Comment from Dawn Munro

Exceptional

S9, L1 -- "There's children..." "Children is plural, so it has to be the abbreviation for 'there are'= "there're" is still okay with respect to meter, IMO, my brilliant friend. :))

What a delightful poem, and the presentation makes me want to have you illustrate any future children's book I write! :))

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2021

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2021

Aw, thank you so much, Dawn! No, you wouldn't want me to illustrate your books, trust me!! These come from Pixabay.com, you can use them for any purpose, private or commercial, and change them about, add to the pictures, and it's all free. Take a look! I forgot to put that in my author's notes, I'll do that now.
Thank you so much for the golden sixth star, my friend. It's so nice to see you on here again!! Sending you a humongous hug. :)) Sandra xxx ps, thank you for the pick-up, I'll sort that now! xxxx

reply by Dawn Munro on 24-Aug-2021

Oh! Thanks for sharing that info -- wonderful!
You're very welcome, Sandra -- much deserved.

Comment from ExperiencingLiphe

Excellent

This was fun and I loved the pictures throughout. I don't know if you've written any childrens books but this is a good start. Maybe I'll catch the next part.

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2021

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2021

Thank you so much for your lovely review. Yes, I've written ten other children's books for various ages up to 13years old. I enjoy getting back into the child side of my brain now and again!! Lol. I hope you do manage to read the next part. There are 3 more to come. Have a nice day! :)) SAndra xx

Comment from Eunice Amero

Excellent

What a lovely poem. You must be a professional. I loved this poem. You deserve to win. You did so well. I love the pictures. Did you draw them? I'd like to draw even just that much. Thank you so much for sharing.

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2021

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2021

Thank you so much for your lovely review, Eunice, I really appreciated it. No, the drawings came from Pixabay.com it's a site that allows you to use the pictures for private and commercial use. Take a look around, it costs nothing to join. There are three more parts to this story, so I hope you liked it enough to read what happens next!! Lol. Warm hugs, and have a nice day. Sandra xx

reply by Eunice Amero on 24-Aug-2021

You are more than welcome. Thank you for the address I will look and join. I will tyr to find the rest of your story Thank you

reply by Eunice Amero on 24-Aug-2021

I found the Pixbay and IO dont knbow how to use it. Could you help me please. Then show me where the rest of your stories are Thank you

Comment from Janetsue

Excellent

So cute! I can imagine children enjoying this poetic tale written in Robert's cube 16 format. The illustrations are darling, and I think they would also appeal to kids in a picture book. Smiles!

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2021

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reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021

Thank you so much, Spangle. Three more parts to come. :)) Sandra xxx

Comment from Cindy Warren

Excellent

Love it! I'm sure these two kids are going to have a great adventure under the sea. Maybe they can even fix the whale's tooth and he won't have to have it out.

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2021

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reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021

I hope so, Cindy! Thanks so much for reading this part. More to come!! Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx

Comment from Paul McFarland

Exceptional

Great job on chapter one. Looking forward to more chapters. I've been thinking about children's books. Now you have given me a boost in that direction.

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2021

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reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021

Thanks so much, Paul, for this really encouraging review, and all the lovely stars! I hope you do write some children's books, I've written several now for younger and older children, and they are such fun to do. This one will have pages for children to colour in when it's published, a bit like an activity story book. Get to it, and I'll be across to read it. :)) Thanks again, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx

Comment from pome lover

Excellent

well, shoot! you had me hanging on every word - reading your story out loud (to myself) and you stopped. That is a good hook. Will be looking for the next chapter. (and trying to find out about cube 16 format.)
This is a very cute story - lucky children - and wonderful pictures. Are you an artist, too? Your meter is spot on and rhymes unforced - as I'm sure you know. Anyway, a fun read for lucky children.
Katharine

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2021

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reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021

Thank you so very much, Katharine, for this fabulous review. I'm so pleased you enjoyed reading the first part. So much fun ahead!! No, I'm no artist, I wish I was. I find all my little pictures on Pixabay.com, they are free to use for personal and commercial use. And you can make changes to them. They don't just have children's pictures, but a wide variety of illustrations and photos. Look them up. Thanks again for this, my friend. :)) Sandra xx

reply by pome lover on 23-Aug-2021

wonderful! thanks for the info. much appreciated!!

Comment from Gert sherwood

Excellent

Poppy and Odi's Mission
sandramitchell My what an amazing story for children to read or someone to tell your excellent tale. Your drawings are perfect for the children to see.
Thank you for sharing your talent for children and us Fanstorians to read
Gert

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2021

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reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021

Aw, thanks, Gert. I'm delighted you enjoyed part one. There should be 3 more to come. Hope to see you there. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx

reply by Gert sherwood on 23-Aug-2021

sandramitchell You are most welcome
Gert

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

Your book is off to a great start, Sandra. The Cube16 works well for the theme and to peak children's interest and attention span. Your picture interspersed with the text add great interest. Your lines flow smoothly with good rhymes and great imagery. I enjoyed reading your fun entry, and believe all kids, young and old, will also.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2021

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reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021

I love the Cube 16, it's great for my story-poems for kids. I'm so glad you enjoyed it. I see you have written one, I'll be reading it next. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx

Comment from Aussie

Exceptional

A sweet poem for the young folk. I hope they don't tell you, whales don't have teeth! I'm glad to see you writing here, we miss so much when you don't appear! A child would love this, adventure is life to the young. Best wishes. K xx

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2021

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reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021

Thank you so much for this lovely review, Kay, and the golden sixth star!! I've been on the other side writing my novels. I've also written a series of teen adventures as well as my Time Travel series. This is the second book of this type, the other was Scout and her Magical Unicorn, written in rhyme like this one. I like a change now and again!!! LOL!!
You are the second person who have said that whales don't have teeth, so I've added a postscript to the end of this one, and will keep it there for the following chapters. The most famous whale that has teeth is the Orca whale. I'll add this to the end of the book for children to learn from. This is what I've added at the bottom of my poem....
Not all whales have teeth. Those that do, possess a varying number depending on the individual species. Some kinds of whales only have one or two teeth, while others might have 240 teeth or even more. Dental patterns can vary. Some toothed whales have teeth in both their upper and lower jaws. Orca whales, beaked whales and sperm whales are just three of the many whales that have teeth.....

Thanks again, my dear friend! You have a birthday coming up, haven't you? Warm hugs, love Sandra xxx

reply by Aussie on 23-Aug-2021

Sure is clearer for inquisitives now. Yes, I'll be 76 (Yuk) on the 17/9. Thanks for the clarity, most Humpbacks swim in our waters and siphon krill for their food. Love, Kay. xx