The Beginning.
A story about overcoming adversity.25 total reviews
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
What an amazing story you tell of overcoming a physical issue that was made worse by your mother's obvious embarrassment! You were, clearly, a very strong and spirited child and probably inherited your determination and wisdom from your grandfather. I think the encouragement he gave you and the words that remained in your memory were superb. He probably knew you were a fighter, anyway, and that this would be the incentive you needed. Well done for achieving those results as well. There are issues, mostly with your punctuation, so please take care over this (because I can tell you appreciate its importance and it currently undermines your work, potentially resulting in a lower rating). But an excellent motivational story which I enjoyed reading. Take care Debbie
when the doctors (have to) take your baby away (this is better grammatically)
some would just walk away (as if) they felt sorry for me
However, when we are young(,) things like that...
I thought that(,) if I did things like that...
because(,) if I (said) I can't do that(,) (h)e
And the day I left for the US Army(,)
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2025
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What an amazing story you tell of overcoming a physical issue that was made worse by your mother's obvious embarrassment! You were, clearly, a very strong and spirited child and probably inherited your determination and wisdom from your grandfather. I think the encouragement he gave you and the words that remained in your memory were superb. He probably knew you were a fighter, anyway, and that this would be the incentive you needed. Well done for achieving those results as well. There are issues, mostly with your punctuation, so please take care over this (because I can tell you appreciate its importance and it currently undermines your work, potentially resulting in a lower rating). But an excellent motivational story which I enjoyed reading. Take care Debbie
when the doctors (have to) take your baby away (this is better grammatically)
some would just walk away (as if) they felt sorry for me
However, when we are young(,) things like that...
I thought that(,) if I did things like that...
because(,) if I (said) I can't do that(,) (h)e
And the day I left for the US Army(,)
Comment Written 10-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2025
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Thank you so much for your kind words Debbie. I truly appreciate your words! You must have been an English teacher. My English teacher told me I would never learn to write, so I became a photojournalist for many years being published in major magazines and news papers all over the world in my younger days of course and that was jouranlistically a different kind of writing. But I truly appreciate you catching some of my oops here. And yes, it does sound better.
Comment from royowen
What a great story Harry, I was born a redhead, and when one is a little different, you become a target for what is considered 'normal', that's the way humans are, everything but what God wants us to be, I was good at sport most of my life so that overcomes a lot of things, so your grandfather was right, just be better than your competitors. But mind you, that's not right either, loving is a learnt art, most don't do, beautifully written Harry, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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What a great story Harry, I was born a redhead, and when one is a little different, you become a target for what is considered 'normal', that's the way humans are, everything but what God wants us to be, I was good at sport most of my life so that overcomes a lot of things, so your grandfather was right, just be better than your competitors. But mind you, that's not right either, loving is a learnt art, most don't do, beautifully written Harry, blessings Roy
Comment Written 10-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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Well, thank you so much Roy. I truly appreciate your kind review. And yes, you are so right...
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Well done Harry
Comment from LJbutterfly
I enjoyed this very compelling story. Many children have things they are embarrassed about, or can't do, but they give up and never put up a fight for themselves. You were a brave young boy and man, and your grandfather was wise. You story is interesting and inspiring.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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I enjoyed this very compelling story. Many children have things they are embarrassed about, or can't do, but they give up and never put up a fight for themselves. You were a brave young boy and man, and your grandfather was wise. You story is interesting and inspiring.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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Well, thank you so much LFbutterfly for that kind review. I really appreciate that!
Comment from Y. M. Roger
OH, if so many more of today's youth would heed and understand your story... they'd rather take such as a reason for 'baby' or 'special' treatment or, better yet, as a reason they should be given special privileges and such or even a 'leg up' over others because of it.... sigh. :( A wonderful story of overcoming obstacles we all must face... well written, sir! ;) Thanx for sharing! ;) Yvette
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reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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OH, if so many more of today's youth would heed and understand your story... they'd rather take such as a reason for 'baby' or 'special' treatment or, better yet, as a reason they should be given special privileges and such or even a 'leg up' over others because of it.... sigh. :( A wonderful story of overcoming obstacles we all must face... well written, sir! ;) Thanx for sharing! ;) Yvette
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Comment Written 10-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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Well, thank you so much Yvette. I really appreciate your review!
Comment from Begin Again
At first, your story reminded me of my firstborn, being 19, and having my son somewhere else instead of with me. We, too, were in the Air Force in Amarillo, Texas, and later at McConnel AFB in Kansas. But when you got to the saying, "Can't could never do anything" my life with my father kicked in.... I've gone through a lot of hell in my life and just kept walking because I refused to say I can't.... my father looked down on me because I was a girl.... and I refused to bend. We have a lot of similarities, my friend. Including Rockford..LOL
Smiles, Carol
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reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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At first, your story reminded me of my firstborn, being 19, and having my son somewhere else instead of with me. We, too, were in the Air Force in Amarillo, Texas, and later at McConnel AFB in Kansas. But when you got to the saying, "Can't could never do anything" my life with my father kicked in.... I've gone through a lot of hell in my life and just kept walking because I refused to say I can't.... my father looked down on me because I was a girl.... and I refused to bend. We have a lot of similarities, my friend. Including Rockford..LOL
Smiles, Carol
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Comment Written 10-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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Yes, Carol. It does seem as we do...
