His Cowboy Son
A well dressed stranger arrives in town, revenge his aim17 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I loved the flow, the rhymes and the story here, you took me on a journey and the read was cleverly written and a joy to read, best wishes, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2018
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I loved the flow, the rhymes and the story here, you took me on a journey and the read was cleverly written and a joy to read, best wishes, love Dolly x
Comment Written 02-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2018
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Thank you Dolly, you compliments are greatly appreciated. I'm delighted to know you enjoyed it.
Comment from Annika Fiercely
Fantastic! Wonderful storytelling. It reminded me a bit of Gilead by Marilynne Robinson, thematically. But there's something unique and special about it.
A couple of little suggestions: I think 'each Sunday night' would scan better (and fit better in the line), and I've always seen 'rednecks' as one word.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2018
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Fantastic! Wonderful storytelling. It reminded me a bit of Gilead by Marilynne Robinson, thematically. But there's something unique and special about it.
A couple of little suggestions: I think 'each Sunday night' would scan better (and fit better in the line), and I've always seen 'rednecks' as one word.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2018
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Thank you for highlighting rednecks should be one word. That's been corrected. If I include 'each' I will stuff up the syllable count so I've left that unchanged. I really appreciate your suggestions and thank you for the five stars.
Comment from royowen
This meter in this poem was pretty close to perfect Bob. I loved the story in the work, I think we all want people who stick their principles, but who have integrity Whalen the don't, it's ok to be angry, but it's not alright to be vengeful, excellent poem and a great story, written in heptametric aabb rhymed wondeful done Bob, blessings, Roy
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This meter in this poem was pretty close to perfect Bob. I loved the story in the work, I think we all want people who stick their principles, but who have integrity Whalen the don't, it's ok to be angry, but it's not alright to be vengeful, excellent poem and a great story, written in heptametric aabb rhymed wondeful done Bob, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 02-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2018
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Glad you enjoyed it Roy and thank you for stopping by and awarding the five stars. I always appreciate your comments
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Most welcome
Comment from Gloria ....
This is a fine poem, Bob. You could about double the size to get more into the mindset of the town folks who'd do such a vicious thing as burn down a church and beat up the preacher. Mind you people do some pretty violent things when they feel their territory is being invaded.
Very nicely done and I hope you write more on this same theme. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2018
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This is a fine poem, Bob. You could about double the size to get more into the mindset of the town folks who'd do such a vicious thing as burn down a church and beat up the preacher. Mind you people do some pretty violent things when they feel their territory is being invaded.
Very nicely done and I hope you write more on this same theme. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 02-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2018
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Five verses is a marathon for me, Gloria. Thank you for stopping by and reading and reviewing. And I do agree with you that violence is so easily spiked these days especially when people feel their space is being intruded on.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That gave me goose-bumps! What a lovely story in a poem, good always rises above evil. I liked that the preacher's son came back angry at what those rednecks did to his father, he loved him and was hurting for him. Well done, lovely poem and enjoyable to read. :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2018
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That gave me goose-bumps! What a lovely story in a poem, good always rises above evil. I liked that the preacher's son came back angry at what those rednecks did to his father, he loved him and was hurting for him. Well done, lovely poem and enjoyable to read. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 02-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2018
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Thank you Sandra. It's great to know I caused goose bumps. The closest I've got to that before is being called goose. I really appreciate you taking the time to read and review.
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You are most welcome, Bob. Your's is the first poem I've I read this morning, and it was a great way to start the day. So, thank you! xx
Comment from kahpot
Excellent this reminds me of a film called the Gambler a story of a son and father I like this work as it tells a wonderful story of peoples Faith and the willingness to help, very well done****kahpot
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Excellent this reminds me of a film called the Gambler a story of a son and father I like this work as it tells a wonderful story of peoples Faith and the willingness to help, very well done****kahpot
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Comment Written 02-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2018
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Thank you kahpot for the five stars and your complimentary review. I really appreciate your reading and reviewing.
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hey Bob, I wish I had a six-star rating for this, I read it a couple of times and the story within is so well written with rhythm and unforced rhyme, but I wanted to give it the rating it deserves for the emotion it evokes. That is one of poetry's greatest purposes and the hardest thing to capture. You can be proficient, formal and technical in style etc, but still not able to inject that feeling.( I rarely see it, Bob). But you do it here in this poem with the fabulous ending. I just loved it and I hope someone else does and it gets the rating it deserves.
My grandfather loved to bare-knuckle fight, lol, he was quite good at it too, apparently. Family history says that the Polish immigrants that built the Snowy mountain River Scheme, the big hyrdo dam, taught him when he was a rookie police officer there. He had many careers and ended up working in totally different fields, but he started out as a cop.
I saw no errors and it was a pleasure to read and review this one, Bob, and lovely to see you at FS today, cheers, Ana.
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reply by the author on 02-Aug-2018
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Hey Bob, I wish I had a six-star rating for this, I read it a couple of times and the story within is so well written with rhythm and unforced rhyme, but I wanted to give it the rating it deserves for the emotion it evokes. That is one of poetry's greatest purposes and the hardest thing to capture. You can be proficient, formal and technical in style etc, but still not able to inject that feeling.( I rarely see it, Bob). But you do it here in this poem with the fabulous ending. I just loved it and I hope someone else does and it gets the rating it deserves.
My grandfather loved to bare-knuckle fight, lol, he was quite good at it too, apparently. Family history says that the Polish immigrants that built the Snowy mountain River Scheme, the big hyrdo dam, taught him when he was a rookie police officer there. He had many careers and ended up working in totally different fields, but he started out as a cop.
I saw no errors and it was a pleasure to read and review this one, Bob, and lovely to see you at FS today, cheers, Ana.
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Comment Written 02-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2018
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Thank you for your kind words, Ana. They are much appreciated.
I love the sound of your grand dad, wish we had some coppers like him around now to apply some discipline to the young hooligans roaming around our streets now.
Did he work on the Snowy. We're not far from there, we now live in Junee.
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No he didn't work on it, he policed it, lol and discipline is my Granfather's middle name, adn I have no doubt he could reform, I think you would like him, he is a realist, that's for sure and is always saying what you said. Cheers, Ana.