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Heart Crafted Poems - 2022

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Musings of an old man - 2022

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Comment from barbara.wilkey
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I'm a retired first grade teacher and I happen to dearly love children's poetry. Your writing prompt entry certainly did not disappoint me. It was fun to read, and I can image the children would love to read what the different animals were doing.

 Comment Written 17-May-2022

reply by the author on 17-May-2022
    Barbara, you then are on my A list as one of the best for your dedication to first graders! My first and third grade teachers were many decades long mentors, to whom I owe so very much! This is my second attempt at a children's poem, the first one I received such bad reviews on was quite uncertain whether to enter another one. But, heck! Why not press on, as it said!
Comment from Ja Majal
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Aha! This was a super cute entry into the contest! I love the animal natures feeling so humanlike!
I wish you all the best in the contest Good luck!

 Comment Written 17-May-2022

reply by the author on 17-May-2022
    Ja Majal, I do thank you! Are you new to FanStory? If so, welcome!
reply by Ja Majal on 17-May-2022
    I was around on FanStory in 2018-2019 but I am back now!
reply by the author on 17-May-2022
    Excellent, I will look you up! Welcome back!
Comment from Tom Horonzy
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I really loved it even unsure how a squirrel would sigh eating honey, as if it hurt to do so, then climb a tree and crack nuts open with the same tooth. And another thing. Do you snails like sandhills? Whatever. As a child's poem, they wouldn't ask such question, only smile, laugh and cuddle closer. nice job.

 Comment Written 17-May-2022

reply by the author on 17-May-2022
    my thoughts, create the question, search for answers ... good foundational education we all once enjoyed.
Comment from LJbutterfly
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Children are fascinated by animals and would love envisioning this poem. The stories flowed smoothly and was fun to read. This would make a great picture book. My favorite is Bobby, the bobcat. Best wishes in the contest.

 Comment Written 17-May-2022

reply by the author on 17-May-2022
    thank you so much!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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All these cute animals and their habits are endearing to children and this story will do well in the contest, I wish you luck, good rhymes with no particular metre, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 17-May-2022

reply by the author on 17-May-2022
    I hope you are correct, and I appreciate your validation.
Comment from dmt1967
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This poem did make me smile and I love the accompanying picture. This was a very well written Childs' poem. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 17-May-2022

reply by the author on 17-May-2022
    Thank you!
Comment from Wendy G
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I am sure children will enjoy this one. It is lively and flows well. Illustrations will help children identify animals if it is published. They can make appropriate facial expressions to reflect what you have written. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy

 Comment Written 16-May-2022

reply by the author on 17-May-2022
    Thank you!
Comment from Gloria ....
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Excellent use of literary devices to bring this children's poem to life.

The honey is very, very sticky, and all the wee animals having some fun with day will be a delight for children of all ages.

Wishing you great luck in the voting booth. :)

Gloria

 Comment Written 16-May-2022

reply by the author on 17-May-2022
    I appreciate the good wishes, I have been doing poorly, of late, in this regard.
Comment from Paul McFarland
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Nice children's poem. I might suggest that the meter should be cleaned up a bit. That is very important in poems for children. Giving names to the animals was a good idea.

 Comment Written 16-May-2022

reply by the author on 17-May-2022
    Thanks Paul.
Comment from Goosey Gander
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I love this contest entry, and I wish you tremendous luck in the children's poetry contest! My favorite line is, "Stevie decided nuts were better." Stevie seems so matter-of-fact when you state this. Thank you very much for sharing!!!
-GG

 Comment Written 16-May-2022

reply by the author on 17-May-2022
    Taking hold of smart choices indeed.