Nightqueen
She is so beautiful it hurts.She is the Night Queen, Lilith.45 total reviews
Comment from Cindy Warren
This sounds like a good lady to stay away from. The poor fellow in the poem is in way too deep. It seems he's not even capable of thinking for himself. Who'd want that? Surely these are not his own thoughts.
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This sounds like a good lady to stay away from. The poor fellow in the poem is in way too deep. It seems he's not even capable of thinking for himself. Who'd want that? Surely these are not his own thoughts.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017
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He is emotionally drugged by her hypnotic snake like eyes, movements and scent. He is weaker and weaker as the poem draws on...like being savaged by a Tiger....they are about to kill you, yet still,oh so beautiful....thankyou for your review.meia :)
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes this is well written my friend so much imagery in this poem with very good descriptions you have done well in bringing the image to life well done again regards Jill
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Yes this is well written my friend so much imagery in this poem with very good descriptions you have done well in bringing the image to life well done again regards Jill
Comment Written 07-Jan-2017
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Thankyou so mmuch for your very kind comments!Meia :)
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
A very well written ekphrastic poem, my friend. Thank you for the background given in the author notes--It gives the oem a much deeper meaning~Debbie
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A very well written ekphrastic poem, my friend. Thank you for the background given in the author notes--It gives the oem a much deeper meaning~Debbie
Comment Written 07-Jan-2017
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thankyou so much for your very kind and generous review. kindest regards meia :)
Comment from RGstar
A touch of contemporary modern with a little antiquity.
Good use of language, a little rich with adjectives and the nouns relationship but suits your style of writing. fast pace, it moves quickly and deeply. Your profile image seems so young in depth of what you portray and the persons in knowledge of. I guess one reason never judge the book by its cover.
A modern write mixed with thoughts of old.
Well done.
Best wishes.
RG
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A touch of contemporary modern with a little antiquity.
Good use of language, a little rich with adjectives and the nouns relationship but suits your style of writing. fast pace, it moves quickly and deeply. Your profile image seems so young in depth of what you portray and the persons in knowledge of. I guess one reason never judge the book by its cover.
A modern write mixed with thoughts of old.
Well done.
Best wishes.
RG
Comment Written 07-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017
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That is very kind of you to say, I am 38 and was 36 in that picture. But have always been an 'old soul'.more comfortable around older people. Thank-you so much for your excellent critique.kind regards, Meia :)
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That image says much about you, Its striking. I also see in in your writing.
Keep on.
Best wishes
Comment from F. Wehr3
I rather enjoyed this poem. Lots of imagery, intertwining and mingling amongst each other. My only critique would be the use of you instead of she. It leads into a point of view issue for me, maybe it's just me. I did have questions regarding punctuation and whether or not every line should be capitalized, but my knowledge of poetic form is lacking. So I simply say, well done! This was enjoyable.
Take care,
Russell
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017
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I rather enjoyed this poem. Lots of imagery, intertwining and mingling amongst each other. My only critique would be the use of you instead of she. It leads into a point of view issue for me, maybe it's just me. I did have questions regarding punctuation and whether or not every line should be capitalized, but my knowledge of poetic form is lacking. So I simply say, well done! This was enjoyable.
Take care,
Russell
Comment Written 07-Jan-2017
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thankyou so much for your very kind and generous review. kindest regards meia :)
Comment from TAB_that's me
Welcome to Fanstory:)
Wow! Very impressive. Chocked full of vivid concrete imagery.
Loved "All snakelike curls and sinuous curves.
Your pussycat smile,
Betraying only a mere hint of a darting forked tongue."
Hope to read more of your work.
teresa
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017
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Welcome to Fanstory:)
Wow! Very impressive. Chocked full of vivid concrete imagery.
Loved "All snakelike curls and sinuous curves.
Your pussycat smile,
Betraying only a mere hint of a darting forked tongue."
Hope to read more of your work.
teresa
Comment Written 07-Jan-2017
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thankyou so much for your very kind and generous review. And thankyou SO much for becoming a fan/friend :) kindest regards meia :)
Comment from crybry67
Your poem itself has a dark, seductive beauty... Well written, full of vivid imagery. I really enjoyed the information you included in the comments, as I am not so well informed in those areas. It added to the experience. Blessings... Christy
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Your poem itself has a dark, seductive beauty... Well written, full of vivid imagery. I really enjoyed the information you included in the comments, as I am not so well informed in those areas. It added to the experience. Blessings... Christy
Comment Written 07-Jan-2017
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thankyou so much for your very kind and generous review. kindest regards meia :)
Comment from Jackarrie
Hi Meia
I enjoyed reading your free verse poem about the night queen Lilith. She is a temptress and no man would be safe around her. Many women have this power, but only a certain type will use them.
Well done Mary
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Hi Meia
I enjoyed reading your free verse poem about the night queen Lilith. She is a temptress and no man would be safe around her. Many women have this power, but only a certain type will use them.
Well done Mary
Comment Written 07-Jan-2017
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thank-you so much for your very kind and generous review. kindest regards meia :)
Comment from Abby Wilson-hand
oh how I wish I had a six for you
what an amazing write ,hope to see
more of your writing great write
comment written Abby
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oh how I wish I had a six for you
what an amazing write ,hope to see
more of your writing great write
comment written Abby
Comment Written 07-Jan-2017
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thanks you so much for your wonderful review!many thanks Meia xx
Comment from Nan Beeson
Your post about Lilith knocked me for a total loop. I find it to be exceptional in all areas of writing. I loved the occult novels of, I think her name was Marie Corelli in the 1800's. I loved her novel "Lilith" and I will certainly become a fan.
Nan:))
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Your post about Lilith knocked me for a total loop. I find it to be exceptional in all areas of writing. I loved the occult novels of, I think her name was Marie Corelli in the 1800's. I loved her novel "Lilith" and I will certainly become a fan.
Nan:))
Comment Written 07-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017
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thanks you so much for your wonderful and kind review!Thanks so much for fanning me many thanks Meia xx
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You are so very welcome, Meiai. As I told you, your name was in my thoughts and sight when I woke up this morning and I found you when reading one of Portia's posts. How do you pronounce your name and do you nave any memories of past lives, or perhaps you do not believe in them.
Love and Blessings,
Nan:))
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Its pronounced MY-AH but my birth name is Mrgaret. I don't think it suits me at all. You actualy caught me off guard because I am aware of at least two past lives and I remember also being in a place before I was here where I could see the world and there was a glowing golden being that I saw as a column of light, that was God, and he/it communicated with me via our thoughts, rather there was no need to speak in that place.All thoughts were understood.One of my lifes was in Tudor times when I was drowned as a witch. Because as now I had but one mole and that is on the back of my neck and was called a 'wen' nd believed to be used to suckle a 'familiar'. The other was with a big family. I was a boy in that life.I remember the discovery of the planet jupiter. I started speaking full sentences at 2 and was reading adult books by 4....I have always been a very old soul, even when very young....have you any past lives that you remember? love meia :)