Sometimes
Pining for what used to be33 total reviews
Comment from Rasmine
Good poem. My cat wants me to pet her as I write this--LOL!
My favorite part is:
Then, I recall the gentleness of your sweet touch
How holding you made me feel so much
The taste of your kiss. The look in your eye
How could I have ever told you goodbye
Thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 07-May-2017
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Good poem. My cat wants me to pet her as I write this--LOL!
My favorite part is:
Then, I recall the gentleness of your sweet touch
How holding you made me feel so much
The taste of your kiss. The look in your eye
How could I have ever told you goodbye
Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 01-May-2017
reply by the author on 07-May-2017
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Comment from padumachitta
hi an interesting way to go about this lyric writing contest. I like the idea and the images that it makes for me.
odd it is that people must put names to things...to me this is a stand alone song...could be any one,and it is bittersweet
reply by the author on 07-May-2017
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hi an interesting way to go about this lyric writing contest. I like the idea and the images that it makes for me.
odd it is that people must put names to things...to me this is a stand alone song...could be any one,and it is bittersweet
Comment Written 29-Apr-2017
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Comment from Dan-C
Very good. I can see ol' Willie singing this song between "Whiskey River" and "Angel Flying Too Close To The Ground."
I enjoyed reading it and singing it in my head. keep up the good work.
Thank you for sharing,
Dan
reply by the author on 09-May-2017
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Very good. I can see ol' Willie singing this song between "Whiskey River" and "Angel Flying Too Close To The Ground."
I enjoyed reading it and singing it in my head. keep up the good work.
Thank you for sharing,
Dan
Comment Written 29-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 09-May-2017
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Writing Country music has always been my preferred genre.
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Poet,
I thought this was a great entry for the lyrics contest. I thought it was original and sweet and melancholy, too. An unexpected combination -- well, maybe not for a country song -- *smile* -- but for this place. Good luck!
reply by the author on 09-May-2017
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Dear Mystery Poet,
I thought this was a great entry for the lyrics contest. I thought it was original and sweet and melancholy, too. An unexpected combination -- well, maybe not for a country song -- *smile* -- but for this place. Good luck!
Comment Written 29-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 09-May-2017
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Glad you enjoyed these lyrics.
Appreciate the comments.
Country music is said to be "three chords and the truth."
Comment from Oatmeal
I am a really big fan of Willie Nelson. I have been his fan for about 40 years now. He was the first Country singer I liked.
This could make a nice country duet. Maybe Kristofferson and Parton together. They've done it before.
Arrangement and narrations are very good. Chosen explanations are made very clear and descriptive. The descriptive words are well chosen. Telling things very plain and comprehensible.
I saw no SPAG and no typos. Everything looked in place.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 09-May-2017
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I am a really big fan of Willie Nelson. I have been his fan for about 40 years now. He was the first Country singer I liked.
This could make a nice country duet. Maybe Kristofferson and Parton together. They've done it before.
Arrangement and narrations are very good. Chosen explanations are made very clear and descriptive. The descriptive words are well chosen. Telling things very plain and comprehensible.
I saw no SPAG and no typos. Everything looked in place.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 28-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 09-May-2017
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Now that the contest is over, I can respond to the reviews I received.
Glad you enjoyed these lyrics.
Writing Country music has always been my most preferred genre, although as a Freelance Writer, I am into penning several different fields of writing.
Comment from estory
I think it's an interesting concept, kind of blending theatre and music in one form. it comes off sounding rather dramatic, in a romantic sort of style. its difficult to say what the effect would be without hearing the music this is intended to be set to. You might want to consider doing a sound track with this to round it out. estory
reply by the author on 09-May-2017
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I think it's an interesting concept, kind of blending theatre and music in one form. it comes off sounding rather dramatic, in a romantic sort of style. its difficult to say what the effect would be without hearing the music this is intended to be set to. You might want to consider doing a sound track with this to round it out. estory
Comment Written 28-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 09-May-2017
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Now that the contest is over, I can respond to the reviews I received.
Appreciate the comments and you taking the time write a review.
Glad you enjoyed these lyrics.
Writing Country music has always been my most preferred genre, although as a Freelance Writer, I do dabble in others as well.
Comment from Pantygynt
The narrator here reminded me of Maurice Chevalier in Gigi singing Ah yes, I remember it well. OMG that was 1958. It is nothing like it in one respect but the sentiment is I feel the same. I would love to hear this one "got at" by a good composer.
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The narrator here reminded me of Maurice Chevalier in Gigi singing Ah yes, I remember it well. OMG that was 1958. It is nothing like it in one respect but the sentiment is I feel the same. I would love to hear this one "got at" by a good composer.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2017
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Comment from nuthead
This is wonderfully, cleverly arranged. The alternating dialogue with song works so well. This would make a powerful performance art piece. I recently watched several YouTube performance art videos, and Andrea Gibson's 'Maybe I Need You' comes to mind. Her performance started with song and guitar then right into a powerful poetry recitation. Yours feel more melancholic (in a good way) than her piece, but would make a great performance piece. :)
Fabulous, the progression of both dialogue and song. Well done!
reply by the author on 09-May-2017
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This is wonderfully, cleverly arranged. The alternating dialogue with song works so well. This would make a powerful performance art piece. I recently watched several YouTube performance art videos, and Andrea Gibson's 'Maybe I Need You' comes to mind. Her performance started with song and guitar then right into a powerful poetry recitation. Yours feel more melancholic (in a good way) than her piece, but would make a great performance piece. :)
Fabulous, the progression of both dialogue and song. Well done!
Comment Written 28-Apr-2017
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Comment from RodG
A mournful country-western song in the classic tradition. I can almost hear Jim Reeves and Patsy Cline speaking/singing. We find ourselves empathizing with both characters.
reply by the author on 09-May-2017
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A mournful country-western song in the classic tradition. I can almost hear Jim Reeves and Patsy Cline speaking/singing. We find ourselves empathizing with both characters.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2017
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In a lot of breakups, don't both sides wish they could share one more experience together...sometimes?
Comment from nancyrabbrose
I think your song lyrics are good. I was wondering if you could incorporate the narrator's words into the song, if they aren't already. Yes, I get what you mean by "sometimes". Excellent work. I would love to hear the melody.
reply by the author on 09-May-2017
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I think your song lyrics are good. I was wondering if you could incorporate the narrator's words into the song, if they aren't already. Yes, I get what you mean by "sometimes". Excellent work. I would love to hear the melody.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2017
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