Comment from Sugarray77

Exceptional

I really like this verse, Yvonne... from the moment it was presented in class, the ethereal qualities drew me in. So well done.. great response to our assignment. :)

Melissa

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2020

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reply by the author on 23-Jan-2020

Thank you, Melissa, for this wonderful review! I'm so glad you liked it.

Comment from CrystieCookie999

Exceptional

This is a great poem from the point of view of fog. The first line is strong, with 'w' alliteration. I caught internal rhyme of 'streets' and 'sheets' in stanza 1. I caught some end rhymes with 'old' and 'bold.' And you might even say 'crannies' and 'trees' there, too, with the end rhyme. Nice photo choice, too.

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2020

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reply by the author on 23-Jan-2020

Thank you so much for this wonderful review. I'm so glad you saw al the devices I used.

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

Gee this is good, Yvonne. The internal assonance really brings a poem to life with strong nouns and verbs. The abstraction at first quickly becomes concrete and then we realize I am fog.

Great stuff. This class is producing some top of line writing. :)

Gloria

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2020

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reply by the author on 23-Jan-2020

Thank you, Gloria. That means a lot.

Comment from rhymelord

Excellent

Great composition creating a feeling of timelessness, mystery and hidden strength.
I love:

"Ethereal,
yet bold,
I stray wherever
it pleases me."
Regards
Reg

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2020

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reply by the author on 23-Jan-2020

I'm glad you like that part. Thank you for this great review.

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written free verse poem with great rhythm about being the fog can become an interesting concept to hear, feel, and experience the things that fog will.

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2020

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reply by the author on 23-Jan-2020

I love fog. Thank you for a great review.

Comment from Janice Canerdy

Excellent

Describing fog and its abilities by personifying it, allowing it to speak, shows creativity. Fog seems mysterious to me. The gray background and artwork are fitting.

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2020

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reply by the author on 23-Jan-2020

Thank you so much. I like fog.

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

I liked the subtle use of rhyme here and the picture you painted of fog! Your words brought back a few memories, haven't seen fog in a while. Whispers is a good way of describing the age old fog, much enjoyed, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2020

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reply by the author on 23-Jan-2020

Thank you for saying that. I love fog.

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Exceptional

Yours is the perfect presentation in color scheme,
image, rhyme--cross and end,and alliteration of
'w' & 'c', Your lines read well with awesome imagery.
Your well-chosen words paint a true to life picture of fog.
I enjoyed reading this. I love the personification of the
fog.
Respectfully with Love, Jan

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2020

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reply by the author on 23-Jan-2020

Thank you so much for this fantastic review. Much appreciated.

Comment from kiwigirl2821

Excellent

Hi damommy

Nice alliteration in your first line. And I love that word "wend". More great alliterations with the C sounds. Your rhymes are strong as it your presentation and I bet Jim will be quite pleased with your rhythm too. Good luck. xoxo Kiwi

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2020

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reply by the author on 23-Jan-2020

Thank you so much for this great review.

Comment from Patty Palmer

Excellent

I like this poem. I was not exactly looking for fog to come up but when fog came up, it felt like it was the obvious answer! Have a great day my friend!
Patty

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2020

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reply by the author on 23-Jan-2020

I'm glad you were a bit surprised. Thank you so much.