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Comment from Sallyo
Beautiful free verse, dashing along and keeping us in suspense until we find out who/what is being personified. I'll look forward to reading the rest of the postings in this one.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2024
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Beautiful free verse, dashing along and keeping us in suspense until we find out who/what is being personified. I'll look forward to reading the rest of the postings in this one.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2024
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I genuinely appreciate that; thank you so much!
Xo
Comment from estory
Nicely done. The wavering rhythm of the free verse here seems to capture the movements of the ballet dancer on the stage, crisp movements, delicate movements, swirling movements. And the abstract images articulate the complications of the soul; light moments, dark moments, secrets and silences, expressions of joy and the joy of creating. "She is the escape and the light": liked the expression of freedom in that; "The bearer of unborn brilliance" the sense of this secret joy and the wish to express that unexpressed joy. estory
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2024
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Nicely done. The wavering rhythm of the free verse here seems to capture the movements of the ballet dancer on the stage, crisp movements, delicate movements, swirling movements. And the abstract images articulate the complications of the soul; light moments, dark moments, secrets and silences, expressions of joy and the joy of creating. "She is the escape and the light": liked the expression of freedom in that; "The bearer of unborn brilliance" the sense of this secret joy and the wish to express that unexpressed joy. estory
Comment Written 02-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2024
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I am so thrilled you enjoyed it. Thank you so much!
Xo
Comment from Frank Malley
"She Lives" is a complex poem in which the woman who is the center of this I-narration poem is described and lauded in practically every line or pair of lines within the poem. Truth and desire freshen her muse, and she is open to inspirations that can be brightly lit and or the denizens of darkness. The speaker reveals herself to exult in dance and music and stimulation by the world. And she is compassionate. I found the phrase "preconceived craft" to be puzzling; would this refer to instinctive, congenital knowledge? The diction choices made by the poet are gentle and susurrant, inducing tranquility amid this cornucopia of self-asserting traits.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2024
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"She Lives" is a complex poem in which the woman who is the center of this I-narration poem is described and lauded in practically every line or pair of lines within the poem. Truth and desire freshen her muse, and she is open to inspirations that can be brightly lit and or the denizens of darkness. The speaker reveals herself to exult in dance and music and stimulation by the world. And she is compassionate. I found the phrase "preconceived craft" to be puzzling; would this refer to instinctive, congenital knowledge? The diction choices made by the poet are gentle and susurrant, inducing tranquility amid this cornucopia of self-asserting traits.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2024
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Frank, thank you so much! That phrase was meant to depict the duality of art- the instinctive and intuitive aspects of inspiration being honed and refined through the deliberate process of craft. It might've been a bit of a leap. Haha
I appreciate you!
Xo
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Stringing words can certainly engage one, n'est pas? Frank
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En effet, Frank!
Comment from John Ciarmello
This is so beautiful, Jess,
For me, this poem says:
We write the stanzas of diversity as we fight the battle of uniformity. We heal the wounds inflicted. We bound them in credulous gauze and put them to rest for the minds of others to with want they will.
I loved this! Best, JohnC
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2024
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This is so beautiful, Jess,
For me, this poem says:
We write the stanzas of diversity as we fight the battle of uniformity. We heal the wounds inflicted. We bound them in credulous gauze and put them to rest for the minds of others to with want they will.
I loved this! Best, JohnC
Comment Written 02-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2024
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John, I'm honored by your kind words and stars!! Thank you so much! Xo
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
An absolutely beautiful personification of poetry that sings its way down the page with inspired and imaginative imagery. It is the very source of our power and our actions. And you incorporate its meaning with immense skill and charm. Well done, Jess! Debbie
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2024
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An absolutely beautiful personification of poetry that sings its way down the page with inspired and imaginative imagery. It is the very source of our power and our actions. And you incorporate its meaning with immense skill and charm. Well done, Jess! Debbie
Comment Written 02-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Debbie! That means a lot coming from your talented pen!
Xoxo
Jess
Comment from Mark Jackson
That is fabulous the first 6 I have given this week and well deserved. I love the alliteration running through the piece. 'Weaving her way
through worlds of words,' was a highlight although I could have chosen many. Fantastic.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2024
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That is fabulous the first 6 I have given this week and well deserved. I love the alliteration running through the piece. 'Weaving her way
through worlds of words,' was a highlight although I could have chosen many. Fantastic.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2024
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I'm honored, Mark! Thanks so much!
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You're welcome
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Personal poetry is the best kind there is, because it evoked our emotions and opens up our hearts. Mothers hold the family together with their love and caring and I enjoyed your personification of them here Jessica, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2024
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Personal poetry is the best kind there is, because it evoked our emotions and opens up our hearts. Mothers hold the family together with their love and caring and I enjoyed your personification of them here Jessica, love Dolly x
Comment Written 02-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Dolly! Xo
Comment from CrystieCookie999
I liked reading this. It seems to personify poetry's muse.
These might be my favorite lines:
My soul,
my spirit spilled.
The trailing ink
of my confessions.
She is the escape
and the light
that guides me home.
Very nice share.
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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2024
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I liked reading this. It seems to personify poetry's muse.
These might be my favorite lines:
My soul,
my spirit spilled.
The trailing ink
of my confessions.
She is the escape
and the light
that guides me home.
Very nice share.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much! Xo
Comment from kahpot
Wow! I felt different emotions as I scrolled these words, but the thing that sticks with me is a thing of bravery, words, emotions should not be bottled up, display your feelings and people who read or hear them will decide for themselves, I could go on-but you get the drift, very well written, I thoroughly enjoyed this ride****kahpot
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2024
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Wow! I felt different emotions as I scrolled these words, but the thing that sticks with me is a thing of bravery, words, emotions should not be bottled up, display your feelings and people who read or hear them will decide for themselves, I could go on-but you get the drift, very well written, I thoroughly enjoyed this ride****kahpot
Comment Written 01-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2024
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I'm honored!! Thank you so much!! Xo
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Oooh! What a cool (and THOROUGH!) personification of your poetic soul! My favorite part was:
she stitches the wounds
she inflicts.
I identified with that very strongly. Sometimes, it is so painful to plumb those depths in order to release the words and feelings properly. But then, once they're out, there is a healing as you read them back to yourself.
Great piece, Jessica, you talented poet, you!
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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2024
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Oooh! What a cool (and THOROUGH!) personification of your poetic soul! My favorite part was:
she stitches the wounds
she inflicts.
I identified with that very strongly. Sometimes, it is so painful to plumb those depths in order to release the words and feelings properly. But then, once they're out, there is a healing as you read them back to yourself.
Great piece, Jessica, you talented poet, you!
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Comment Written 01-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2024
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:) :) Thank you so much!! Xoxo
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My pleasure!