Comment from phill doran

Excellent

Hello Anon
Very good writing this. It has pace, got going immediately and took me along with it - and, of course, drew me to the conclusion, although it was not the conclusion I expected.
I think these are strong elements in writing: to engage me early, keep me with you and 'deliver' something on a story level.
100 words is not that much to work with, so I must say you have done very well and it is a strong entry for the competition.
I wish you well with this and your writing in general
cheers
phill

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2018

Thank you, Phil, for giving this a look.

Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Hi Bill,

You did a good job with this piece. Quite a menagerie of creatures but none, it seems the culprit. lol

nice sign off with the last line.

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2018

Thanks, g, for giving this a look. Bill

Comment from brenda faye curtis

Excellent

That's a good story, Bill! Maybe we need to come up with a trap to outwit those sneaky, clever mice! One of my clients has to keep his birdseed in a plastic tub that clamps shut to keep the critters out. Anyway, I like the story and wish you well in the contest!

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2018

Thanks, Brenda.

reply by brenda faye curtis on 03-Jul-2018

You're welcome, Bill. Have a blessed day!

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

Well, Bill, Walmart is trying to stay in business selling large plastic food bins with lids in the pet aisle.

Good job with your 100 word story. I enjoyed reading it. If the sack was left in the garage, of course, you will have visitors. Where is the raccoon? Best wishes on a fun entry. Jan

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2018

Thanks, Jan

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

He he he, a very inventive write and I wish you luck with the contest! You made me smile Bill with the traps you have set and the results! He he he, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2018

Thanks, Dolly.

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Lol. What a lot of wildlife you have out there. Where did you place this sack of bird seed? I find your means of releasing the various wild life interesting - Crisco, huh? I'll learn from your example and avoid the bird seed. The neighbor's cats would eat any bird that stops this way.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2018

Thanks, lyenochka

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Hahahaha, Bill, Oh dear, I think that was a very prudent thing to do. To stop feeding birds, I mean! A great hundred word flash story an wish you good luck in the contest. All the best. Ulla:))

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2018

Thanks, Ulla

Comment from frogbook

Excellent

Hahaha. This was a great one and is it true that you can free things from those sticky traps? I was horrified when I used one as I had not considered the consequences.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2018

Thanks, FB

Comment from judiverse

Excellent

Can't blame you for stopping the bird feeding. They can probably find food for themselves anyway. You certainly trapped a lot of critters, even a cat, no less. Reminds me of how frustrated my father-in=law used to get when the squirrels stole the food he left out for the birds. I think a lot of people can relate to this. Despite your good intentions, the critters prevailed. Well told. Best of luck in the contest. judi

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2018

Thanks, Judi

reply by judiverse on 02-Jul-2018

You're welcome. judi

Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux

Excellent

This is funny and very good. I had no idea that sticky traps would catch so many things. It sounds like you caught everything except a mouse or rat. I like this Bill! Well done!

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2018

Thanks, Jeffrey.