Vanished
a free verse23 total reviews
Comment from His Grayness
WOW ! I certainly can relate to this message of great sadness and disappointment. Our world is indeed in deep trouble and it is time for our elected (and well paid) politicians to start concentrating on what's truly GOOD for America, instead of what kind of power leveraging they can use to hurt others they disagree with and how to leverage their political privileges into cash in their bank accounts! Good job here and hopefully will wake up some of the stupid democrats who cannot seem to see what their party is doing to our nation! HIS GRAYNESS: Vance
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017
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WOW ! I certainly can relate to this message of great sadness and disappointment. Our world is indeed in deep trouble and it is time for our elected (and well paid) politicians to start concentrating on what's truly GOOD for America, instead of what kind of power leveraging they can use to hurt others they disagree with and how to leverage their political privileges into cash in their bank accounts! Good job here and hopefully will wake up some of the stupid democrats who cannot seem to see what their party is doing to our nation! HIS GRAYNESS: Vance
Comment Written 04-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017
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Thanks very much.
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Keep up the faith and energies, it just might work on somebody! lets pray! Vance
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You are always appreciated! Vance
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My joy indeed! Vance
Comment from Sasha
As much as I want things to go back to the way it was, I know that won't happen. Your poem touched me deeply and brought tears to my eyes. So many of us remember to 'good old days' when we could walk to the story at night, leave our doors unlocked, and our children could walk to school with friends... A time when teenagers could go to a concert without going to Heaven... yes, those times have vanished. What saddens me so much is that too many do not remember those days. I fear they have truly vanished.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017
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As much as I want things to go back to the way it was, I know that won't happen. Your poem touched me deeply and brought tears to my eyes. So many of us remember to 'good old days' when we could walk to the story at night, leave our doors unlocked, and our children could walk to school with friends... A time when teenagers could go to a concert without going to Heaven... yes, those times have vanished. What saddens me so much is that too many do not remember those days. I fear they have truly vanished.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017
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Thanks very much.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
This is so true Dawn, the world has become a dangerous place and all because of a handful of terrorists. You never know when they will strike next. Should you allow your child to go to a concert? Should you take a walk? Good Job. Nancy
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017
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This is so true Dawn, the world has become a dangerous place and all because of a handful of terrorists. You never know when they will strike next. Should you allow your child to go to a concert? Should you take a walk? Good Job. Nancy
Comment Written 04-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017
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Thanks very much.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
That is why you are who you are. You took the trials of today and expertly put them together in a very wonderfully expressed piece. I tried to find the one part that touched me and I believe it was 'teenagers could go to a concert without going to Heaven.'
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017
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That is why you are who you are. You took the trials of today and expertly put them together in a very wonderfully expressed piece. I tried to find the one part that touched me and I believe it was 'teenagers could go to a concert without going to Heaven.'
Comment Written 04-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017
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Thanks very much.
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes my friend don't we all wish this at times to go back to a place that was secure when people had respect for others and the world was safe alas I don't think this will ever happen were living in a world full of misery and pain well done regards Jill
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017
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Yes my friend don't we all wish this at times to go back to a place that was secure when people had respect for others and the world was safe alas I don't think this will ever happen were living in a world full of misery and pain well done regards Jill
Comment Written 04-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017
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Thanks very much.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written heartfelt poem. It is times we will never get back. The world and the morals of society have changed a lot. Unfortunately, we that grow up in that era are the only ones who can see the difference.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017
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A very well-written heartfelt poem. It is times we will never get back. The world and the morals of society have changed a lot. Unfortunately, we that grow up in that era are the only ones who can see the difference.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017
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Thanks very much.
Comment from rosehill (Wendy)
A beautiful commentary on the sad state of it. The I has been taken from us in order to please the we. But I find that insistence on a group-think-borderless-accepting-of-everything-blaming-everyone-else world has created more selfishness than ever before. I too would love to return to the world of neighbors, Face-to-face friends, not just Facebook ones, responsibility, and respect for others who have earned it, not blindly bestowed. The writing you have done should bring everyone to begin thinking about that part of self that cannot and should not belong to the whole. You can't throw everyone into a blender and not expect them to come out mangled. Thank you for stating my thoughts so eloquently - whether you meant to or not ;) - Wendy
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017
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A beautiful commentary on the sad state of it. The I has been taken from us in order to please the we. But I find that insistence on a group-think-borderless-accepting-of-everything-blaming-everyone-else world has created more selfishness than ever before. I too would love to return to the world of neighbors, Face-to-face friends, not just Facebook ones, responsibility, and respect for others who have earned it, not blindly bestowed. The writing you have done should bring everyone to begin thinking about that part of self that cannot and should not belong to the whole. You can't throw everyone into a blender and not expect them to come out mangled. Thank you for stating my thoughts so eloquently - whether you meant to or not ;) - Wendy
Comment Written 04-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017
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Thanks very much. (I meant to. *smile*)
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
This brings to mind just how times have changed, Dawn --
and I've so often said to my husband - it's not for the better -
People seem less caring - no manners or consideration -
and one is afraid to let our children go out and enjoy themselves
for fear something horrendous will happen to them.
I wouldn't lend it.
Not even for a moment.- might I suggest you make this a run-on sentence, Dawn:
I wouldn't lend it,
not even for a moment.
Blessings,
Margaret
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017
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This brings to mind just how times have changed, Dawn --
and I've so often said to my husband - it's not for the better -
People seem less caring - no manners or consideration -
and one is afraid to let our children go out and enjoy themselves
for fear something horrendous will happen to them.
I wouldn't lend it.
Not even for a moment.- might I suggest you make this a run-on sentence, Dawn:
I wouldn't lend it,
not even for a moment.
Blessings,
Margaret
Comment Written 04-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017
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Thanks very much.
Comment from DR DIP
Very relevant in the wake of the new tragedy on the London bridge this morning
What is this world coming to The innocence is lost Will we ever get that innocence back? I sadly think not. Its a sad sad world indeed
Thanks for sharing Dawn great write
dip
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017
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Very relevant in the wake of the new tragedy on the London bridge this morning
What is this world coming to The innocence is lost Will we ever get that innocence back? I sadly think not. Its a sad sad world indeed
Thanks for sharing Dawn great write
dip
Comment Written 04-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017
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Thanks very much.
Comment from Mitchell Brontė
This was such a poignant poem that journeys through the landmine that life has become,
I wake this morning after another terrible attack on innocent people in my country and reading your words reminds me of how uncomplicated life was, so brilliantly described within your lines.
This free verse is heartfelt, emotional and powerful in it's simplicity capped by what I can only describe as a sublime climax that stopped my heart......I vanished.
Tremendous poem.
Mitchell
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017
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This was such a poignant poem that journeys through the landmine that life has become,
I wake this morning after another terrible attack on innocent people in my country and reading your words reminds me of how uncomplicated life was, so brilliantly described within your lines.
This free verse is heartfelt, emotional and powerful in it's simplicity capped by what I can only describe as a sublime climax that stopped my heart......I vanished.
Tremendous poem.
Mitchell
Comment Written 04-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017
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Thanks very much.