Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
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Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Author:
Your stacked 5-7-5 poem paints a nice portrait filled with color and the hope of Spring and Easter's arrival.
We had a rough Winter here, we're expecting a lot of 'maybe snow' tomorrow.
I'm glad your poem brought me out of the cold with its cheerful message.
Good luck in the contest.
Cindy
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2022
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Author:
Your stacked 5-7-5 poem paints a nice portrait filled with color and the hope of Spring and Easter's arrival.
We had a rough Winter here, we're expecting a lot of 'maybe snow' tomorrow.
I'm glad your poem brought me out of the cold with its cheerful message.
Good luck in the contest.
Cindy
Comment Written 10-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2022
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Cindy, yes it sems old man winter still has a grip on things in some parts.
Comment from Jane Jane King
Beautiful picture and prose poem...love the phrase splashes of colors...I would remove the coma after so in second line.
Also, just an idea...maybe replace droplets of raindrops with falling raindrops or floating raindrops. Another idea...change as Easter morn nears to on this Easter morn.
Anyway, it's a lovely poem.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2022
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Beautiful picture and prose poem...love the phrase splashes of colors...I would remove the coma after so in second line.
Also, just an idea...maybe replace droplets of raindrops with falling raindrops or floating raindrops. Another idea...change as Easter morn nears to on this Easter morn.
Anyway, it's a lovely poem.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2022
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Jane thanks
Comment from Versch
This is an excellent contest entry for Stacked 5-7-5. But I am wondering about the second stanza though, "couldn't compete with this array." Don't you think this has eight syllables in it because "couldn't" has two. What do you think? Good luck!
Suggestion:
- couldn't compete with this array -> couldn't vie with this array
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2022
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This is an excellent contest entry for Stacked 5-7-5. But I am wondering about the second stanza though, "couldn't compete with this array." Don't you think this has eight syllables in it because "couldn't" has two. What do you think? Good luck!
Suggestion:
- couldn't compete with this array -> couldn't vie with this array
Comment Written 10-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2022
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Versh I think conjuntions are okay
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your stacked 5-7-5 poem is excellent in every respect--skillfully written and vividly descriptive of the bursting out of spring, with all of its delightful elements in nature.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2022
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Your stacked 5-7-5 poem is excellent in every respect--skillfully written and vividly descriptive of the bursting out of spring, with all of its delightful elements in nature.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2022
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Thank you very much Janice,
Comment from Pearl Edwards
This is a lovely stack of 5-7-5 poems about spring. The delightful colours of the new blooms, and I especially enjoyed the
Droplets of raindrops dancing ever so gently
Beautifully written and good luck in the contest. Cheers
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2022
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This is a lovely stack of 5-7-5 poems about spring. The delightful colours of the new blooms, and I especially enjoyed the
Droplets of raindrops dancing ever so gently
Beautifully written and good luck in the contest. Cheers
Comment Written 10-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2022
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Pearl, thank you for yourdeligthful comments
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
It's a lovely picture to go with a very special poem. I especially like when you compared the flowers to a kaleidoscope. It makes it more special when you remind us that Easter morn is not far off.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2022
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It's a lovely picture to go with a very special poem. I especially like when you compared the flowers to a kaleidoscope. It makes it more special when you remind us that Easter morn is not far off.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2022
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Carol, thankl you so much!
Comment from Melodie Michelle
Perfect entry for the Stacked 5-7-5 writing prompt with the best of wishes in the contest my friend! The words were smooth and didn't seem forced;-)
Thank you for sharing this piece with us and many blessings to you and your family!
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2022
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Perfect entry for the Stacked 5-7-5 writing prompt with the best of wishes in the contest my friend! The words were smooth and didn't seem forced;-)
Thank you for sharing this piece with us and many blessings to you and your family!
Comment Written 10-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2022
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from LJbutterfly
Your description of spring used words that are gentle, dazzling, and dreamy. You use words that are creatively descriptive, like "droplets of raindrops dancing ever so gently on tips of petals." Your artwork pairs perfectly. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2022
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Your description of spring used words that are gentle, dazzling, and dreamy. You use words that are creatively descriptive, like "droplets of raindrops dancing ever so gently on tips of petals." Your artwork pairs perfectly. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2022
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Thank you! 🙏🙏🙏
Comment from Carlos' girl
I like the easy feel and emotion of this poem. Its pretty and flows well. I do question the phrase " droplets of raindrops; I think it is redundant... I would change the word droplets
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2022
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I like the easy feel and emotion of this poem. Its pretty and flows well. I do question the phrase " droplets of raindrops; I think it is redundant... I would change the word droplets
Comment Written 10-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2022
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Thanks! 🙏🙏🙏
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So sweet. You are welcome
Comment from Terry Broxson
A beautiful poem to go with a beautiful picture for this contest, good luck in the contest. The imagery of raindrops dancing is excellent as is the kaleidoscope of colorful wildflowers blooming magnificently. Good job.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2022
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A beautiful poem to go with a beautiful picture for this contest, good luck in the contest. The imagery of raindrops dancing is excellent as is the kaleidoscope of colorful wildflowers blooming magnificently. Good job.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2022
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Thank you Terry, I do appreciate your review!