Comment from Cindy Warren

Excellent

Loyalty needs to go both ways. It usually doesn't. Much is expected of the soldiers, yet when they're hurt or no longer needed they're treated pretty badly. It's shameful in my opinion.

 Comment Written 14-Oct-2019

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reply by the author on 14-Oct-2019

Thanks for reviewing. Most grateful, Craig

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

This exemplifies when in need of loyalty, just for fulfilling power needs, none seems to show but continue fighting betrayal of human cause of concern and act thoughtlessly continuing man to die; well said, well done.

 Comment Written 14-Oct-2019

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reply by the author on 14-Oct-2019

Thanks for the kind review, it's much appreciated. Craig

Comment from Susan X Smith

Exceptional

I am really giving this six stars because I feel strongly about the subject matter, although the poem is well written too. You certainly meet the contest requirements. What can I say? It's heartbreaking.

 Comment Written 14-Oct-2019

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reply by the author on 14-Oct-2019

Thank you, Susan, for the most kind words and the very generous rating. Heartbreaking is certainly the word for it. Much appreciated, Craig.

Comment from LisaMay

Excellent

Very topical and hard-hitting. It needs to be said. I think it is shameful to leave them in the lurch like that.
However... you have a couple of days to extend this poem by another 2 stanzas for it to be a legitimate entry in that 3-6-9 contest.

 Comment Written 14-Oct-2019

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reply by the author on 14-Oct-2019

Yes, I completely missed that. Thanks for pointing it out. I haven't come across an n-n-n which required multiple stanzas before... at least, that's my excuse for being dumb enough to miss it. Back to square one :) Most grateful, Craig

reply by LisaMay on 14-Oct-2019

Yes, it is rare to have more stanzas. I'm sure you'll come up with the goods.

Comment from juliaSjames

Excellent

Sorry about the rating. I'll revisit once you're contest compliant. You need to write 3 stanzas of 3-6-9. This one is dramatic, shocking. Really excellent.

Rating upgraded since the poem now has 3 stanzas.

Good luck, Craig

Blessings Julia

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 Comment Written 14-Oct-2019

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reply by the author on 14-Oct-2019

Ah, thanks for that. I've entered stacks of these n-n-n syllable contests, and this is the first one I've ever seen with multiple stanzas, a fact I obviously completely missed. I appreciate the heads up, and will make the required changes. Cheers, Craig

reply by juliaSjames on 14-Oct-2019

Let me know when you amend.
JJ

reply by the author on 14-Oct-2019

I've updated the poem to meet (I hope) the requirements. Thanks :) Craig

reply by the author on 14-Oct-2019

Thanks very much, Julia. Much appreciated. Craig

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

This is a very well written 3-6-9 poem you have penned for the contest. You used very good descriptive words that are so true. Very nice imagery to go with your words. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, Teri

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 Comment Written 14-Oct-2019

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reply by the author on 14-Oct-2019

Hi Teri, thanks for the lovely comments. It's just been pointed out my entry wasn't compliant (somehow I missed the fact it was meant to be THREE stanzas!) So, it's back to the drawing board :)