Billy and Tubby's Night Out
Two boys set out to Trick-or-Treat29 total reviews
Comment from Esther Brown
Ric, that is excellent. You captured the characters of Thomas and Billy, the imagination and level of friendship between the boys so well. I am looking forward to reading the next chapter. Esther
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
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Ric, that is excellent. You captured the characters of Thomas and Billy, the imagination and level of friendship between the boys so well. I am looking forward to reading the next chapter. Esther
Comment Written 03-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
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Thank you so much, Esther, for your extra special six-star review and kind words. I'm glad you liked it. I just wanted to do something a little different than the typical Halloween story. Much appreciated!
Comment from nomi338
Argh! How could you write a story so compelling that I am hanging on every word, only to find that I have to wait for the next installment. As much as I enjoy your writing, this is pure torture. I hate it, but you had best believe, I will be checking for the next installment.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
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Argh! How could you write a story so compelling that I am hanging on every word, only to find that I have to wait for the next installment. As much as I enjoy your writing, this is pure torture. I hate it, but you had best believe, I will be checking for the next installment.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
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Thank you so much, Nomi, for your extra special six-star review and kind words. This like so many of my stories just wouldn't stop. I wanted to write a single segment Halloween story. And ended up having to cut away many parts that just kept coming to mind to keep it to two parts. LOL. I appreciate YOU!
Comment from jenintorre
WOW! Love it. Such a well written and gritty down to earth story. I was gripped from start to finish and can't wait for the next episode. Ric you are a genius. Love Jen.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
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WOW! Love it. Such a well written and gritty down to earth story. I was gripped from start to finish and can't wait for the next episode. Ric you are a genius. Love Jen.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
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Thank you so much, Jen, for your extra special six-star review and kind words. I always wait to read what you have to say before I'm satisfied. I hope you'll like part two that I posted this morning, since Halloween is over. LOL. I appreciate YOU!
Comment from Debi Pick Marquette
What??? I have to wait for it?? Well I suppose, if I have to. But for this one I owe you a big fat Six. OMGosh, I haven't seen anything from you for so long, Ric. This one was awesome. Boy oh boy, what a mess Billy got himself into. And now it sounds almost harder for him to get out than Tubby to get out to go. However, I know they will. They have to, as that will be the best part of the story.
This was awesome, Ric and I can't wait for the next part. I am so happy that I caught you at the beginning of your book. Thanks for the entertainment this morning. Love it!! Love, Debi
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
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What??? I have to wait for it?? Well I suppose, if I have to. But for this one I owe you a big fat Six. OMGosh, I haven't seen anything from you for so long, Ric. This one was awesome. Boy oh boy, what a mess Billy got himself into. And now it sounds almost harder for him to get out than Tubby to get out to go. However, I know they will. They have to, as that will be the best part of the story.
This was awesome, Ric and I can't wait for the next part. I am so happy that I caught you at the beginning of your book. Thanks for the entertainment this morning. Love it!! Love, Debi
Comment Written 03-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
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Thank you so much, Debi, for your extra special six-star review and kind words. I'm so happy you liked the first part of my story. And I hope you'll like part two just as well. I appreciate YOU!
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Good work. Error-free as near as I can tell.
What a mess of pee.
I hate bullies. (I'd put 'em all in the side of the road if I could!)
Trick-or-treating will be a challenge.
Best wishes.
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reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
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Good work. Error-free as near as I can tell.
What a mess of pee.
I hate bullies. (I'd put 'em all in the side of the road if I could!)
Trick-or-treating will be a challenge.
Best wishes.
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Comment Written 03-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
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Thanks, Wayne, for your generous review and kind words. As a young boy, I was about 4-years younger than anyone else in my neighborhood and it was pure torture the things they did to me. But by the time I was twelve, I'd made up my mind that I hated bullies too, and still do. But I learned the best way to deal with them was to beat their butts. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
You begin by telling us about Thomas - how he came to be "Tubby" and exactly what he looks like now. And immediately we feel sorry for him, trapped in his body inside a small room and living vicariously through books and "little hellions" outside his window.
"snack like we use to do when . . ." change "use" to "used" as it describes something that happened in the past.
"his shriveled willy" LOL!
I would spell out Pabst Blue Ribbon when you first introduce it so that we know what it is. You can use PBR later.
You always say that characters drive the story, and you have certainly given us some interesting characters here - we can feel sorry for, despise, and cheer on. Can't wait for part two! I'll save my six for then:-)
SO HAPPY TO HAVE YOU BACK!!
xoxo
P
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reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
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You begin by telling us about Thomas - how he came to be "Tubby" and exactly what he looks like now. And immediately we feel sorry for him, trapped in his body inside a small room and living vicariously through books and "little hellions" outside his window.
"snack like we use to do when . . ." change "use" to "used" as it describes something that happened in the past.
"his shriveled willy" LOL!
I would spell out Pabst Blue Ribbon when you first introduce it so that we know what it is. You can use PBR later.
You always say that characters drive the story, and you have certainly given us some interesting characters here - we can feel sorry for, despise, and cheer on. Can't wait for part two! I'll save my six for then:-)
SO HAPPY TO HAVE YOU BACK!!
xoxo
P
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Comment Written 03-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
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Thank you bunches, Pamela, for your generous review and kind words. I made the changes you suggested and appreciate you pointing them out. And most of all, I just appreciate you being YOU!
Comment from Begin Again
He's not Tucker...but his spirit could be Tucker's youth...Has a heart of gold for his friend Tubby, an mind filled with ideas, and never forgets a promise.....Brilliant and nothing less than expected. I'm thrilled to see you posting. What a joy!
Smiles and hugs, Carol
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
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He's not Tucker...but his spirit could be Tucker's youth...Has a heart of gold for his friend Tubby, an mind filled with ideas, and never forgets a promise.....Brilliant and nothing less than expected. I'm thrilled to see you posting. What a joy!
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment Written 03-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
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Thank you so much, Carol, for your extra special six-star review and kind words. I'm so glad you liked my story and it could entertain you for a minute. I mainly just wanted to write something a little different than the usual Halloween story. There's nothing better than those few we enjoy reading daily to like what we do. I appreciate YOU!
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
II am very excited to be the first to review this. I am still reviewing fromm phone so I can't be as thorough as I would like but this was so well-written and fun to read. Your descriptions are just remarkable. Our club sure could use you as a member. I am anxious to read your next installment. Consider me impressed and proud. Great job!
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
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II am very excited to be the first to review this. I am still reviewing fromm phone so I can't be as thorough as I would like but this was so well-written and fun to read. Your descriptions are just remarkable. Our club sure could use you as a member. I am anxious to read your next installment. Consider me impressed and proud. Great job!
Comment Written 03-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
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Thank you so much, Marilyn, for your extra special six-star review and kind words. I'm so glad that you liked my story and I could entertain you for a minute or two. I hope you'll enjoy chapter two just as much. I appreciate YOU!
Comment from Charles D Ezell
Interesting. I could see the lad trying to pee in the bottle. so typical as it has happened to several of us who have faced the times. Good one, Ric. Glad you are writing.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
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Interesting. I could see the lad trying to pee in the bottle. so typical as it has happened to several of us who have faced the times. Good one, Ric. Glad you are writing.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
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Thank you so much, Charles, for your extra special six-star review and kind words. Yes, I think probably most of us have had similar experiences, even if under different circumstances. And peeing in a bottle has never been an easy task. LOL Much appreciated!