Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
Viewing comments for Chapter 49 "Charon Comes Late"Musings of an old man - 2022
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Comment from RodG
We sympathize with the Speaker who is pleading for a quick painless death for her loved one. Good description of the dying woman both past and present. You adhere to the challenging demands of the Heroic sonnet with flawless meter and well-chosen rhymes. Rod
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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We sympathize with the Speaker who is pleading for a quick painless death for her loved one. Good description of the dying woman both past and present. You adhere to the challenging demands of the Heroic sonnet with flawless meter and well-chosen rhymes. Rod
Comment Written 24-May-2022
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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RodG, thank you very much!
Comment from John Ciarmello
This is a beautiful read. My interpretation of your work would only misplace its elegant words and meaning. This is truly for someone else to understand and absorb its true content. The artwork is beautiful as well. I wish you much success with the contest.
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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This is a beautiful read. My interpretation of your work would only misplace its elegant words and meaning. This is truly for someone else to understand and absorb its true content. The artwork is beautiful as well. I wish you much success with the contest.
Comment Written 24-May-2022
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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John, thank you - in summary it is about a lover who is pleading that the ferryman - Charon comes to take is dying love across the river of Styx into death only to have is wife release her hold on her dying body and rise to her heavenly release for all pain and illness, before the ferryman arrives.
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
I enjoyed reading this post. This is well composed and presented. You did an nice job with prompt, very imaginative. The descriptive language used really created a crystal clear image of the emotions felt. The rhymes work well without feeling forced. Well done!
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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I enjoyed reading this post. This is well composed and presented. You did an nice job with prompt, very imaginative. The descriptive language used really created a crystal clear image of the emotions felt. The rhymes work well without feeling forced. Well done!
Comment Written 24-May-2022
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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K.L. thank you - I have always, frankly, struggled with sonnets in the past so these comments are very helpful making me hopeful that I have cracked the code.
Comment from Fleedleflump
I love the vitriol in your final quatrain - there's a venom to the language and it realigns the tone of the whole piece. Love the conclusion of relief through release, of peace at cost, of inevitability.
Beautifully written with flawless meter and a brilliant entry to the contest :-).
Mike
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reply by the author on 24-May-2022
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I love the vitriol in your final quatrain - there's a venom to the language and it realigns the tone of the whole piece. Love the conclusion of relief through release, of peace at cost, of inevitability.
Beautifully written with flawless meter and a brilliant entry to the contest :-).
Mike
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Comment Written 24-May-2022
reply by the author on 24-May-2022
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Mike I am very honored, I have struggled in the past with sonnets. You comments are so valued, thanks!
Comment from royowen
Well done for writing this heroic sonnet, then one can get the five stanzas form which is taxing, this is beautifully written my friend, the theme is great and the language is superb, and the rhyming very sound, well done, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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Well done for writing this heroic sonnet, then one can get the five stanzas form which is taxing, this is beautifully written my friend, the theme is great and the language is superb, and the rhyming very sound, well done, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 24-May-2022
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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Roy, as you so know only all to well, I have always, frankly, struggled with sonnets in the past so these comments are very helpful. Making me hopeful that I have cracked the code. :)
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Most welcome