The right time
He waited for ...29 total reviews
Comment from robyn corum
Wendy,
This is a sweet and tender, hopeful story. I enjoyed it and thought it was well written. I am glad this poor, guilt-ridden father was able to finally find release and comfort in the arms of our kind adopted Brother, Christ, and in the home of our Father God.
I only made one note as I read - I thought I would still go ahead and share it:
*He never spoke of religion. Or the supernatural. Or the war.
--> 1.) POW! The reader is hit upside the head with the first intriguing nugget which draws them immediately into the story. There's no way I would stop reading now. *smile*
Nice job - Good luck in the voting!
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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Wendy,
This is a sweet and tender, hopeful story. I enjoyed it and thought it was well written. I am glad this poor, guilt-ridden father was able to finally find release and comfort in the arms of our kind adopted Brother, Christ, and in the home of our Father God.
I only made one note as I read - I thought I would still go ahead and share it:
*He never spoke of religion. Or the supernatural. Or the war.
--> 1.) POW! The reader is hit upside the head with the first intriguing nugget which draws them immediately into the story. There's no way I would stop reading now. *smile*
Nice job - Good luck in the voting!
Comment Written 14-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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Thank you so much Robyn, and also for the good wishes! What a wonderful review!
Wendy
Comment from Theodore McDowell
Wendy, a beautiful showing of how the gospel works. There are so many layers of truth in this poem. A very wise and heartfelt post and stunned me. Thanks for this wonderful offering.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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Wendy, a beautiful showing of how the gospel works. There are so many layers of truth in this poem. A very wise and heartfelt post and stunned me. Thanks for this wonderful offering.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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Thank you very much for such an encouraging review. I appreciate your words.
Wendy
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
A well-written uplifting story. For my taste you belaboured the point of him changing the side he was lying on or maybe your handling of it was a bit off and you should have mentioned his medical condition? (although I understood the allusion easily enough). Kate xx
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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A well-written uplifting story. For my taste you belaboured the point of him changing the side he was lying on or maybe your handling of it was a bit off and you should have mentioned his medical condition? (although I understood the allusion easily enough). Kate xx
Comment Written 14-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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Thank you Kate for your thoughtful review. I will reconsider if that is needed.
Wendy
Comment from Begin Again
Oh so beautiful, Wendy. I believe in every word you wrote... there has been chosen a time for all of us and I pray we all are ready. It would be nice if we had prior notice, but of course, we have had our notice, now it is up to us to be ready. This was a great story to wake up to this morning and I thank you for sharing.
Happy Valentine's Day, my friend.
Hugs, Carol
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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Oh so beautiful, Wendy. I believe in every word you wrote... there has been chosen a time for all of us and I pray we all are ready. It would be nice if we had prior notice, but of course, we have had our notice, now it is up to us to be ready. This was a great story to wake up to this morning and I thank you for sharing.
Happy Valentine's Day, my friend.
Hugs, Carol
Comment Written 14-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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Thank you Carol, for a lovely review, and also for the wonderful six stars. You have honoured me, and I value your opinion greatly!
Wendy
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Great work. Well written.
And with two words to spare!
Precisely. Very peacefully. - I've had reviewers point out sentences that lacked verb, or predicate, etc. It's personal expression. Dramatic effect. The complete sentence is understood. I think maybe they were simply trying to get the minimum character count!
Good luck in the contest.
God bless you and best wishes.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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Great work. Well written.
And with two words to spare!
Precisely. Very peacefully. - I've had reviewers point out sentences that lacked verb, or predicate, etc. It's personal expression. Dramatic effect. The complete sentence is understood. I think maybe they were simply trying to get the minimum character count!
Good luck in the contest.
God bless you and best wishes.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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Thank you Wayne, for your thoughtful, encouraging and astute review. I agree. One must be free to use dramatic effect as one feels is appropriate to the writing. Thanks too for the good wishes.
Wendy
Comment from royowen
Yep, you're absolutely right about this.great little story, I'll guarantee that this is true, God gave me scriptures when I needed them before I read them, the Spirit fulfils His word "Don't worry what you swill say ..." Luke 12:11, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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Yep, you're absolutely right about this.great little story, I'll guarantee that this is true, God gave me scriptures when I needed them before I read them, the Spirit fulfils His word "Don't worry what you swill say ..." Luke 12:11, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 14-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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Thank you very much Roy. A lovely review, very encouraging.
Wendy
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Most welcome
Comment from LisaMay
The Lord's mysterious ways worked to reveal the Truth to Bob. He was spiritually cleansed, his wartime past forgiven. How reassuring for his faithful daughter to know that when his time had come he went peacefully when Jesus came for him. You have blended a strong spiritual aspect with the supernatural aspect of how Bob's overt rejection of Lindy's faith was changed.
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reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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The Lord's mysterious ways worked to reveal the Truth to Bob. He was spiritually cleansed, his wartime past forgiven. How reassuring for his faithful daughter to know that when his time had come he went peacefully when Jesus came for him. You have blended a strong spiritual aspect with the supernatural aspect of how Bob's overt rejection of Lindy's faith was changed.
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Comment Written 14-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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Thanks so much Lisa. Great review, and thank you for the encouragement. There are a few elements of fact with my father's story, and the rest is fiction.
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We write what we know then embroider for the most successful stories, and families provide rich pickings for inspiration.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
I like and have enjoyed the read of this fiction; faith in Lord is prime, everything changes but on time as our Heavenly Father wishes and justifies; he waited for patiently and at last Jesus came for him at the right time; well said, well done; post more. ALCREATOR LITT DEAR (D R)
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reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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I like and have enjoyed the read of this fiction; faith in Lord is prime, everything changes but on time as our Heavenly Father wishes and justifies; he waited for patiently and at last Jesus came for him at the right time; well said, well done; post more. ALCREATOR LITT DEAR (D R)
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Comment Written 14-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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Thank you very much for your kind review. i appreciate it.
wendy
Comment from Carlos' girl
Wow..I really love this supernatural story and the supporting scripture of John in author's notes. So beautiful..thank you for sharing your talent in such a loving way.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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Wow..I really love this supernatural story and the supporting scripture of John in author's notes. So beautiful..thank you for sharing your talent in such a loving way.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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Wow, thank you so much for your encouragement and also for the exceptional rating and six stars. It's a great honour and I value it. Wendy