Lead Detective
Catching a serial killer17 total reviews
Comment from Pantygynt
I dont't think I have ever before read a detective story set to verse before. This is a most interesting experiment. Tha alternate rrhyme scheme works well here. I think rhyming couplets would have got boring over a work of this length. You try the little trick I suggested to achieve this or were you happy working this rhyme scheme from scratch?
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2018
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I dont't think I have ever before read a detective story set to verse before. This is a most interesting experiment. Tha alternate rrhyme scheme works well here. I think rhyming couplets would have got boring over a work of this length. You try the little trick I suggested to achieve this or were you happy working this rhyme scheme from scratch?
Comment Written 05-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2018
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No Jim. I was not comfortable. It took a lot longer this way. My process was to write a couplet and then find a line between the couplet?s two lines. But, I still think in couplets and it gives me a weakness. I have trouble because I can?t yet think in abab format. I guess it takes practice. But it is a good exercise and I will do it again. Thank you for the suggestion and for a great review
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I think it made a better poem for the reader.
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I agree. The problem I had was that for the rhyming aa couplets, I can?t make both lines part of the same sentence. I think in couplets. They just jump into my head. So it took longer because I could not think in ab with complete sentences. Do you understand? The third line rhyming with the first has to go with the second line or be a new sentence. Do you see? I think I got a little bit better at the end because I tried to think about ways to connect them. Forced myself to make two different end rhymes part of the same sentence. Thank you for all of your help
Comment from Michele Harber
Wow! I feel like I've just read a screenplay in verse. Your story held me from the first line. I'm amazed by the degree of detail you used, and how you made it fit with rhyme and meter. It actually felt as though this were written by a detective, and you certainly made your main character human in his feelings of guilt and insecurity. This is an excellent piece!
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2018
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Wow! I feel like I've just read a screenplay in verse. Your story held me from the first line. I'm amazed by the degree of detail you used, and how you made it fit with rhyme and meter. It actually felt as though this were written by a detective, and you certainly made your main character human in his feelings of guilt and insecurity. This is an excellent piece!
Comment Written 05-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2018
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Wow. Thank you Michele for the extra star. I really appreciate it. Thank you also for your lovely review
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Thank you for an amazing read!
Comment from meeshu
this is so great, you are putting yourself inside all sorts of different people. a rhyming murder mystery. you might be the first since Shakespeare to try this. I wish you well in all your future endeavors, Pam...............meeshu
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2018
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this is so great, you are putting yourself inside all sorts of different people. a rhyming murder mystery. you might be the first since Shakespeare to try this. I wish you well in all your future endeavors, Pam...............meeshu
Comment Written 05-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2018
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Thank you meeshu for your great review. I try to get into the heads of my characters. Always loved mysteries. Take care
Comment from Hugh McDowell
Pam, great polices suspense story in a poem. I love how the Detective pieces it together and at first, doubts his theory. Working with a serial killer would freak anyone out. This type of work would age anyone. The last line is telling. Very good flow and pace. Excellent. Hugh
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2018
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Pam, great polices suspense story in a poem. I love how the Detective pieces it together and at first, doubts his theory. Working with a serial killer would freak anyone out. This type of work would age anyone. The last line is telling. Very good flow and pace. Excellent. Hugh
Comment Written 05-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2018
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Thank you Hugh for your excellent review. I hope you are well
Comment from jenintorre
Well Pam this is certainly not a flash fiction. Have you been watching too much T.V.? You have executed this thriller story very poetically. Well done. Hugs and smiles. Jen x.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2018
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Well Pam this is certainly not a flash fiction. Have you been watching too much T.V.? You have executed this thriller story very poetically. Well done. Hugs and smiles. Jen x.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2018
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Wow. Thank you Jen so much for the extra star. I really appreciate it. And also for your lovely review
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Your welcome. X
Comment from Kelly Hanna
This poem was veryvwell written! You did a great job of telling a great story in such a great rhyme pattern. Certain words like within and chin, you did a great job rhyming and not messing up the flow of the piece. I really enjoyed this read! A great poem!
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reply by the author on 05-Oct-2018
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This poem was veryvwell written! You did a great job of telling a great story in such a great rhyme pattern. Certain words like within and chin, you did a great job rhyming and not messing up the flow of the piece. I really enjoyed this read! A great poem!
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Comment Written 05-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2018
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Thank you Kelly for an awesome review. And encouraging words
Comment from Anntonette
This kept me on the edge of my seat , wondering if the lead detective will catch the killer. But the killer is very smart and left no fingerprints. I like how there is major tensions in this story. A great read !
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This kept me on the edge of my seat , wondering if the lead detective will catch the killer. But the killer is very smart and left no fingerprints. I like how there is major tensions in this story. A great read !
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Comment Written 05-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2018
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Thank you Anntonette for this really lovely review. I hope you are well