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A Wedding from Heaven - senyru

Thinking about my Jon

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Comment from kassey
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Great senyru, Teri, they are , at least to me, one of the most difficult forms to do, you have pictured it perfectly in your short verse, nothing else is needed to be said. Great work Kay

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2008


reply by the author on 13-Jun-2008
    Thank you Kay. It does take some mind thinking for me to do them. Hugs, Teri
Comment from Vladilynn
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How beautiful to remember times that been a memories of our lives.

Thinking that time will be there like the same before....such a thing that in reality only memories remains. And the time passed away.

How lively is your memories Teri and I really envy it.

Thank you for sharing

Lynn ( ^ _____ ^ )}}

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2008


reply by the author on 13-Jun-2008
    Thank you Lynn. Hugs, Teri
Comment from RaymondJohn
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Lovely Senryu. You have done a masterful job of using motion, instruction and surprise. Yout bio interests me. A good friend of ours developed MS in her thirties. She was a willing test subject for any and all new medicines. I hope they find a cure soon. Best. Ray

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2008


reply by the author on 13-Jun-2008
    Thank you Ray. I do know they are coming out with a pill pretty soon which beats the heck out of shots every other day. I look like a dalmation. lol Hugs, Teri
Comment from Jonez08
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Hi Teri, beautiful poem. As always, you display such pure love for Jon. One day you shall meet again. Nice artwork. I love your picture. It's nice putting a face with your reviews. God bless and take care

Cassandra

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2008


reply by the author on 13-Jun-2008
    Thank you my sweet friend. Hugs, Teri
Comment from charissw
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Hi Teri,
There is absolutely nothing wrong with what you have written. It is soulful, it is touching. When I read it I wondered if you had considered a bit of rhyme as well. I am giving a sample below even though I am aware these things are so personal and have their own meaning to the writer.
"walking hand in hand
knowing where we always stand
you are always mine
there will always be more time"
Blessings, Chariss

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2008


reply by the author on 13-Jun-2008
    Thank you my friend. That would be good but the senyru is 5/7/5. Hugs, Teri
reply by charissw on 13-Jun-2008
    See, that is how much I know about poetry. I knew it was fine like it was, and I wondered about that. So much I do not know about poetry and prose. My mother was a well-known Mississippi poet. I suppose she inspired my love of writing.
    Have a wonderful weekend.
    Blessings, Chariss
Comment from earthlybeing
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Loved the poem. I can understand that still loving your Jon that would be a natural thing. It is so hard to accept things like this when they happen so suddenly. I truly pray that your heart may be filled with peace. Luv ya! Jeanette

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2008


reply by the author on 13-Jun-2008
    Love you too my friend. Hugs, Teri
Comment from kchitti
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not sure why but I want the 2nd line to end with stand instead of always... :-) probably just been rhyming too much lately in my head.

heaven does offer us the prospect of unlimited time to do so many things. I hope it's true :-) I think I have a lot of work to do still. Surely he's thinking of you too, Teri.

keep writing the good stuff!

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2008


reply by the author on 13-Jun-2008
    Thank you my sweet friend. I am like you. It seems funny without rhyme. Hugs, Teri
Comment from mmichelle97219
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The timing was off for this lifetime, maybe in the next you will find each other again. I thought this was an excellent post.
Michelle

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2008


reply by the author on 13-Jun-2008
    Thank you Michelle. Hugs, Teri
Comment from EllieKaye
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Just me again-

This one says so much in so few words, (Which is the point, I know) but you used those few words well- nice choice and nice composition.

It's always refreshing to read your positive outlook through poetry.

Enjoy your day-
Ellie

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2008


reply by the author on 13-Jun-2008
    Thank you Ellie. You always make me smile. Love, Teri
Comment from Gert sherwood
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Hello Teri what else can I say very sad but what a wonderful picture to go with your well written ---senyru.
Like the last line. Yes the feeling I get you mean you and Jon will have more time when you both are in heaven together.
Gert

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2008


reply by the author on 13-Jun-2008
    Gert, You had it just right. Love, Teri
reply by Gert sherwood on 13-Jun-2008
    God Morning teri, Good I'm glad I had the meaning of you poem
    see you later.
    Love
    Gert
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2008
    Thank you Gert. I hope you and Stan are doing ok. Love you, Teri
reply by Gert sherwood on 13-Jun-2008
    Hi Teri, well Stan is not doing so good. He has to have an MRI on his back and I still have trouble with my neck, traction everyday for the pain and we both are finding it hard to do our usual activites in life.
    I say thank God for my freiends on Fanstory it helps me to forget our troubles

    One of these days I will get in the mood to come back on and write
    Love you and thank you so much for asking.
    Take care.
    Gert
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2008
    I pray that you both feel better soon. Love, Teri
reply by Gert sherwood on 13-Jun-2008
    Hello Teri Prayers are great. the best healer
    Love
    Gert