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Comment from Theodore McDowell
Damn, I so wish I had a six. The refrain throughout the story of I don't want to do it, is absolutely haunting and heartbreaking. She seems pulled by so many undercurrents. Leaving the story "unfinished" is sheer brilliance. Your stories stir me with such emotion and pathos. It is simply not enough the say well done.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2022
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Damn, I so wish I had a six. The refrain throughout the story of I don't want to do it, is absolutely haunting and heartbreaking. She seems pulled by so many undercurrents. Leaving the story "unfinished" is sheer brilliance. Your stories stir me with such emotion and pathos. It is simply not enough the say well done.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2022
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I feel blessed once again. I hoped the reader would pick up on the repetition of I don't want to do it. It had so many vibes bouncing around it each time she said it... I recently read a story about finding a baby in the trash. My stomach churned so violently I couldn't get it out of my head. I hope in some way my story helps.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Unfortunately, this is a reality that way too many don't understand until it's way too late. If you have sex before you're ready to become a parent, there are consequences. I wish this story was required reading for all teenagers. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2022
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Unfortunately, this is a reality that way too many don't understand until it's way too late. If you have sex before you're ready to become a parent, there are consequences. I wish this story was required reading for all teenagers. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2022
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So do I!!! I read an article about finding a baby in the trash and my stomach turned inside out. I felt I needed to write something to combat the sickness in me. Thanks for the review.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was incredible. 'I don't want to do it.' Those words are spoken by many young girls left to face the consequences alone. It's a shame boys and men aren't marked in some way to show they have given a girl a child. But they get away with it without the slightest bruise. This was a sad story, but many young girls will relate to it. Well done, my friend, excellent story writing. :)) Sandra xxx
I thought this was going to be the next chapter, but I enjoyed reading this one anyway!! xxxx
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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2022
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That was incredible. 'I don't want to do it.' Those words are spoken by many young girls left to face the consequences alone. It's a shame boys and men aren't marked in some way to show they have given a girl a child. But they get away with it without the slightest bruise. This was a sad story, but many young girls will relate to it. Well done, my friend, excellent story writing. :)) Sandra xxx
I thought this was going to be the next chapter, but I enjoyed reading this one anyway!! xxxx
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Comment Written 02-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2022
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I knew you did, but I felt this in my bones this morning after reading a horrifying story about a baby found in the trash. My stomach turned and I just felt the need to show it doesn't have to end that way.
Thanks for the review. Now I am in off to write the next chapter. No girls today so I am free!
Hugs and smiles and love, Carol
Comment from Sally Law
This is such a difficult decision but the right one when a life is involved. That's a little person in there, at every stage from the moment of conception. Sabal's fears and feelings are natural, even when you're married. No one prepared me for natural childbirth. I tried to be prepared, but it was grueling with each boy. They were all big babies. There was a minute or two when I thought, "what the hell was I thinking?" Minutes later, the most beautiful wonderful moments of my life. Life is wonderful, and sacred. The moment and we think otherwise and take steps to end the pregnancy, we have died too. Sweet soul you have pictured here. I would never let my babies go. Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs
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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2022
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This is such a difficult decision but the right one when a life is involved. That's a little person in there, at every stage from the moment of conception. Sabal's fears and feelings are natural, even when you're married. No one prepared me for natural childbirth. I tried to be prepared, but it was grueling with each boy. They were all big babies. There was a minute or two when I thought, "what the hell was I thinking?" Minutes later, the most beautiful wonderful moments of my life. Life is wonderful, and sacred. The moment and we think otherwise and take steps to end the pregnancy, we have died too. Sweet soul you have pictured here. I would never let my babies go. Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs
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Comment Written 02-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2022
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Thank you so much Sally. I read an article about someone tossing a baby in the trash and I couldn't fathom what could possibly allow anyone to believe that was the only way out of a difficult situation. I too went through natural childbirth and the last one was caught in the birth canal for hours....but I wouldn't give him up for anything.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from Susan Newell
Carol,
This is a very well written glimpse into the inner turmoils of a pregnant teenage girl. The repetition of "I don't want to do it," is perfect, as was the ending. Her nine month joirney took her a long distance.
Sue
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2022
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Carol,
This is a very well written glimpse into the inner turmoils of a pregnant teenage girl. The repetition of "I don't want to do it," is perfect, as was the ending. Her nine month joirney took her a long distance.
Sue
Comment Written 02-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2022
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Thank you so very much Susan. I see my granddaughter playing with "fire" and fear for what decisions she might make in the future. I would hope she would consider the "life" of a fetus before doing something horrible ...like tossing a life in the trash.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from Mrs. KT
Very realistic and moving, Carol!
I taught a number of young gals who found themselves in "Sable's" situation... All of them kept their babies...
So many difficult decisions to make, and you present them all - clearly - to the reader.
Kudos!
diane
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2022
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Very realistic and moving, Carol!
I taught a number of young gals who found themselves in "Sable's" situation... All of them kept their babies...
So many difficult decisions to make, and you present them all - clearly - to the reader.
Kudos!
diane
Comment Written 02-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2022
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Thank you so very much, Diane. I read an article recently of a baby being left in the trash and my heart was literally heartbroken. There are so many different ways to turn nowadays and I can't even fathom anyone being so terrified that a life would have no value but the trash. It is a difficult decision to give a child away, but it sure beats throwing it away.
Hugs, Carol