Molly the Mule
A man and his mule.62 total reviews
Comment from Jeffrey Ford
I think that you wrote a great and beautiful poem! It is very well written and creative. I love the connection between Jim and the Mule. I'm sorry that Jim passed away, but it was good that he found the mule again. Thank you for sharing.
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I think that you wrote a great and beautiful poem! It is very well written and creative. I love the connection between Jim and the Mule. I'm sorry that Jim passed away, but it was good that he found the mule again. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2020
Comment from Michele Harber
This is lovely and sad and sweet and touching. You truly bring Jim and Molly to life in a way that doesn't make us pity Molly being Jim's best friend but, rather, makes us admire the relationship. I enjoyed the dialect you used, which sounded appropriate and not forced.
While your rhymes all work, I wonder if you were aware that you'd rhymed "away" and "day" three times, and not in any pattern that might suggest it was deliberate.
Also, if I might make one suggestion, your poem flows very smoothly until the line, "waitin' fer Molly ta' come back." If you say, "waitin' fer Molly the mule ta' come back," it will fix the problem while fitting in perfectly with the way you're telling the story.
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This is lovely and sad and sweet and touching. You truly bring Jim and Molly to life in a way that doesn't make us pity Molly being Jim's best friend but, rather, makes us admire the relationship. I enjoyed the dialect you used, which sounded appropriate and not forced.
While your rhymes all work, I wonder if you were aware that you'd rhymed "away" and "day" three times, and not in any pattern that might suggest it was deliberate.
Also, if I might make one suggestion, your poem flows very smoothly until the line, "waitin' fer Molly ta' come back." If you say, "waitin' fer Molly the mule ta' come back," it will fix the problem while fitting in perfectly with the way you're telling the story.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2020
Comment from Rachel Joyce
such a sweet poem! I like the 'cowboy language', and it rhymed quite well. I also loved the moral/message. I wish you luck in the contest, and may God bless you!
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such a sweet poem! I like the 'cowboy language', and it rhymed quite well. I also loved the moral/message. I wish you luck in the contest, and may God bless you!
Comment Written 22-Apr-2020
Comment from The_Boy_Whodunnit
Such a wonderful stor told through this poem, very descriptive and interesting. I think the format chosen suits it really well to combine the comical with the heartfelt.
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Such a wonderful stor told through this poem, very descriptive and interesting. I think the format chosen suits it really well to combine the comical with the heartfelt.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2020
Comment from Susan Larson
Beautifully written bitter-sweet poem. I love your picturesque words to describe Ol' Jim and Molly and your ending "The following summer, Ol' Jim passed away. So, I'm sure he found his Molly that day." brought tears to my eyes.
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Beautifully written bitter-sweet poem. I love your picturesque words to describe Ol' Jim and Molly and your ending "The following summer, Ol' Jim passed away. So, I'm sure he found his Molly that day." brought tears to my eyes.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2020
Comment from Sally Law
I certainly did enjoy this. I grew up on a steady diet of John Wayne westerns. I'm pretty sure I've seen them all. This is delightful, Willie, and I wish you every success in the contest,
Sally :))
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I certainly did enjoy this. I grew up on a steady diet of John Wayne westerns. I'm pretty sure I've seen them all. This is delightful, Willie, and I wish you every success in the contest,
Sally :))
Comment Written 22-Apr-2020
Comment from Bill Pinder
I enjoyed reading this story in a poem about a man and his only friend, his mule Molly. Thanks for sharing this unique writing and good luck in the contest. Bill
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I enjoyed reading this story in a poem about a man and his only friend, his mule Molly. Thanks for sharing this unique writing and good luck in the contest. Bill
Comment Written 22-Apr-2020
Comment from samandlancelot
Willie,
Excellent entry for the share a story in a poem contest. Your man and his mule, Molly, came to life. I love the hints of dialect throughout. A very satisfying ending, he finally found his missing mule.
Virtual six stars.
Patricia
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Willie,
Excellent entry for the share a story in a poem contest. Your man and his mule, Molly, came to life. I love the hints of dialect throughout. A very satisfying ending, he finally found his missing mule.
Virtual six stars.
Patricia
Comment Written 22-Apr-2020
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Molly the Mule", is an exceptionally well-written and heart wrenching piece. It was a privilege to both read and review, this talented poet's work. To me, this is definitely a six. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2020
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"Molly the Mule", is an exceptionally well-written and heart wrenching piece. It was a privilege to both read and review, this talented poet's work. To me, this is definitely a six. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2020
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Thank you, Duchess for the great review and shiny 6 stars. Glad you liked the poem.
Willie, my pen-pushing friend, you're more than welcome. I certainly liked your poem.
God bless and take care,
the Duchess
Comment from DeboraDyess
OH, so well done! The story is sad, but also kind of bittersweet, the poem is perfectly done and you aced it. :)
Best of luck in the contest. :)
Blessings and stay safe in all the Crazy,
Deb
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OH, so well done! The story is sad, but also kind of bittersweet, the poem is perfectly done and you aced it. :)
Best of luck in the contest. :)
Blessings and stay safe in all the Crazy,
Deb
Comment Written 22-Apr-2020