Capone's Vault
Revenge is always sweet!15 total reviews
Comment from Dan Diego
Reviewed in the blind: Pretty solid story. A great beginning, a mysterious middle, and a satisfying end. There were no spelling or grammar errors. But there was a spacing issue between some sentences. It did not interrupt the flow of the story, though, I was able to breeze through this.
For me, the allure of this story is that you added Capone elements. It took on a good versus evil theme on top of a bully story.
I liked it. If you did not know, you are able to re-open a story and remove all those empty spaces between sentences. Good luck.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2018
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Reviewed in the blind: Pretty solid story. A great beginning, a mysterious middle, and a satisfying end. There were no spelling or grammar errors. But there was a spacing issue between some sentences. It did not interrupt the flow of the story, though, I was able to breeze through this.
For me, the allure of this story is that you added Capone elements. It took on a good versus evil theme on top of a bully story.
I liked it. If you did not know, you are able to re-open a story and remove all those empty spaces between sentences. Good luck.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2018
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Thank you so much, Dan, for your close reading of CAPONE'S VAULT and your king praise. I will look into that spacing problem.
Comment from brenda faye curtis
I loved this story, mostly because I own a copy of Poe's complete works. "The Cask of Amontillado" and "Mask of the Red Death" have inspired me, too. The story is well constructed, entertaining, and a great entry for this contest.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018
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I loved this story, mostly because I own a copy of Poe's complete works. "The Cask of Amontillado" and "Mask of the Red Death" have inspired me, too. The story is well constructed, entertaining, and a great entry for this contest.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018
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So pleased you enjoyed CAPINE'S VAULT, Brenda. Indeed, you guessed which stories inspired it. Thank you for your wonderful praise.
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You're welcome. I hope you have a great day. I think I'll go home and read some Poe!
Comment from royowen
Of all the kidnapping stories I'm likely to read, I think this one would most likely be the most chilling, cold as ice, as calculating a revenge story could be. Well done, good plotting, a good, unsympathetic character like Joey, and a wonderfully cold, calculating instigator and imitator of death. Great job, good luck, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018
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Of all the kidnapping stories I'm likely to read, I think this one would most likely be the most chilling, cold as ice, as calculating a revenge story could be. Well done, good plotting, a good, unsympathetic character like Joey, and a wonderfully cold, calculating instigator and imitator of death. Great job, good luck, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 06-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018
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Thank you, Roy, for the great review. I could not be more delighted by your response to CAPONE'S VAULT.
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Good luck, good write.
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Good luck, good write.
Comment from F. Wehr3
I enjoyed this Poe inspired story. It's from "The Cask of the Amontillado" if I'm not mistaken. I wish you best of luck in the contest.
I only noticed one thing. The use of cowl, which does mean cloak, is most commonly referring to the actual hood of the cloak or monk's habit. So, I paused on it for a moment before realizing what you meant.
Good luck,
Russell
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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018
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I enjoyed this Poe inspired story. It's from "The Cask of the Amontillado" if I'm not mistaken. I wish you best of luck in the contest.
I only noticed one thing. The use of cowl, which does mean cloak, is most commonly referring to the actual hood of the cloak or monk's habit. So, I paused on it for a moment before realizing what you meant.
Good luck,
Russell
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Comment Written 06-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018
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So pleased you enjoyed CAPONE'S VAULT and I appreciate the best wishes, Russell. Yes. "cowl" refers to either the robe or the hood.
Comment from Sugarray77
Excellent entry into the Kidnapped contest prompt. I liked your well thought out tale and how it flowed. The sequencing was good. The photo were spot on too. Good luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018
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Excellent entry into the Kidnapped contest prompt. I liked your well thought out tale and how it flowed. The sequencing was good. The photo were spot on too. Good luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 06-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018
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I truly appreciate your kind praise of CAPONE'S VAULT, Sugarray.