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Heart Crafted Poems - 2022

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Musings of an old man - 2022

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Comment from Teri7
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This is a very well written poem you have penned. You used very good descriptive words and very nice imagery from the art work you chose. If you are like me you are here because the Lord is not ready for you to leave this world. He has more for you to do to help others see the light! Blessings, Teri/

Some days I feel useless until I think about Jesus and what He did for us all! May God bless you my friend and brother in the Lord!

 Comment Written 17-May-2022


reply by the author on 18-May-2022
    Teri, my everyday mantra is Father, God, please make me an instrument of loving neutrality to do good works ...
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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Your free verse is well thought out, JLR. I like the formatting
of the verses with the ending asking a question. I like the way
you rhymed the last line of each verse in monorhyme. You
give readers many examples of what's on your mind about time
with the main one being why am I here? The last verse is unique
in its formatting as it seems to disappear into time and space.
The art choice is a good pairing.
Respectfully, Jan

 Comment Written 17-May-2022


reply by the author on 18-May-2022
    Hi Jan, thank you I am pleased the vanished words - like time connected for you.
Comment from C2
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I enjoyed your poetic digression on thoughts about the meaning of life--specifically your life. I hope the pattern reveals itself before you reach the other side. I hope we all get a revelation. Nice work!

 Comment Written 17-May-2022


reply by the author on 17-May-2022
    C2 Thank a ton!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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I enjoyed reading this poem. The use of font size added to the meaning of the poem. I think all of us have pondered these same things. Thank you for sharing this poem with us.

 Comment Written 17-May-2022


reply by the author on 17-May-2022
    Thank you! I really struggled with thew idea and went with it- so again, thank you!
Comment from Tom Horonzy
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I could find no definition for fatiloquent, and even if I could, wouldn't a more germane word be better? The structure is indelible. As you write, I live in the same sphere. Very well thought out.

 Comment Written 17-May-2022


reply by the author on 17-May-2022
    Tom, the definition for fatiloquent is in my author notes but to save you the lookup Fatiloquent: Prophetic; speaking of fate
reply by Tom Horonzy on 17-May-2022
    Yes, I saw it it it was notinmydictionary
Comment from Earl Corp
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I think we all wonder the same thing. Also the mystery of what is going to happen and when it will end is another one that weeighs heavily on my mind. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 17-May-2022


reply by the author on 17-May-2022
    So true it is all part of the human condition that we bring with us.
Comment from karenina
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A pensive, quietly reflective, intelligent free verse. Well presented, with impactful questions as to the value of one's life...
The age-old question revisited originally:
What have we brought to this life?
What legacy will we leave?

Excellent use of diminishing font size...

A thoughtful poem, most effective!

Karenina

 Comment Written 17-May-2022


reply by the author on 17-May-2022
    I appreciate your description ---pensive -- quietly reflective! That fits me to a T :)
reply by karenina on 17-May-2022
    You forgot to include INTELLIGENT!

    :)
Comment from Fleedleflump
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I love the pensive pace to this. You've played to the strength of free verse, primarily that you can control speed and hence affect how the reader reads you piece. Beautiful use of descending font size to fade away on thoughts of time.

Wonderfully written.

Mike

On its first use (line 4) should 'decern' be 'discern' or am I missing something?

 Comment Written 17-May-2022


reply by the author on 17-May-2022
    Mike, I am using the word decern correctly to: Decide; determine; decree. (see notes below poem)
reply by Fleedleflump on 17-May-2022
    Since you'd used discern elsewhere, I thought this might be the case - many thanks for the steer :-)
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
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I enjoyed your poem. This is a great line..... Tumbleweeds pushed by the winds of life's turbulent times. The rhythm is thrown off a bit in stanza #3 there is internal and end rhyme there and it impedes somewhat the flow of what you said is a free verse poem. Otherwise...great job!

 Comment Written 17-May-2022


reply by the author on 17-May-2022
    Sandra, good input. I changed rage to slump - eliminating the unintended internal rhyme --
reply by Sandra Nelms-Ludwig on 17-May-2022
    You are most welcome. Check out my poems under my profile.
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
    Sandra Nelms-Ludwig -First thank you for your service. I have read a handful of your honest and powerful poems about life! While we wore different foot coverings - we traversed hard scrabble paths, me being a handful of years ahead but for many reasons I write I came from the wrong side of the tracks and fought my way past my past - I have friended you, so I learn more from a better poet than I.
reply by Sandra Nelms-Ludwig on 18-May-2022
    Don't know about the better poet part. I opt for the word a different type of poet. Welcome friend and kindred soul. Once one knows the underbelly of life one is forever changed by it. Thanks!
Comment from KJ
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Lovely, evocative piece. Great use of imagery and wordsmithing. You might want to check but I think the word on the 5th line is spelled 'discern'??
Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 17-May-2022


reply by the author on 17-May-2022
    KJ -- thanks -- my intention - Is there a pattern I can decern? //decern: Decide; determine; decree.
reply by KJ on 18-May-2022
    Ok great!