Why? I Ask
A husband asks why his wife left.22 total reviews
Comment from jenintorre
This is a very sad story in a poem. This situation happens so often. I can relate to it so well. No communication. I think this excellent entry should do well in the competition. Good luck. Jen.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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This is a very sad story in a poem. This situation happens so often. I can relate to it so well. No communication. I think this excellent entry should do well in the competition. Good luck. Jen.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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Thank you so much, Jen, for sharing my sad story. I am sorry you can relate so well to it. It?s a true story about what happened to a close friend of mine many years ago. Rod
Comment from damommy
Your poem really touched my heart. Lot of people have asked these same questions. Beautifully written in good meter and rhyme. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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Your poem really touched my heart. Lot of people have asked these same questions. Beautifully written in good meter and rhyme. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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I am pleased my sad story touched your heart. It?s a true story about a close friend. Many thanks for your kind praise. Rod
Comment from zanya
A poem with a real life scenario at its core - expressed with candour and honesty - the 'inexplicable' departure of a life partner - lots to ponder here
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A poem with a real life scenario at its core - expressed with candour and honesty - the 'inexplicable' departure of a life partner - lots to ponder here
Comment Written 28-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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Thank you so much, zanya, for your high praise of WHY? and those six bright stars. It is a true story about a close friend. I am so pleased you think it was told with candor and honesty as I tried to tell it as truthfully as I could. Rod
Comment from Janice Canerdy
You get my last 6 because this poem is excellent in EVERY respect: conveyance of theme, rhyme, meter, smooth flow--all! You have described what actually happens OFTEN. Woman wants out--for whatever reason--and whisks the kids hundreds of miles away. So unfair-shouldn't be allowed.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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You get my last 6 because this poem is excellent in EVERY respect: conveyance of theme, rhyme, meter, smooth flow--all! You have described what actually happens OFTEN. Woman wants out--for whatever reason--and whisks the kids hundreds of miles away. So unfair-shouldn't be allowed.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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Thank you so much, Janice, for your enthusiastic response to WHY? and that galaxy of stars. Yes, this is a true story about a close friend who suffered unfairly because his wife literally stole his children and kept them from him for many years. Rod
Comment from judester
This is a glimpse into one couple's communication break down. When that happens, the end of the relationship is not far behind.
I do not believe in marriage for a long time, because vowing in church to love forever, sickness and health, blah blah...just does not make human sense.
We change over the years, of course and after say, 20 years, that nervous young groom that you promised your entire life to, is not the same person.
Just my thoughts.
Good one, cheers, judester
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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This is a glimpse into one couple's communication break down. When that happens, the end of the relationship is not far behind.
I do not believe in marriage for a long time, because vowing in church to love forever, sickness and health, blah blah...just does not make human sense.
We change over the years, of course and after say, 20 years, that nervous young groom that you promised your entire life to, is not the same person.
Just my thoughts.
Good one, cheers, judester
Comment Written 28-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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Hi judester. I appreciate your sharing my poem and your comments. This is a true story about a close friend who suffered greatly because his wife stole his kids. Fortunately not all long-term marriages end like this. My wife and I will celebrate our 50th anniversary in December. Indeed I?ve changed and so has she, but we?ve succeeded in communicating all these years. Rod
Comment from Gypsymooncat
I hate it when I have no sixes to award for a poem that was so perfect in every way, and one that made me feel the pain of this poor man who got a very unexpected "Dear John" letter.
Good luck in the contest! This poem is a winner I'd say
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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I hate it when I have no sixes to award for a poem that was so perfect in every way, and one that made me feel the pain of this poor man who got a very unexpected "Dear John" letter.
Good luck in the contest! This poem is a winner I'd say
Comment Written 28-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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I am flattered that I could make you feel Jer?s pain. Many thanks for your high praise and the virtual six. Rod
Comment from Susan X Smith
This is a sad, touching poem. Thespeaker is a man whose wife has left him and he still can't figure out why. His pain comes across in the poem which has a ring of sincerity. Well done.
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This is a sad, touching poem. Thespeaker is a man whose wife has left him and he still can't figure out why. His pain comes across in the poem which has a ring of sincerity. Well done.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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I am so pleased that WHY? has ?a ring of sincerity.? It is a true story about a close friend. Though it happened years ago, he still does not fully understand why she left him.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
She has left you, your home, your kids; you thought of her love's betrayal, you prayed to God and sought for His advice, you still love her, she is your sun and the moon; well said, well done.
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She has left you, your home, your kids; you thought of her love's betrayal, you prayed to God and sought for His advice, you still love her, she is your sun and the moon; well said, well done.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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Thank you for sharing my poem. It is a true story, but not mine. It is based on what happened to a close friend many years ago. Rod
Comment from LisaMay
Your poem captures the perplexed incomprehension of having something happen that has not been explained. The narrator has some insight about possibly prioritising work too much, and the young age at marriage may have made his wife feel like she had missed out on something and now wanted her freedom. She didn't do the right thing by him at all. He was owed an explanation (unless he was a wife beater and she ran for her own safety, and he isn't admitting it). But having the kids live 600 miles away is a cruel distance. At least she took the kids and didn't desert them like my mother did to me and 3 sisters when she got bored with her husband and cleared out with no explanation. He came home to find her gone and 4 daughters under 6yrs old to cope with (as the youngest, I was adopted out).
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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Your poem captures the perplexed incomprehension of having something happen that has not been explained. The narrator has some insight about possibly prioritising work too much, and the young age at marriage may have made his wife feel like she had missed out on something and now wanted her freedom. She didn't do the right thing by him at all. He was owed an explanation (unless he was a wife beater and she ran for her own safety, and he isn't admitting it). But having the kids live 600 miles away is a cruel distance. At least she took the kids and didn't desert them like my mother did to me and 3 sisters when she got bored with her husband and cleared out with no explanation. He came home to find her gone and 4 daughters under 6yrs old to cope with (as the youngest, I was adopted out).
Comment Written 28-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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Hi Lisa. Many thanks for taking the time to read and comment about WHY? This story is based on what happened to a close friend of mine many years ago. He never did truly understand why she left him, and he suffered greatly because he could not afford to see his kids very often. Fortunately, he is now able to see his grandchildren. Your story--which you?ve often mentioned--is also poignant. Rod
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a heartfelt write filled with loss and sorrow and brought a tear to my eye. When relationships fail there is always painful heartache and you wrote about it here, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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This is a heartfelt write filled with loss and sorrow and brought a tear to my eye. When relationships fail there is always painful heartache and you wrote about it here, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 28-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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Hi Dolly. Thank you for your very kind praise of WHY? Rod
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When I feel emotion after reading a poem, it is always worthy of praise, that?s why, love Dolly x
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When I feel emotion after reading a poem, it is always worthy of praise, that?s why, love Dolly x