The Lost Mouse
Animal Crackers Club19 total reviews
Comment from Pantygynt
The catnip mouse has fled the house
in bag lurks an imposter
a mouse let slip without catnip
foiled Sherlock and Doc Foster
It also foiled that Conan Doyle
who wrote detective stories
McCavity's depravity's
behind this breach of mores.
No moorland walker in deerstalker
could solve this crime. Oh boy! Lets
name the man in anagram
recidivist called, TOILETS!
There is also a clue to his identity in the second stanza. Any Ideas.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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The catnip mouse has fled the house
in bag lurks an imposter
a mouse let slip without catnip
foiled Sherlock and Doc Foster
It also foiled that Conan Doyle
who wrote detective stories
McCavity's depravity's
behind this breach of mores.
No moorland walker in deerstalker
could solve this crime. Oh boy! Lets
name the man in anagram
recidivist called, TOILETS!
There is also a clue to his identity in the second stanza. Any Ideas.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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Love it! Isn't McCavity from "Cats?"
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Yes, which was adapted from the poetry book 'Old Possum's Book of Practical Cats' by T.S.ELIOT - and there's your anagram!
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Oh, I see! I was a bit slow on the uptake.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written little story about the cat's missing mouse that only the detective can finally solve after the cat looked everywhere the mouse was found in a paper bag on the floor.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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A very well-written little story about the cat's missing mouse that only the detective can finally solve after the cat looked everywhere the mouse was found in a paper bag on the floor.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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Mystery solved. hahaha. Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job, Yvonne, with your Sherlock and Dr. Foster story for the Animal Crackers Club. I love the images you added--perfect. Poor Miss Dilly losing her mouse like that while she was gone absorbing culture at her book club. I could see Sherlock pondering the situation and thinking and thinking deducing the facts to find the answer. Your description of that scene was great. Dr. Foster's reply about being famous for that was great! Your last paragraph is a great reminder of how the actual detective worked/thought and gives readers an insight into the characters that the kitties were imitating. This was a fun read. You set the bar high for the club.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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You did a great job, Yvonne, with your Sherlock and Dr. Foster story for the Animal Crackers Club. I love the images you added--perfect. Poor Miss Dilly losing her mouse like that while she was gone absorbing culture at her book club. I could see Sherlock pondering the situation and thinking and thinking deducing the facts to find the answer. Your description of that scene was great. Dr. Foster's reply about being famous for that was great! Your last paragraph is a great reminder of how the actual detective worked/thought and gives readers an insight into the characters that the kitties were imitating. This was a fun read. You set the bar high for the club.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 14-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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What an awesome review! Thank you so much.
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
A very good choice and a quick story. Endeavour never ceases to amaze with his deductions. How clever to use Sherlock and Watson and find this cute tale to tell.
Ralf
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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A very good choice and a quick story. Endeavour never ceases to amaze with his deductions. How clever to use Sherlock and Watson and find this cute tale to tell.
Ralf
Comment Written 13-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed this bit of fun.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Clever take on the animal theme--with a mystery presented and solved to boot! Apt application of familiar closing quotation. This should do well in the contest! Cheers. LIZ
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reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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Clever take on the animal theme--with a mystery presented and solved to boot! Apt application of familiar closing quotation. This should do well in the contest! Cheers. LIZ
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Comment Written 13-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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Thank you, Elizabeth. I steer away from contests. 8-)
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Ditto re contests--I'm FLASHing solo these days--haven't ever garnered so much as honorable mention.
Comment from lyenochka
Oh, how fun! I love that you created your own Sherlock Holmes character to solve the case of the missing catnip mouse. He sounds so certain that I guess we know it really was in there! Sounds like something that could happen at our house. Lol.
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reply by the author on 13-Sep-2020
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Oh, how fun! I love that you created your own Sherlock Holmes character to solve the case of the missing catnip mouse. He sounds so certain that I guess we know it really was in there! Sounds like something that could happen at our house. Lol.
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Comment Written 13-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2020
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Thank you. I had fun with this one.
Comment from Miss Cookie Atkinson
I loved it, what can I say you captured my attention from the first line to the last As I was reading your story I felt like I was watching at the movie or TV.
Thank you for sharing
cookie
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2020
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I loved it, what can I say you captured my attention from the first line to the last As I was reading your story I felt like I was watching at the movie or TV.
Thank you for sharing
cookie
Comment Written 13-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2020
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What a lovely thing to say. Thank you so much!
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It's true and my pleasure
Cookie
Comment from Supe
You met this challenge with a vengeance. So clever and I love your little Sherlock and Dr. Foster. I will try and follow you a bit more, I enjoyed it so.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2020
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You met this challenge with a vengeance. So clever and I love your little Sherlock and Dr. Foster. I will try and follow you a bit more, I enjoyed it so.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2020
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Thank you. I appreciate this very much!
Comment from Eternal Muse
Oh, it was beautiful, and I am so glad I have a six left.
Your characters are hilarious, and remind me of Sherlock Homes and Watson (lol) - Sherlock Endeavour and his colleague, Dr. Foster (how clever)!
That was a hilarious way they discovered where the mouse could be - leaving Dilly dumbfounded.
I absolutely love Endeavor's reasoning here:
Once you eliminate the impossible, whatever remains, no matter how improbable, must be the truth.
This was adorable and I love your artwork. Thank you for the real treat.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2020
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Oh, it was beautiful, and I am so glad I have a six left.
Your characters are hilarious, and remind me of Sherlock Homes and Watson (lol) - Sherlock Endeavour and his colleague, Dr. Foster (how clever)!
That was a hilarious way they discovered where the mouse could be - leaving Dilly dumbfounded.
I absolutely love Endeavor's reasoning here:
Once you eliminate the impossible, whatever remains, no matter how improbable, must be the truth.
This was adorable and I love your artwork. Thank you for the real treat.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2020
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Thank you for this wonderful review! That saying is actually what Doyle wrote for Sherlock.
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I loved it, Yvonne! it was a breath of fresh air and I enjoyed it.