The Bella Donna
pining with unrequited love32 total reviews
Comment from Patty Palmer
Well written poem with just the right amount of haunted wonderment to it. Your poem flows fluidly when read aloud which is how I decide whether I like a poem or not. Great job!
Patty
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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Well written poem with just the right amount of haunted wonderment to it. Your poem flows fluidly when read aloud which is how I decide whether I like a poem or not. Great job!
Patty
Comment Written 27-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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Patty, thank you very much!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This sounds like the story of poor Miss Haversham in Dickens novel, Great Exceptions who was rejected by her lover on her wedding day, I enjoyed your story here, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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This sounds like the story of poor Miss Haversham in Dickens novel, Great Exceptions who was rejected by her lover on her wedding day, I enjoyed your story here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 27-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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Dolly, thank you, I did sneak a bit Dickens into the seams of this one. Have a wonderful day tomorrow.
Comment from Cynthia Adams1
I think this is a good poem.
It is filled to the brim with sight sight images...golden rays, blue moon, red satin and white lace gown. It helps us to see the scene very cleary.
But what I especially like is that you started the poem with the word, "Woosh."
Not only did it grab my attention, but I like to remind poets that there are other senses besides sight.
Everyone talks about what characters see but few talk about what they hear, smell, taste or touch. Bravo!
I think you did a very nice job.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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I think this is a good poem.
It is filled to the brim with sight sight images...golden rays, blue moon, red satin and white lace gown. It helps us to see the scene very cleary.
But what I especially like is that you started the poem with the word, "Woosh."
Not only did it grab my attention, but I like to remind poets that there are other senses besides sight.
Everyone talks about what characters see but few talk about what they hear, smell, taste or touch. Bravo!
I think you did a very nice job.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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Bravo, Cynthia this is precisely why I love free verse as my preferred poetic voice. Words can create such a large amount of yin and yang between the spaces.
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear JLR, I wish someone had found this picture back when we had an assignment to write about ghosts. This poem would've been a perfect entry for the Free Versers Club on that occasion.
As for this poem, written for your Halloween event and your "picture this" club, I think you have done an excellent job by adding this one, to their collection.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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Dear JLR, I wish someone had found this picture back when we had an assignment to write about ghosts. This poem would've been a perfect entry for the Free Versers Club on that occasion.
As for this poem, written for your Halloween event and your "picture this" club, I think you have done an excellent job by adding this one, to their collection.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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Suzanna, what kind remarks. As a dyed in the wool free verser I always appreciate validation coming from another free verser. Thank you!
Comment from amada
You wrote here wonderful words, "the air swirls in cavernous walls..." it incited me to continue reading. I see this Halloween season is in full swing. Great response to the Picture This club.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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You wrote here wonderful words, "the air swirls in cavernous walls..." it incited me to continue reading. I see this Halloween season is in full swing. Great response to the Picture This club.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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amada. yes its seems that the ghosts and ghouls are out in full force within FanStory. Thank you always for your time taken to read and comment on my poetic works.
Comment from papa55mike
At least somebody knows what a blue moon is. I've read several of these today and they're all terrific. Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
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At least somebody knows what a blue moon is. I've read several of these today and they're all terrific. Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 27-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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Thank you Mike, have a splendid week!
Comment from Mastery
Hello Jim. Excellent poetry with so many good images it is difficult to pick favorite lines,
Like
"The blue moon of late October's evening light parades
outside the chamber window, throwing moonbeams with
just enough sparkles of rays to enfold the suite of the
long departed Prima Donna,
Brilliant. Bob
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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Hello Jim. Excellent poetry with so many good images it is difficult to pick favorite lines,
Like
"The blue moon of late October's evening light parades
outside the chamber window, throwing moonbeams with
just enough sparkles of rays to enfold the suite of the
long departed Prima Donna,
Brilliant. Bob
Comment Written 27-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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Thank you much, my good friend, I hope that the Great Lakes are kind was we are bending toward winter's long cast shadows. I loath Daylight Savings time..LOL
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Me Too! Bob
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Me Too! Bob
Comment from Ric Myworld
This poem and picture combination sent my thoughts spinning in different directions. Visions of what was . . . and what could have been. Great job! Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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This poem and picture combination sent my thoughts spinning in different directions. Visions of what was . . . and what could have been. Great job! Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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Ric, thank you for taking the time to read and comment on my free verse.
Comment from Monica Chaddick
This was a really sad and poignant piece. I usually prefer my poetry to rhyme, but this flows well without a rhyme and tells a sad, yet beautiful story. Your piece goes well with your art selection.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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This was a really sad and poignant piece. I usually prefer my poetry to rhyme, but this flows well without a rhyme and tells a sad, yet beautiful story. Your piece goes well with your art selection.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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That is the beauty of free verse and I thank you.
Comment from tfawcus
An evocative piece of free verse that catches the mood of the picture perfectly. Naming the ghostly figure and making her the centrepiece of your poem adds an interesting element. Nicely done!
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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An evocative piece of free verse that catches the mood of the picture perfectly. Naming the ghostly figure and making her the centrepiece of your poem adds an interesting element. Nicely done!
Comment Written 27-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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Lookin forward to reading yours and thank you!