The Murder
A tale of murder22 total reviews
Comment from Thomas Bowling
This is excellent. The poor guy's gonna hang until he's pronounced dead. A client was explaining his situation to Sherlock. He said I ain't guilty. Sherlock said ain't no. Aren't, yes. I didn't do nothing'. Nothin' no. Nothing, yes. I'm gonna be hung. Hung, no. Hanged, yes.
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This is excellent. The poor guy's gonna hang until he's pronounced dead. A client was explaining his situation to Sherlock. He said I ain't guilty. Sherlock said ain't no. Aren't, yes. I didn't do nothing'. Nothin' no. Nothing, yes. I'm gonna be hung. Hung, no. Hanged, yes.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2018
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Entertaining that Sherlock. Thank you Thomas for your awesome review
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Oh my goodness Pam! He's guilty and will pay the price by being incarcerated or even electrocuted in your country! Murder most foul here! He he he, love Dolly x
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Oh my goodness Pam! He's guilty and will pay the price by being incarcerated or even electrocuted in your country! Murder most foul here! He he he, love Dolly x
Comment Written 02-Aug-2018
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Teehee. Dolly. Thank you for the excellent review
Comment from royowen
Wondefully imaginative and very creative murder story, no wonder they had their suspect blind, both innocent and guilty at the same time. Your poetic style is perfectly suited to this story in a poem, excellent flow and rhymed superbness. Well done, blessings, Roy
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Wondefully imaginative and very creative murder story, no wonder they had their suspect blind, both innocent and guilty at the same time. Your poetic style is perfectly suited to this story in a poem, excellent flow and rhymed superbness. Well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 02-Aug-2018
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Thank you Roy for your excellent review
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Most welcome
Comment from apky
This is excellent, in fact brilliant, Pamusart. It kept me going, wondering where the story would lead to. At the end of the excellent poem I was awarded with a great twist which could have many different interpretations, depending on the reader and their inclinations. You made fantatstic use of rhythm and rhyme.
Now I'd better go back to my writing before I'm stuck here for hours.
Thanks for this fabulous poem.
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This is excellent, in fact brilliant, Pamusart. It kept me going, wondering where the story would lead to. At the end of the excellent poem I was awarded with a great twist which could have many different interpretations, depending on the reader and their inclinations. You made fantatstic use of rhythm and rhyme.
Now I'd better go back to my writing before I'm stuck here for hours.
Thanks for this fabulous poem.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2018
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Wow apky. Thank you for such kind words and encouragement. I appreciate that and your awesome review very much
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written story poem about someone with a split personality is not always aware of the other side of their character and cannot understand why they always get in trouble and know more than they should know.
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A very well-written story poem about someone with a split personality is not always aware of the other side of their character and cannot understand why they always get in trouble and know more than they should know.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2018
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Thank you Sandra again for your wonderful review
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"The Murder", is an extremely well-written and thought-provoking piece. This talented poet's work was fascinating to both read and review. To me, this is a six, but unfortunately I only have fives left. I look forward to seeing your next post.
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"The Murder", is an extremely well-written and thought-provoking piece. This talented poet's work was fascinating to both read and review. To me, this is a six, but unfortunately I only have fives left. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2018
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Thank you duchessofdrumb for your wonderful review
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Pamusart, you certainly deserved the wonderful review.
Take care, God bless you and best wishes,
the Duchess
Comment from Robbie Yates
Ah - what an excellent poem with a great twist ending. Strong use of rhythm and rhyme, and a good choice of photo. What a brilliant piece. Thank you for sharing it with us :)
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Ah - what an excellent poem with a great twist ending. Strong use of rhythm and rhyme, and a good choice of photo. What a brilliant piece. Thank you for sharing it with us :)
Comment Written 02-Aug-2018
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Thank you Robbie for such a wonderful review
Comment from simonbagh
Wrong time to be in a wrong place and reflecting Honda circumstance it is really too hard to find out the truth or to explain and to prove that you or not guilty
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Wrong time to be in a wrong place and reflecting Honda circumstance it is really too hard to find out the truth or to explain and to prove that you or not guilty
Comment Written 02-Aug-2018
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Thank you simonbagh for your excellent review
Comment from jenintorre
I really like this poem. It tells a good story and moves along at a fast pace. You describe his desperation so well in this poem. Well done. Cheers Jen.
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I really like this poem. It tells a good story and moves along at a fast pace. You describe his desperation so well in this poem. Well done. Cheers Jen.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2018
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Thank you Jen for another stellar review
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hi Pamusart. This one is chilling, especially at the end. I would hate to have multiple personalities, the one is enough to live with.
Great rhyming and rhythm as usual, and you do weave a great tale in your poetry. I liked the ending best of all, it pulled all the threads together very effectively. Good presentation, also.
Good one!! And thanks for sharing it, Ana.
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Hi Pamusart. This one is chilling, especially at the end. I would hate to have multiple personalities, the one is enough to live with.
Great rhyming and rhythm as usual, and you do weave a great tale in your poetry. I liked the ending best of all, it pulled all the threads together very effectively. Good presentation, also.
Good one!! And thanks for sharing it, Ana.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2018
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Thank you Ana for your usual lovely review