Comment from jenintorre

Excellent

Ha ha. This poem made me smile. I loved the moral (punchline). A very good humorous poem with great accompanying art work. Good luck in the competition.

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2018

Thank you, Jen, for the great review.

Comment from Joy Graham

Excellent

Dear Mystery Poet,

This is a fun contest entry. You did a fine job with the required rhyming. I've not seen that pattern before. It looks good, and I might try it sometime. Great twist ending. Best wishes in the contest.

Sincerely Joy xx

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 27-Jan-2018

Thank you, Joy, for the kind review.

Comment from emptypage

Excellent

This was so good. I read in the beginning because of the pig names--very creative--but you gobbled me up and into the story easily.

I love the change-up in the buildings and the moral... Don't see this done well terribly often in a way that makes me laugh.

Good work.

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 27-Jan-2018

Thanks, EP, for the great review.

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

This speaks amusing two brothers and a sister of a fairy tale living with a twist of violence; well said, well done; thank you for sharing this with us; good luck with the contest. DR ALCREATOR

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 27-Jan-2018

Thank you, ALD.

Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)

Excellent

The moral is likely not clear,
but a mistake is quite hard to hide;
when your house has the features
to hold back killer creatures --
it's useless if you're not inside.
WOW A clear competition for me! I love this and I wish I'd entered the completion but with poems of this quality I would never win! So clever and fun, good luck in the competition kindest regards and bet wishes Meia xx

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 27-Jan-2018

You flatter me, Meia. Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

This is truly a different spin on the fairy tale The Three Little Pigs. You used very cute and descriptive wording. I like the art work you chose. It all went together well. Best wishes in the contest. teri

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 27-Jan-2018

Thank you, Teri.

reply by Teri7 on 27-Jan-2018

you are so welcome!

Comment from Debbie Pope

Excellent

How did you do that. The story is clever enough, but to follow that complex rhyme scheme while doing it is just amazing. My favorite words are "kindling castle." That's exactly what a house made of twigs is, but I would not have thought of it. Good luck in the competition. I see no reason you should not win.

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 27-Jan-2018

Thank you, Debbie, for the kind review. Bill

Comment from Sharon Haiste

Excellent

I think this is a good entry for the 'Fairy Tales... With A Twist' writing prompt.
Well twisted and a good story.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon

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 Comment Written 27-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 27-Jan-2018

Thanks, Sharon, for the nice review. Bill