Ex-con
A man gets in trouble20 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
What an interesting story you wove in this poem, Pam! I was really wondering what was going to happen next. Great job in building suspense and telling it from the con's point of view. Glad they both lived although I hope he changed after that.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2018
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What an interesting story you wove in this poem, Pam! I was really wondering what was going to happen next. Great job in building suspense and telling it from the con's point of view. Glad they both lived although I hope he changed after that.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2018
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Thank you lyenochka for a wonderful review
Comment from jenintorre
Hi Pam
I really like this story in a poem.
So now I had a murder rap. I didn't really need this crap" I thought that was excellent rhyming" Great artwork.Well done. Take care. Jen.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2018
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Hi Pam
I really like this story in a poem.
So now I had a murder rap. I didn't really need this crap" I thought that was excellent rhyming" Great artwork.Well done. Take care. Jen.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2018
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Thank you Jen for a wonderful review
Comment from royowen
I had to have a chuckle at this, you assumed the mantle of the bloke. Well done, you should writing novelettes Pam, I think you'd do well, I don't have your fictional ability, unless this is true and you've had a sex change. Well done Pam, your usual high quality, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2018
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I had to have a chuckle at this, you assumed the mantle of the bloke. Well done, you should writing novelettes Pam, I think you'd do well, I don't have your fictional ability, unless this is true and you've had a sex change. Well done Pam, your usual high quality, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 04-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2018
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Hi Roy. I often write from a man?s POV when the character calls for it. Thank you Roy for a wonderful review
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Well done
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
Man, that is one big gun. I guess the silencer makes it look much bigger. I have often wondered what I would do if held at gun point. I know I would not be brave. Fairly certain I'd wet my pants. As always a well done poem, if not somewhat depressing, and perfect rhyme and meter. Rox
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2018
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Man, that is one big gun. I guess the silencer makes it look much bigger. I have often wondered what I would do if held at gun point. I know I would not be brave. Fairly certain I'd wet my pants. As always a well done poem, if not somewhat depressing, and perfect rhyme and meter. Rox
Comment Written 03-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2018
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Lol. Don?t want you to have to wet your pants, Roxanna. Thank you for the nice review
Comment from Artasylum
Wow... this story is something else Pam you have the gift of getting inside of your characters and make them come to life... Beautifully done. thanks. yours, diana
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2018
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Wow... this story is something else Pam you have the gift of getting inside of your characters and make them come to life... Beautifully done. thanks. yours, diana
Comment Written 03-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2018
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Thank you Diana for your wonderful review
Comment from Hugh McDowell
Pam, I really liked this. Great pacing and flow. I liked the rhyming. The sequence of events is excellent. You surprised me in a good way with the ending. Paralyzed and an ex con, what a consequence to pay for his actions. Excellent. Hugh
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2018
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Pam, I really liked this. Great pacing and flow. I liked the rhyming. The sequence of events is excellent. You surprised me in a good way with the ending. Paralyzed and an ex con, what a consequence to pay for his actions. Excellent. Hugh
Comment Written 03-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2018
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Thank you Hugh. I appreciate your encouragement and awesome review
Comment from Lady Jane
What The Bleep??? Where in the world did you come up with the wherewithal to masterfully write this one, Pam. I am in shock, but also admiring the clarity and skill in which you told this story. My short stories are crime and mystery based...this has the bones of an EXCELLENT short story. Haha. What a piece. The rhyme, the tale, the sheer twist of fate - I am IMPRESSED. Great job. Everything about this depicts 'ex-con' and I loved it. Keep writing :) But, do me a favor, turn off ID tv before you go to bed. It's giving your muse too much wiggle room ;-)
Janelle
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2018
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What The Bleep??? Where in the world did you come up with the wherewithal to masterfully write this one, Pam. I am in shock, but also admiring the clarity and skill in which you told this story. My short stories are crime and mystery based...this has the bones of an EXCELLENT short story. Haha. What a piece. The rhyme, the tale, the sheer twist of fate - I am IMPRESSED. Great job. Everything about this depicts 'ex-con' and I loved it. Keep writing :) But, do me a favor, turn off ID tv before you go to bed. It's giving your muse too much wiggle room ;-)
Janelle
Comment Written 03-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2018
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Lol. Janelle I was LMAO from this review ROFL. I needed that laugh. Maybe I should make a book of murder Mystery poems. Thank you for the great review
Comment from Gloria ....
My land, you've written a whole movie in this one poem, Pam. You definitely know how to weave a rich and image-filled story in fine metre and rhyme.
Excellent and a good social commentary too.
Gloria
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2018
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My land, you've written a whole movie in this one poem, Pam. You definitely know how to weave a rich and image-filled story in fine metre and rhyme.
Excellent and a good social commentary too.
Gloria
Comment Written 03-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2018
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Thank you Gloria. Lol this is one of my shorter poems. I think it is because my poems tell stories so they can?t be too short. Thanks for the great review
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks that though we do not like to act the same way repeatedly all the time but we repeat the same act passionately as the man has done for the lady; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR
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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2018
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This speaks that though we do not like to act the same way repeatedly all the time but we repeat the same act passionately as the man has done for the lady; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR
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Comment Written 03-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2018
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Thank you Alcreator for your wonderful review
Comment from LeftHandedScribe
Brilliant! This has noir meets pulp fiction and dark humor with a twist of remorse. You meet the challenge in a delicious and unique way without ever losing a wicked sense of humor and irony. Wish I had six stars--actually, seven.
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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2018
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Brilliant! This has noir meets pulp fiction and dark humor with a twist of remorse. You meet the challenge in a delicious and unique way without ever losing a wicked sense of humor and irony. Wish I had six stars--actually, seven.
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Comment Written 03-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2018
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Thank you so much Shauna. How are you enjoying the site. I just joined in March. I am bed bound and can play with this site on my cell phone. Thank you for the virtual six star rating and for your awesome review