What could go wrong?
Always ask yourself ...29 total reviews
Comment from pome lover
good story, title and ending.
Maddeningly unthinking sisters (to put it mildly) and the brother didn't use his head (to think) either.
Story moved along well with a great last line.
Very good entry.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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good story, title and ending.
Maddeningly unthinking sisters (to put it mildly) and the brother didn't use his head (to think) either.
Story moved along well with a great last line.
Very good entry.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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Thanks so much! A great review. When the first accident happened he was not yet two, and the second one when he was only four, so he probably at that stage still trusted his big sisters! The third was modified ... and the skydiving was fiction, lol. Thanks so much for your comments. Appreciated.
Wendy
Comment from Gert sherwood
Always ask yourself ...
What could go wrong?
Wendy G
Your stories about what go wrong are excellent. My question is did Dan use the voucher for a tandem sky-diving?
Gert
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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Always ask yourself ...
What could go wrong?
Wendy G
Your stories about what go wrong are excellent. My question is did Dan use the voucher for a tandem sky-diving?
Gert
Comment Written 18-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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Hi Gert, Thanks for a wonderful review! The answer is that that was fiction! Lol.
Wendy
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Wendy G
so it was fiction I read it like it was what really took place.
Gert
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The first two accidents were non-fiction. The grass carting was part fact and part-fiction, the sky diving bit was fiction. So a bit of a mix. Lol.
Wendy
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Wendy
what ever they were
I liked how you wrote them were well done
Gert
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Indeed!
Excellent writing. Great work.
Anna and Bella need to be watched.
In my case in was closer to - "Hey Mom! Watch this."
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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Indeed!
Excellent writing. Great work.
Anna and Bella need to be watched.
In my case in was closer to - "Hey Mom! Watch this."
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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Lol. What a great review. Several bits were true, others were fiction. But life was never dull! Many thanks.
Wendy
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... it was closer
I need to slow down in my two finger typing
Comment from lyenochka
Lol! Oh my goodness! I think Dan figured out that his sisters had it out for him and it's a miracle he survived until adulthood! I liked your refrain of "What could possibly go wrong?" after each mishap and at the end!
Hope you do well in the contest!
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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Lol! Oh my goodness! I think Dan figured out that his sisters had it out for him and it's a miracle he survived until adulthood! I liked your refrain of "What could possibly go wrong?" after each mishap and at the end!
Hope you do well in the contest!
Comment Written 18-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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Thanks so much. Some of this was true, other bits were fiction. But yes, one needs to always ask the question ... Thanks too for your good wishes.
Wendy
Comment from Pantygynt
This guy seems somewhat accident prone. I would definitely advise againnst sky diving atvthis point in time. There are far too many things that could go wrong. This one grabbed my attention out of sheer curiosity - what next?
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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This guy seems somewhat accident prone. I would definitely advise againnst sky diving atvthis point in time. There are far too many things that could go wrong. This one grabbed my attention out of sheer curiosity - what next?
Comment Written 18-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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Yes, but usually at the instigation of Anna and Bella. Lol. many thanks for your review - much appreciated.
Wendy
Comment from Theodore McDowell
Great story for the prompt, Wendy!!!!! I love your storytelling ability. Poor brother was always being prodded into the daredevil role!!!!!!! I liked the repetition of the refrain--what could go wrong?
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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Great story for the prompt, Wendy!!!!! I love your storytelling ability. Poor brother was always being prodded into the daredevil role!!!!!!! I liked the repetition of the refrain--what could go wrong?
Comment Written 18-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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I am so glad you enjoyed this one. Partly based on real life. Many thanks for your super review! Very encouraging.
Wendy
Comment from royowen
I just had to burst into laughter, trusting these girls, Anna and Bella a lot of pain, angst and distress in his young life, skydiving, what could possibly go wrong? I'd run a million miles away if I were he, I'd fly to another planet, sheesh, beautifully written Wendy, good luck, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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I just had to burst into laughter, trusting these girls, Anna and Bella a lot of pain, angst and distress in his young life, skydiving, what could possibly go wrong? I'd run a million miles away if I were he, I'd fly to another planet, sheesh, beautifully written Wendy, good luck, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 18-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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Thank you Roy for your super review! Greatly appreciate it and I am glad you enjoyed it!
Wendy
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Most welcome
Comment from LisaMay
Super story - I loved it. Terrific build up then a punchy last line, now that we know something definitely WILL go wrong. Those sisters are dangerous to be around. Poor Dan is a marked man in more ways than one.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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Super story - I loved it. Terrific build up then a punchy last line, now that we know something definitely WILL go wrong. Those sisters are dangerous to be around. Poor Dan is a marked man in more ways than one.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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Thanks so much Jenny - I greatly appreciate this fabulous review and rating. Six stars is an honour, greatly valued.
Wendy
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Your story definitely deserved it.
Comment from Thatguypk
I absolutely loved this. Poor Dan, to be so accident-prone when at the mercy of his roguish sisters. The ending was unexpected, and extremely witty. I hope he turned down the birthday gift!! Thank you for sharing this piece of fun. If this is a competition piece, best of luck with it. :-)
PK.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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I absolutely loved this. Poor Dan, to be so accident-prone when at the mercy of his roguish sisters. The ending was unexpected, and extremely witty. I hope he turned down the birthday gift!! Thank you for sharing this piece of fun. If this is a competition piece, best of luck with it. :-)
PK.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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Thank you so much for a super review. Also for the Exceptional rating and six stars. An honour I greatly appreciate! I am so glad you enjoyed my story
Wendy
