Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Excellent

Yes my friend this is well written and you have rally good rhyming a good fun poem that children will no doubt enjoy well done regards Jill

 Comment Written 07-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 07-Apr-2017

Glad I could give you a pleasant read today. Thanks for the R & R. - Wendy

Comment from Nikki-Nicole

Excellent

Zachariah Zumbi' is a GREAT READ for children.
This poem tells a story that magically comes to life for young children.
It rhymes.
The artwork is a beautiful image for a child to see while reading this poem.
Thanks for sharing your poem.
Good luck with your future writing!
-Nicole-

 Comment Written 07-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 07-Apr-2017

Thank you Miss Nikki. My grandson particularly liked this when I read it to him last night. He knew it was about him. Thanks for the good luck wish too. - Wendy

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written children's story. The boy loves his toys so much he insists they all have to sleep with him on his bed. He have so many toys that there was not very much space left for him in the bed.

 Comment Written 07-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 07-Apr-2017

Thanks for the R & R Sandra. - Wendy

Comment from RodG

Excellent

This poem should delight little boys like my four-year-old nephew.
I love the name Zachariah Zumbi! So unique.
Wonderful description in the middle stanzas of all those toys.
Flawless use of rhyme throughout.
Just a lot of fun to read . . . and I am old! Rod

 Comment Written 07-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 07-Apr-2017

Thanks for the read and review Rod. I always write my kiddy pieces for children and former children. You fall within those perameters, I'm sure. I hope you will read it to him and, when the book comes out, share all twenty-six kids of differing races and countries who can't wait to meet him. - Wendy

reply by RodG on 07-Apr-2017

I will definitely keep you in mind, Wendy.

Comment from Mustang Patty

Excellent

Poor Zachariah! He loves his toys so much. I think he probably doesn't care about falling out of bed-he is secure in the knowledge that his toys are safe! Thank you for sharing,
~patty~

 Comment Written 07-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 07-Apr-2017

Glad you liked this. Yes, my grandson wants everything in bed with him. When he was younger it was not such a big deal, but he is now six and in the 98th percentil for height, so things get a bit crowded these days. Thaks for the R & R. - Wendy

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

What?
No Frankenstein models, ALIEN action figures, or Bela Lugosi as Dracula...in the entire bunch?!?
I'm very disappointed in young Zachariah Zumbi.
Why, he's not a good little boy at all!

Good poem though, Wendy. Excellent rhyming, timing and flow.
Very...cute...
~Dean

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 Comment Written 07-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 07-Apr-2017

Ok, Dean, I will plot out a bloodless paean to the monsters that haunt your being. But not today. I have all sorts of new guests arriving and old leaving so I will be lucky to squeeze a simple, non rhyming, 5-7- five out of the hours. Thanks for the R & R. - Wendy

reply by Dean Kuch on 07-Apr-2017

You're welcome, Wendy. :)

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

Wendy,
I enjoyed your really cute, well-written poem. I love the name of the boy. When read aloud, it just flows out the mouth.

You did an excellent job with rhyme. The many examples of things in the bed were fun & well expressed. You are right about the image--perfect!

I believe young kids will adore this.

In the 2nd line, there seems to be a missing 'h' in the name.

You are like me. I have been skipping around the alphabet for my book project in April.

Good job & thanks for sharing. Jan

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 Comment Written 07-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 07-Apr-2017

Thanks for catching that errant h. I am glad you liked it. All sorts of new guests arriving today so I may just throw together a 5-7-5 and call it a day for tomorrows piece. Wish me luck. - Wendy

reply by Jannypan (Jan) on 07-Apr-2017

haha you don't need luck. Your work speaks for itself. Jan