Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

What a great and perfect ending, Sandra. I enjoyed reading this conclusion. Your images are awesome. Your lines read well with great imagery and rhymes. I love the idea that this is for young children and has an awesome message of teamwork. Best wishes with y9our publishing endeavor!
Respectfully, Jan

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021

Thank you so very much, Jan! You have been great througout my story, and I've really appreciated it. Your review is wonderful, thank you! Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx

Comment from lancellot

Excellent

A very good conclusion to your poetic story. I really like that you didn't use human rope or trash dumped into the sea. Good research finding a creature that resembles rope enough that it would seem plausible and fit the story.

Nice to have a friendly shark too.

Well done.

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021

Thank you so much for this lovely review, Lancellot. It took a while to find it, but when I did, I couldn't believe how close to rope it looked. I'm glad you enjoyed it, thanks! :)) Sandra xx

Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan

Excellent

Children's stories are hard to write. It is tougher to keep a child interested because a child does not have the concentration of an adult. You have done it so wonderfully well in narrating this amazing tale. Well done! Thanks for sharing!

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021

Thank you so much for your lovely review, Seshadri, I'm so pleased you enjoyed reading this story. Now to sort it out for publishing!! Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx

Comment from Sanku

Exceptional

What a wonderful tale .The children successfully pulled the tooth out.How did you think of such an idea?
Thanks for telling us about sea whips...All the best for the publication..may God bless you with more such ideas.

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021

You wouldn't believe this, but I broke a tooth just as I was starting this story. Then I found out that both Poppy and Odi liked to swim and how Odi loves whales! The mermaid was for Poppy. So, it all fitted into place! Thank you so much for this lovely review, Sanku, and that gorgeous gold star. Most of all, thank you for all your support. I really did appreciate it. Warm hugs my friend. :)) Sandra xxx

Comment from RPSaxena

Exceptional

Hello Sandramitchell,
What a wonderful piece of Children Poetry this is!
Lucid as well as PERFECTLY matching the theme phraseology.
Enchanting flow throughout from the beginning to the end with LOVELY rhyming scheme.
It BEAUTIFULLY depicts a story having the Moral: A friend in need is a friend indeed. Moreover, for such friends there is no dearth of desired help in times of need.
Impressive Presentation!
Pictures enhance depth and beauty of the poem.
Short Synopsis and Author Note, of course, are just like its plus points.
BEST OF LUCK!!

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021

I just loved your review, RP, thank you so very much! I'm so pleased you enjoyed this story and thank you for all your encouraging reviews you've given me, and your support. Also, a big thank you for that golden sixth star! Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx

reply by RPSaxena on 15-Sep-2021

Sandraxxx, Most Welcome!
With best wishes,
~ RP

Comment from JudyE

Excellent

All's well that ends well. Well done, Odi and Poppy! And well done you too! Your little friends are bound to love this and will have great fun colouring in the pictures.

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021

'Happy ever after' is my thing for children, and adults, too!! LOL. Thanks so much, Judy, for following the story and all your lovely comments about it. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx

Comment from bob cullen

Exceptional

This is so delightful. It would I feel certain entertain kids under ten. The tale is told beautifully told. I near passed on this one and I'm now thankful I didn't. So deserving of the sixth star.

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021

What a lovely thing to say, Bob, thank you so much. This book was fun to write and I learned a few things I had no idea of. I'm delighted you enjoyed reading it. Thank you so much for the golden sixth star, that was really nice of you. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx

Comment from lyenochka

Exceptional

Delightful story, Sandra! I love that you added more education about the sea whip and that you had a plethora of human and sea creatures all cooperate together to help another creature who was suffering.
I think you did a great job with the pictures you found on Pixabay!!

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021

Thank you so much, Helen! I did enjoy writing it, and I'm glad you liked the pictures I found on Pixabay. That is a brilliant site if you need pictures of any type. Thank you for the sixth star, my friend, I really appreciated both those and the review. Warm hugs, :)) Sandra xxx

reply by lyenochka on 13-Sep-2021

Congratulations on finishing yet another book, Sandra! 💖

reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021

Thank you, Helen. I'll be having a couple of weeks off editing and getting both books ready to publish. But I will make time to come in and do some reviewing. :)) Thanks for all your support, you're a good friend. xx

Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)

Excellent

Overall this poem is good, and as you say Robert's fine style of poetry is excellent for poems for children. This last section seemed a bit long for children to me, I'm afraid their attention will wander. Maybe you can refine it a bit.

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021

Thank you so much for this lovely review, Katherine! I'm delighted you enjoyed reading my little story. I wanted to finish it this week, but will be cutting it in half for the book. Warm hugs, Sandra xxxx

Comment from Elizabeth Emerald

Excellent

Charming conclusion--delightful whimsy--clever--octopus lending his handssssssss. That sea rope creature in an ingenious touch. Their parents will be googling that one!


I hope you enjoyed the final part of my little story about the poor whales=>WHALE'S toothache.

 Comment Written 12-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021

Thank you so much for this lovely review, Liz! And for pointing out the missing apostrophe. I'm delighted you enjoyed reading my little story. Warm hugs, Sandra xxxx