Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

This tells an adventure that a child enjoys making and the intervention of reality makes him dishearten and losing the stand of enjoyment; I liked and enjoyed the read.

 Comment Written 19-May-2017

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reply by the author on 19-May-2017

Thank you for the read and review. - Wendy

Comment from Mustang Patty

Excellent

Awww. I loved this. I could see the little boy sailing his 'boat' through the living room on a rainy day. This was well rhymed and flows with a nice rhythm. Another great chapter,
~patty~

 Comment Written 19-May-2017

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reply by the author on 19-May-2017

My kids used to turn the living room into tent city, a pirate ship, a dog pound, whatever struck their fancy on rainy days. Fortunately for Mom, we lived in Southern California where those days were few and far between. But it was so fun to stand in the kitchen and listen to their imagination's soar. I'm glad you liked this one. - Wendy

Comment from nancy_e_davis

Excellent

This is a delight to read Wendy. I stumbled on lines 23-24 and have a suggestion for a change that will help the meter.
I'm at sea, unless the snow stops
then we'll dock and go outside.
The next line, to avoid using dock again maybe "When he's done or When he does" Just a suggestion.
It is really a delightful children's poem. Good Job! Nancy

 Comment Written 19-May-2017

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reply by the author on 19-May-2017

Thanks Nancy. This is just what I am looking for in a review. I had read that stanza over and over and finally threw it into the pot to see what popped up. Much appreciated. - Wendy

reply by nancy_e_davis on 20-May-2017

You are welcome. Hope I helped. Nancy

Comment from Kerry Foley

Excellent

This Olaf chapter is so adorable, I love it, so upbeat, sweet and cute. Just perfect for children's poetry. ~Kerry

 Comment Written 19-May-2017

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reply by the author on 19-May-2017

Thanks Kerry, I'm glad it touched you. - Wendy

reply by Kerry Foley on 19-May-2017

Your welcome, it was really adorable.

Comment from prettybluebirds

Excellent

Excellent. This is a poem most any adventuress young man would love to read. The artwork is cute and compliments the writing. I wish you only the best with your book.

 Comment Written 19-May-2017

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reply by the author on 19-May-2017

Thanks so much for taking a look at my alphabet kids. You can see other chapters, if you wish, which are listed above the title. - Wendy

Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Excellent

Hahaha... Olaf's "whale" was the couch! I love it. I would have gone behind the couch and flipped it over on him, trapping him in its "belly" like Jonah. I'd call it a Bible lesson. :)

 Comment Written 19-May-2017

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reply by the author on 19-May-2017

Thank you Phyllis. Next time I need my plot thickened . . . . ; ) - Wendy

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written adventurous poem with Olaf Owren going to sail the stormy seas if his imagination. Leaving the harbor and will return whenever the snow stops he will go outside

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 Comment Written 19-May-2017

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reply by the author on 19-May-2017

Thanks for the review Sandra - Wendy