Comment from DR DIP

Excellent

You know Ricky its really hard to appreciate heartfelt lyrics I find without the potential accompanying music or a potential tune to go with the words for that tune can carry with it all the emotion this this song lyrics deserve. It is such an emotional subject and I feel your pain and I hope someone could add a melody to give it justice. Thanks for sharing your heartfelt words

dip

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 02-Jun-2017

True.
Bryan Adams 'The Summer of '69"
Jason's favorite song.
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Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Thanks for sharing your song dedicated to your son. It's wonderful that you honor him with songs and poems and his memory is alive and speaking to you and to those who read. Blessings.

 Comment Written 31-May-2017

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reply by the author on 31-May-2017

Why thanks for your kind words
All parents feel that each child is incredible and dread this result...
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Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)

Excellent

I think these are well written lyrics. It must be very hard to lose a son. But part of him lives on through the organ donations. Take care~Debbie

 Comment Written 31-May-2017

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reply by the author on 03-Jun-2017

Thanks for the kind thoughts and review.
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Comment from Winslow

Excellent

Dear Ricky,

I am sorry about the loss of your son. For a parent that is the most traumatic event that can occur. It seems that you still have a solid connection to Jason. May it always be so.

Warm regards,

Winslow

 Comment Written 31-May-2017

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reply by the author on 03-Jun-2017

Thanks Winslow.
Check out "He Waits Patiently"
Beautiful...
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Comment from LanceHill

Excellent

This is a wonderful tribute. I'm sorry for your loss. Thank you for sharing the gift of life through a parents worst nightmare. I also want to thank you for sharing hope through our Lord and Savior. God bless and I pray comfort over you and your family.

 Comment Written 31-May-2017

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reply by the author on 03-Jun-2017

Thanks Lance.
This pulled down All Times Bestand Ribbon .
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Comment from FxstsLisa

Excellent

Beautiful lyrics about your son Jay. I like the part where you call to your son that your coming, and he tells you there is more for you to accomplish on this earth. Thank you for sharing your grief and my condolences. Blessings

 Comment Written 31-May-2017

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reply by the author on 03-Jun-2017

Thanks a beautiful All Time Best song written in about five minutes...
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Comment from Oatmeal

Excellent

Ricky1024,

Very enchanted atmosphere, non-judgmental, thought provoking, very enjoyable and thrilling. Well chosen words are expressive. Very informative and soulful, full of vivid impressions, effective and impressive.

There was no SPAG. No room for improvement.

I look forward to seeing you again.

Love you,

Oatmeal

 Comment Written 31-May-2017

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reply by the author on 03-Jun-2017

Thanks for the kind thoughts and review.
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Comment from ronnie k

Excellent

Thank you for sharing big piece of your heart, I took a long moment to review in its read the sure meaning of your lyrics, I found a very deep love within this beautiful song.

 Comment Written 31-May-2017

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reply by the author on 03-Jun-2017

Thanks for the kind thoughts and review.
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Comment from Sis Cat

Excellent

First of all, I am sorry for the grievous loss of your son. Your pain pours out in your poem in a song of lament, longing, and questioning God "Why?" This is a particularly strong section because it speaks of a father's grief:

"Seasons change and Holidays are arranged and bring...
"Nothing but Heart-Ache and pain...
"Long, lost, regrets as I continue to sing...
"Continue to sing in vain...

Your sweet poems, such as this one, helps you communicate with your son on a personal and spiritual level. In the conversation you imagine, he speaks words to you, "But(, Dad), there's still (too) much work that must be done." Your son does not want you to come join him now in Heaven, but for you to stay and continue writing poetry. This is a powerful message.

On a technical level, my suggestions are in parenthesis. Your free verse lyrical poem may also read more smoothly without the quotation marks on every line.

Once again, I am sorry for your loss. Writing poetry is a means of processing it.

not

"But dad, there's . . ."

 Comment Written 31-May-2017

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reply by the author on 03-Jun-2017

Thanks cat.
Your continuous support and encouragement jeeps me while.
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Comment from Leena

Excellent

Oh this is so sad and heart wrenching; loss of a loved one. You poem intensely potrays the grief and pain arising out of his absence. Your writing is heart felt, touching and adorable. God bless.

 Comment Written 31-May-2017

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reply by the author on 03-Jun-2017

Thanks for sharing..
Your a darling...
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