For Just One Day
A Rondeau for Potlatch Poetry30 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This rondeau, For Just One Day, has the proper formatting and brings the wishes of adventurous minds to imagine the heights of play with the guarantee that our safe and normal life was still the safe harbor.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2019
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This rondeau, For Just One Day, has the proper formatting and brings the wishes of adventurous minds to imagine the heights of play with the guarantee that our safe and normal life was still the safe harbor.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2019
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Thank you, Bill. I'm not sure I could take the excitement of more than one day. lol
Comment from Hitcher
If only friend, if only we all got such a day, a day where we got to do anything we desired... it would be interesting what each person chooses to do. I'm sure flying would be high on many a list : ))
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If only friend, if only we all got such a day, a day where we got to do anything we desired... it would be interesting what each person chooses to do. I'm sure flying would be high on many a list : ))
Comment Written 02-Dec-2019
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I think so, too. However, sailing with pirates would be interesting. I can certainly do the last stanza of resting and listening to the birds. Thank you for this great review.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Rondeau and a wish to be able to fly is a dream of many. To see the earth from above and to be free like a bird is a wonderful idea even if it can be only for one day.
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A very well-written Rondeau and a wish to be able to fly is a dream of many. To see the earth from above and to be free like a bird is a wonderful idea even if it can be only for one day.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2019
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Wouldn't it be wonderful! If my wish ever comes true, I'll fly by and pick you up, too. Thanks, Sandra.
Comment from rhymelord
Dear Poet,
So perfectly executed, such flowing language makes this a total pleasure to enjoy in raising beautiful images of life of all kinds. Totally refreshing.
Regards
Reg
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Dear Poet,
So perfectly executed, such flowing language makes this a total pleasure to enjoy in raising beautiful images of life of all kinds. Totally refreshing.
Regards
Reg
Comment Written 02-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2019
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Thank you for these lovely comments.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your skillfully-written, appealing rondeau is vividly descriptive, a charming mix of whimsy and down-to-earth benevolent ideals and lovely nature scenes. "Time'd" sounds a bit awkward .
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Your skillfully-written, appealing rondeau is vividly descriptive, a charming mix of whimsy and down-to-earth benevolent ideals and lovely nature scenes. "Time'd" sounds a bit awkward .
Comment Written 02-Dec-2019
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Thank you for a lovely review. Sorry about 'time'd' but it was the only way I could make things fit. lol
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This has a definite feeling of 'what if.' I like the pirate stanza especially, but the 'golden sky' in the first stanza was appealing, too. Giving things away is an admirable daydream. The last stanza makes this reader think that maybe the speaker's sense of hearing has also been affected, and he/she would like that back, too, before death. Thanks for posting.
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This has a definite feeling of 'what if.' I like the pirate stanza especially, but the 'golden sky' in the first stanza was appealing, too. Giving things away is an admirable daydream. The last stanza makes this reader think that maybe the speaker's sense of hearing has also been affected, and he/she would like that back, too, before death. Thanks for posting.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2019
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No, no deafness. Just a wish to settle down after the adventure in a peaceful place. Thank you so much.
Comment from Sugarray77
What an excellently written Rondeau, Yvonne. The meaningful repeat is perfect for this and adds a depth and resonance. I enjoyed reading it!!
Melissa
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What an excellently written Rondeau, Yvonne. The meaningful repeat is perfect for this and adds a depth and resonance. I enjoyed reading it!!
Melissa
Comment Written 01-Dec-2019
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Thank you so much. I'm happy you enjoyed it.
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Your poem certainly sings and obviously meets all the criteria. The wishes are sound and echo a longing that seems to have been there for
sometime.
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Your poem certainly sings and obviously meets all the criteria. The wishes are sound and echo a longing that seems to have been there for
sometime.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2019
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I can do all that in my imagination, and that's the next best thing. Thank you so much for a great review.
Comment from LaRosa
For Just One Day, a wistful yet hopeful wish to do more than one can do in a lifetime. I feel the flight of the eagle, the excitement of a pirate's eye treasure that offers a last life chance to 'do good to others', the gentle cry of the whippoorwill as life winds to a close.
It's full of imagery of beauty and love for life as well as the hope that at the end of it, that it was a life well lived.
Love it.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2019
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For Just One Day, a wistful yet hopeful wish to do more than one can do in a lifetime. I feel the flight of the eagle, the excitement of a pirate's eye treasure that offers a last life chance to 'do good to others', the gentle cry of the whippoorwill as life winds to a close.
It's full of imagery of beauty and love for life as well as the hope that at the end of it, that it was a life well lived.
Love it.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2019
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Thank you for such a wonderful review!
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hello Damommy, this is a very well written, and very poetic Rondeau. Lovely subject with good rhyme and rhythm. The repetition of '. . . for just one day.' is calming and very effective. Very nice display and a good read. Warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2019
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Hello Damommy, this is a very well written, and very poetic Rondeau. Lovely subject with good rhyme and rhythm. The repetition of '. . . for just one day.' is calming and very effective. Very nice display and a good read. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 01-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2019
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Thank you so much for this great review.