewing comments for Chapter 23 "Around My Place"A collection of my children's poems
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Comment from daniela.albu
Quite an interesting book for children. It has humor and the words sound good and funny and I am sure it will look great with the appropriate illustration to fit your imagination.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2010
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Quite an interesting book for children. It has humor and the words sound good and funny and I am sure it will look great with the appropriate illustration to fit your imagination.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2010
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I only wish I could draw what IS in my imagination - sigh.
Thanks for your comments.
Comment from adewpearl
One of the many reasons I have visiting Australia high on my bucket list are all your wonderful creatures - this poem is just a delight to me, who would just be in seventh heaven to have such animals in my own back yard. I love the humor in the final verse - pythons in bed I can do without. LOL Your quatrains have strong abcb rhyming and sound good read aloud, which is always a plus with children's poetry :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2010
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One of the many reasons I have visiting Australia high on my bucket list are all your wonderful creatures - this poem is just a delight to me, who would just be in seventh heaven to have such animals in my own back yard. I love the humor in the final verse - pythons in bed I can do without. LOL Your quatrains have strong abcb rhyming and sound good read aloud, which is always a plus with children's poetry :-) Brooke
Comment Written 17-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2010
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Read Bill Bryson's book on Australia - it may scare the pants off you about the wonderful creatures! Frogs in the loo are a constant menace - pythons in the bed I haven't actually experienced yet but it has happened to others. Thanks for your kind comments.
Comment from alcarty
The idea was fresh and the presentation vivid. The rhythm was constant throughout and I recognized most of the creatures you included. I think this piece has the material to make a great short story. Each stanza could be expanded into paragraphs.
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reply by the author on 17-Oct-2010
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The idea was fresh and the presentation vivid. The rhythm was constant throughout and I recognized most of the creatures you included. I think this piece has the material to make a great short story. Each stanza could be expanded into paragraphs.
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Comment Written 17-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2010
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Hmmm... expand into a story - I was going to keep it as it is and build it up with strong illustrations - one creature per page. Thanks for the comments.